Creep - Comments

I absolutely love your style of writing, but I'm a little confuse is the main character male of female?

WOW. I'm in love with this story. I finished it in 10 minutes ^.^
I didnt know being skinny was such an important thing :/
It's sad really, how the "perfect skeleton" thinks bones are amazing. I think its sad how he doesnt really love his "fatness." I'm skinny and fat and I dont care. Why? Because I like how I look. I feel fine in my skin ^.^
I wish others could say the same about themselves too </3
Anyways, this is an AMAZING story and you should update, oh I don;t know, everyday ;D

Mecha love. That's what I was envisioning playing.

Steak is gross.

This story is so captivating, and your writing is lovely as usual.
I really hope you update soon.

me mucho gusto, senorita!

I am very interested in your story. Parts of it make me almost cringe, and at some points I have to minimize the window and take a deep breath; but I like it. I like it a lot. I'm also very happy that you're one of the few and far-between who like to use correct spelling, punctuation, and grammar.

I'll definitely be back for more. Great job.

Please update soon, this is extremely interesting and I want to know what happens next.

You write so different.

this story is awesome (: I love the fact that it's not what stories usually portray or something. it's actually quite original lol I like it so keep updating <3

This intrigues me. Can't wait for the next chapter :) Have fun in Kenya!

A bit confusing and a bit creppy, but overall, amazing.

Great job so far. <3 Still a few mistakes (which I will point out a bit next time I comment), but it's not bad enough for me to stop reading. Keep it up, Aris; you've got a talent. (:

I enjoy this. Update?

Meow <3
Love you Aris c:

This is...wonderful. It's I don't want to say 'comforting', but reassuring that someone besides me is feeling the same thing as me. Even if it's just a person in a story.

This is a very interesting story.

Since you said you'd only update when you get comments... I'll just point out a few mistakes. I like the tone and style of the story, though.

Chapter 3:

-You still have "the boy is sat down".

Chapter 5:

-One of your sentences say "His breathe wound down my slender neck and his teeth made contact before his lips- pulling at the tight skin gently." You used the incorrect "breathe". Breathe is like you breathe to live. Breath is like you took a deep breath. Therefore, it should be breath instead of breathe.

-You tend to use commas (,) instead of semi-colons in some sentences throughout the story, but they're not that bad enough to really pinpoint one-by-one.

-Another one of your sentence say, "His breathe hitches and he bites down harder, his teeth coming into contact with my collarbone." It should be breath.

Chapter 6:

-One of your sentences is "You're cold" and you will be to, soon. You used the incorrect "too". And I'm not sure if you meant to put the last part of that sentences out of quotations and a period after it.

Chapter 7:

-One of your sentences: "Yeah. It's disgusting" His breathe turned ragged, and he slowly pushed me away from him. Another incorrect use of "breathe".

-There isn't supposed to be a '-' between each and other.

I'm not trying to put you down about your story, of course (hell I make a lot of mistakes in my stories; it'd be nice if some people pointed it out kindly to me), and I really do like it. Just pointing them out.

Keep it up.

<3<3

I love it, but I would like it more if it were longer. Such amazing-ness shouldn't be so short!