July 4th, 2011 at 08:17pm
I love the characterisation (spelled wrong. Don't judge). Mikey's portrayed really well and for as long as I've known Annette, she's really grown into an awesome character too.
I also really like how you did the auditions scene. "Quiet Please!" "Thank you!" Ahh, theatre.
As far as critisism goes I have two things (trying to be helpful instead of just all praise like the dirt you walk on is holy) There was another part that was a type-o I'm sure when Ray and Annette are talking "I know I’m going to go a part" when she's talking about auditions.
Also, the PoV is a little hard to follow. I mean, I know it's third person so it can be, it just jumps around a hellova lot.
As always, it was spectacular and I really want to read more!
But oooh, theatre. I'm actually quite excited for it to progress and everything, 'coz I don't know nothing about theatre, 'coz we don't have nothing like that, not really.