I Will Wait - Comments

A;SDKLGJL;AKSDGJ YES. IT'S BACK!!

I happen to LOVE the new background, well done! But not only do I love the background, but I happen to LOVE what you did for the first chapter! The different POV's was a nice new twist! Not a huge fan of starting from the end, then doing the beginning to the finale, but I think that you'll pull it off just fine!

THE NAME CHANGE WAS DIFFERENT TOO. Dolly instead of Frankie? Interesting! Oh, and adding Frost's pov so soon? (I'm guessing 'The Nightmare' was him?) That was a little unexpected. Same with adding Beth in so early too! Wowza's, looks like the new story is going to be great! Is it always going to be like this? Or is it going to be written in Dolly's pov from here on out? Btw, Dolly and Izzy look like sisters hahaha, love it!

Welp, update soon please! (: Love, love, love! Definitely recommending! (:

there is not enough room for my bucket of feels.
This is like my soul story. It was like so beautiful and perf and just omfg. I loved it so much the first time but I trust your mad skills so I can't wait to see what'll happen next :3

Hello there. Well I don't know if it's my phone playing tricks on me or if you deleted your chapters but I can't find them and read them. The one sentence for a summary should be changed to at least 8 - 15 lines and make it interesting. I like the photographs of your characters especially Frost and Isadora. And the names you picked are pretty good too, Frost is my favourite. That's all I can say. Keep up the great work and share your imagination with everyone on here. XD

HAY WHO MADE YOUR BANNER? ;D

dude omg.
two of the girls are Asian.
I LOVE YOU.
GOOD GOD.

Comment Swap:

The description you interpret in to your story is amazing. I am very happy I was suggested this story because it opened a new genre to me, but I kind of got bored through chapter one because it didn't immdiately catch my attention. Your writing style is very unique, everything just flows together. That could be a good thing in this type of story but others not so much. I love your dialouge, it is very smooth, it's like how I would talk or someone else may talk. And that is very important when writing, you don't want to make it seem like your character isn't 'real' when we know he or she isn't real, I just mean that if they were to pop out of the story and talk to the reader, your characters would fit in with the real world easily. Your diction is very well rounded, not too many difficult words but then not too many simple words either (I have a problem balancing so great job!). I did have a hard time reading the story because of the font, next time maybe make it a little bigger. The layout overall was simple, it didn't distract me and it was a good neutral setting for the story.

Now Ben is kind of my favorite and I really have no idea why, I love Frankie to but I just have a feeling about him. Or I am crazy but thanks for writing such an awesome story.

I love how you keep up with your description the entire way through. That's super important in any story and I think you hit it right on the head. Keep it up!! And I do kind of agree with Gray Fullbuster-sama in the fact that I kind of lost interest in the middle of chapter one. I don't see it as something major, just something to keep in mind when cutting stories into chapters!

This is for the comment swap.

I like the banner you use for this story. It makes me feel like I wanna fly. And the layout is good but I think the font should be a little bigger because I had to strain my eyes a little to read this.

I love the scene you used in the introduction. Personally, I love the sea and I love being on a ferry. So, when I read your description, I can almost imagine myself being there.

Her grandma sounds like an amazing person and Izzie is simply great!

In my opinion, chapter 1 is too long for my liking and I lose interest somewhere in the middle and I really would love to read this. But, this story isn't really the kind of story I would usually read.

However, I envy your writing style and your ability with words. Your sentence flow is just simply beautiful and just... you're a very talented writer.

Kudos.

Oh my, I am so happy that I found this gem of a story, and you as a writer! You have a true gift for the rhythm and flow of storytelling, weaving in all the right details to paint a rich tapestry of character and setting, and your dialogue is so natural I can hear it in my head as I read! Zoe already has me enchanted, just in the first chapter. I am thoroughly savoring the promise of reading every chapter!

Everything in your story seems so developed and lovely. You're so descriptive, and you really paint a picture of what is going on and what people look like in your reader's mind.

All of these characters are super developed. And so is the setting. I love Swan Island, from what I know already. It seems like such a wonderful place and a promising location for a good story.

Sometimes, your characters thoughts can be a little disordered. She can go from looking in the music to thinking/talking about what happened the night before. But it's not really a problem. It's just something that can make your writing seem a tad disorganized. It works, though, don't get me wrong.

Your story is so cute! And I like the length of your chapters. It's not common that Mibbians have such long chapters.

The only thing I would suggest is making the text a little larger in the layout. I would either have to zoom in or lean in real close to my screen.

This is very cute, I like it allot. Very little grammar and spelling errors. I love the layout, I can't seem to get them to work since they changed the site. I can't wait to read more. :)

This story is beautiful, I only read the first chapter but I'm going to go read the rest after this. I think you have such a good idea and it's so original. Then again I don't normally read stories like this, I'm into more darker things. This is still really good and I wish you luck on it. Keep writing.

-Greg.

This story...

Okay, so at first I read this for the comment swap that Dujo created: I thought 'hey, I'll read three to five chapters and comment on those'. But then I got completely sucked into the story and read it all. Your style of writing is quite plainly gorgeous and the little sentences that you would write would make me laugh:

''I was ready to keel over and fall asleep right there, but the fact that Swans Island was a hot spot for creeps kept me awake.''

I don't know why, but this made me smile. :)

“You saw me on Skype last night,” I giggled.''

This made me smile too, as it reminded me of the friendships I have: your descriptions of their relationship makes everything much more personal to the reader, and immediately engages them in the story. I love this, I love this, I love this. I don't usually like romances on Mibba, but yours is just... wonderful. <3

Your style of writing is so beautiful. I love how you put detail in the simplest things, making the reader want to read more. You've really developed Frankie's character really well, as well as the rest of the characters in the story. I'm dying to see what happens between Frankie, and Freddie in the rest of the story as well. Keep up this story, please! It's a keeper for sure!! :)

I absolutely love the attention to detail you put into your descriptions. You set the scene really well in the opening chapters and you build your characters up excellently. I'm very excited for more and you should definitely update soon! I genuinely LOVE Frankie - I think she's an awesome and very deep character.

Awe, I love this story. It's so cute Freddie loves her!

YOU UPDATED! YES!

And way to start out with a Freddie point of view! I love getting into his head because he's just so adorably cute! What's going on with Parker and Izzie?! You gotta update us on them because right now I'm afraid for them!! And can someone please just slap the shit out of Ben? Seriously right now? TALK ABOUT UGLY MOTHER FUCKER STATUS. He needs ta go. Needs ta go.

And again, with the creative names! Way to go! Sorry this comment isn't all that special, I'm super wiped out and just bleh~ BUT THANKS FOR UPDATING! Update again soon!! :D

I don't think I stressed this enough in my previous comment.

I love Freddie. Like... I seriously do.

The beginning of this chapter was just so amazing. I mean, normally, I hate reading stories where the perspectives change around a lot but in this one, you've developed the characters so well that I'm actually interested as to what they have to say - I actually want to read about their thoughts. Oh, and the way you portray his thoughts, gah, I love it. His thoughts are like, so jumbled and and full of run on sentences but it completely works because Freddie is just, this adorably awkward boy.

To the second part of this chapter, I liked it too! Honestly, Frankie has got to be one of my favourite female lead characters, because she's just so real... and accepting of everything. I think that's what makes her so realistic. And during the phone conversation, when Frankie talks about how Lydia is talking about all this charity stuff, it really made me sad for Frankie. If you take that fact, and then piece it together with the fact that Frankie said that Lydia and Ernest were just 'there', it made me think that they made her feel like a charity case... (omg Freddie give her the love she's been denied of her entire life D:).

"She stills and her expression changes and I’m not quite sure what it is that changes, but something has and I want to know what."

^ and this is why I love Freddie and Frankie.

I loved this chapter, if I already didn't make it clear! :D

Oh man, how I love Freddie's thoughts. I read them aloud, the first set in Chapter 23, to my friend, and she was confused. I obviously stated that they were the beautiful love thoughts of a dorky boy. I enjoy both of Freddie and Frankie's point of views.
Also I liked awhile back when it was Parker's point of view as well.

I just want to say this this story is absolutely lovely, and that what you've created between Freddie and Frankie has got to be one of the most beautiful bonds I've ever read about.

“Please stop,” he begged, pressing his forehead to mine. “Please? You’re breaking my heart, Frankie.”

Oh my god, that line.
I adore them, I really, really do.
Your writing, I must add, is also amazing. I'm not the type of reader that loves reading big chunks of text but Frankie's thoughts are just so real and with this story, I've had no problems with reading basically everything. It took me three days to read all the posted chapters and it was honestly worth every second. Please continue writing, this story has grown to be one of my favorites on mibba :D