Creep - Comments

I love your story.. so dark.. so deep..

i just cant actually get over how much i love this story, idk its brilliant xx

such a freakin good story

Write another chapter slutface!<3

Alex winstons song fingers and toes automatically reminded me of this. Great story sorry for being a silent reader for so long

wow tht person who sayd that is fucked, your writing is so unusual but that make you different that others which is good in so many ways, I personally like your writing and this story because it is so different from the cliches other people usually write...even me lol hope you get thru this and be strong
update soon!! ^_^

well...you're writing is actually really good, so...i mean I know this site is partially good for constructive criticism but what that person said wasn't constructive, and it was wrong too. I feel like this isn't really about eating disorders either, so...I mean I'm struggling to get over starving myself and shit right now but I don't have a problem with the mention of starving in your story...but anyway, lookit, they said some stupid shit, but they're dead wrong. Me, and a lot of others really love your writing and really love your story. Don't let one idiot ruin that. They're a butt face. We love your story :) I can't wait to hear more.

Your writing is definitely not shit. Whoever said that is obviously a babbling moron and doesn't know wtf they're talking about. You're an amazing writer, and don't let only one single person make you think you're not. Your writing style is perfectly unique and the way you describe things is utterly amazing. It definitely draws me in.

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first off, this story is brilliant, i have no clue what 'Jasmine whatever the fuck the rest of her retarded name was' was on about, i'd like to see any fucking five year old or even her write one single word as well as you :) She just seems like some angry bitch who felt the need to try to bullshit someone into feeling down about themselves ://
This story is the fucking best, i apologize for my rant :s Jasmine can fuck of :) xx

Wow, this is amazing. Really it is. Don't let people get you down about it, it's perfection

I never ONCE said your writing is shit. Your writing is beautiful, Aris. That person is quite stupid, because I believe an eating disorder is a form of schizophrenia. That cruel person should also educate themselves before they send mean messages to others, especially those with actual talent. I was just trying to give you constructive criticism; don't stop writing! People will always be around to try and bring you down, but if YOU love writing, keep it up!

I'm here for you, love.

This is still a beautiful story, and I love the way you write. I enjoy how, in the beginning, it was very vague and didn't give you much insight on the characters and their past stories/current lives. But, now that this story is 25 chapters in and the story is still be amazingly vague, I'd really like to see more depth to each character. I'm given glimpses, but the glimpses are never enough to make something out of it; all I've been reading has been about bones and pain and blood-curdling torture and such. I'm not saying this is a bad approach—it can be a very good one, if portrayed well—but I'm still left almost completely in the dark, and it's beginning to bother me.

Right now each character is static. They're not very well-rounded, and a bit flat. Meaning, I'm only given one approach and insight on each one; and even what I'm given isn't enough to really layout a basic personality. I'm hoping as this story progresses, it allows me to dip my feet more into their lives and head: not just the negative and painful things they think/feel, but also the things that are neither good nor bad. This will give me more of an opinion and closeness to these characters; they're waiting for you to flesh them out.

Along with chapter-lengths and such. I understand this story is supposed to have short chapters; it gives it a nice, deep feel about it. I adore short-chaptered works/stories as long as each chapter gives me a great impact and allows me to see more into the heads of the characters. But I feel as if the chapters [such as the latest one you had put up] end at a very awkward moment. This may not have been your purpose/intention, but it seems as if you copy-pasted only a spinet of a longer chapter, and cut it off in-between, which gives the ending a very choppy feel. Maybe if you add a closing sort of sentence or paragraph the ending of the chapter will feel a little more concluded and smooth? Just a suggestion.

But, overall, I'd like to see more of a plot development. You write very well, and it'd be nice to see more of you around Mibba. Also, I'm not trying to throw you under the bus, but maybe if you had a nice, more heartfelt approach to getting more comments/subscribers in your A/N you'd get more? Because I feel like I'm being attacked when you put "you comment, I post more. That's the deal," or something like that. It comes off a little harsh and demanding, and most people won't post if they feel like they're being told/forced to. Though maybe it's just me.

Please keep writing! <3

Like the update, even if it was short. Ignore those people who unsubscribed! They don't know a good story when they see one. I like that this story describes perfectly what a lot of people struggle with on a daily basis. If they can't handle it, they need to grow a back bone.

his mind is so twisted, its so interesting :D cant wait to see if he drags peter down with him, or if peter fixes him :) xx

Love the update! This story is like my drug of choice haha, everytime you update, I'm waiting anxiously for the next one.

ugh I can't sleep either/

hmmm sooo tht was intriguin lol
update soon ^_^

brilliant and beautiful as ever ;) cantt wait for more :D x

very intrstin...its so mysterious and dark...very intrstin...
this is lik nuthin ive evr read bfor so im intrigued
update soon ^_^