The Crumbling Pyramid - Comments

This story is absolutely amazing!
I'm kinda sad that I didn't start reading it until it was completely finished
but either way lol
I even went back and watched the I'm Not Okay music video haha
I LOVED the story
can't wait to read more :)

This story is absolutely amazing!
I'm kinda sad that I didn't start reading it until it was completely finished :p
but either way
I LOVED it :)

That was AWESOME!

That was AWESOME!

Aha he quoted the film.
That's adorable.
But
IT'S FINISHED!

Damn. I just realized something. This being done, there's one less of your stories to look forward to.

Anyway, CONGRATS!!! It's posted! It's all up! IT'S DONE!

AND, it's almost done. Like, after the epilogue, I'll have finally read one of your stories where Anette and Mikey ACTUALLY GROW UP AND MAKE IT WORK.

Awwwwwwwwwww. It's sooo sweet! And cute and
I think Gerard and Ray needed more couple time though.

But seriously man, this is AWESOME!

The Pyramid crumbled. Yay.
And trolol, who could ever forget Gerard?
Only the epilogue left...
I THINK I'M GUNNA TEAR UP. D':

OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GODOH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GODOH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GODOH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GODOH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GODOH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GODOH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GODOH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GODOH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GODOH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GODOH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD OH MY GOD!

It's spectacular! NO! It's more than that! It's beautiful, georgous, sexy, hillarious, amazing, super, fantastic, increadible, AND perfect.
Like, do you KNOW how hard it is not for me to just burst into giggles in the middle of class reading this? So hard, it proved impossible and I just got in trouble for not doing my work. But that's not the point. The point is FINALLY MIKEY GREW A PAIR AND YES YES YES!

I have to say, I adore your excessive refrences to Mikey in a James Bond tux.....

MIKEY HIT ANDREW.
YESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS.
Finally.
And Gerard's known about Ray liking him?!
That's just so fucking cute.

I read this story and ihrgeiughnioerhgioerjghrg. I loved the plot. The way that Anette decreased from the top of the food chain to the bottom at such an alarming pace was so dramatic, but amazing.
The message of this story. The message is so inspiring. That you don't need to be popular to be liked. That even if you're unpopular, you can still rule the school.

I can't say anything but thank you.

Shit. TELL ME WHEN YOU UPDATE!!!
I don't always get emails you know.

So, I love that you put Footloose in this. Very typical of you.

I think Mikey shoulda gotten a boner... Just an idea.

Very magnificent chapter(s).

Seamin' Bean. Really? REALLY, JEN?



This was almost you and your escort for homecoming... ::Shifty:

Aw she dedicated it to Mikey.
THAT IS SO CUTE!

i love this story!
there's quite a few characters but you juggle them awesomely, and the fact that characters develop through it so well is just pure awesome.
annette and ray getting nominated made me so happy (':
also, i'm stupidly excited for the whole talent show ting now.
please, please, can they whoop andrew's ass? :')
<3

I'm reading this in the morning and I should be getting ready for school..
Excuse the shitty comment.
LOL they got nominated and through and all that shit.
Ha, Ray and Anette do make a cute couple though...
And Mikey, fail.

I LOVE THIS STORY SO MUCH. Everything is so beautifully written and character developments are awesome as well.

So, with that said...

Is it just me or does Gerard get WAY too into kissing Anette? Like, even during the Grease musical when Gerard and Anette had to kiss and ESPECIALLY in the last chapter... Damn. He really loves getting down and dirty. I mean, I find Gee extremely attractive (especially in your story :D), don't get me wrong. But it's like he really puts his all into Anette and he in general just confuses me with his kissing interests.

And with that, LET'S THINK ABOUT OUR POOR AWKWARD LITTLE MIKEY HERE.

He just needs to call dibs on Anette already and make a mofo'ing move. I mean, even his BROTHER has already beaten him to the punch on ferociously kissing his crush. MIKEY NEEDS TO SHINE, DAMMIT.

But this is such a lovely story nonetheless :)

B-b-b-b-b-b-b-b-b-but MIKEY!!!! **sobs desperately for Mikey to return and continue kissing Anette** DANG YOU JENNIE FISCHER POST ANOTHER CHAPTER THIS INSTANT OR I WILL... I WILL... I'LL DO SOMETHING!!!!

I didn't even focus enough to look for typos because I was too busy laughing at Frank and Bob. Speaking of which omygods they're hillarious. I love Bob so much because of how much he's so... out of place in the gang. I mean, really now? You'd have thought he'd be used to Frank by now but noooo....

So, we're gonna take a moment and talk about Mikey and Anette. Mikey's really pissing me off because he needs to ask out Anette already. Seriously. Now. Like, I'm ready to march into your story and tell him to get his act together because this is rediculous. If he likes her, just tell her already! Stop being all awkward and angsty and... well... Mikey about it. On the other hand, Anette is just as much at fault because she SHOULD have chased after him and been like "Bitch gimme another kiss," and practically rape him, only it wouldn't be rape because you know Mikey wants it too. But if you don't update soon, I'm gonna have to.. do.... something.

Omg I literally died when Ray said Gee's face looked like a hamburger. Like seriously, how?! xD
And Anette and Mikey kissed. :O
Of course Frank likes Gee's tonsils. Obviously.
And oh, I'm sure this - You're face looks like hamburger was meant to be this - Your face looks like a hamburger, right? : D

Oh gods you litterally just saved both my life and my sanity.

Okay, so the whole "What if it doesn't" thing? You. LIke, you've said that to me so many times I lost count. And Denny's? I just love that and I really don't know why. It was a perfect scene to read after tech interviews. I feel like blow darts should have been included somehow though.

I have no criticism this time, more because I don't really feel like looking for anything to critique. I'm sure it's fine though.

Oh and I laughed so hard with Anette and Ray being nominated. I actually walked away from the desk laughing loudly and obnoxiously and my parents told me to shut up and my grandparents glared and said it's not lady-like to be so obnoxious so I told them "But Annie's going to the prom with Ray and everyone thinks they're dating but Ray is GAY!" And shit went down, but it was still funny.