July 22nd, 2012 at 12:28am
I agree with the comment below me, a solid background would really make reading a lot easier.
As for the plot of this I like how you turned an abduction into an actual dark theme, like it is. Many people fabricate it with romance anymore.
A few grammar issues I spotted here and there, nothing major though.
Nice plot and idea you have mind, this has great potential.
I think the plot you have going is pretty good, but I was having issues following it, which may or may not have something to do with the fact that I woke up not too long ago. The grammar and spelling are okay, though its something you may want to clean up. Being someone who posts only my rough drafts I'd understand your viewpoint if that were the case!