Teethmarks and Wolf Pelts - Comments

  • Opus 28

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    From Comment Swap//I really, actually enjoy the story so far (I'm at chapter 4). The introduction of characters is smooth and natural, as are the descriptions of them. A lot of wolf-stories give out really weird, hyper white-masculine names to their protags, but I like the names you settled with here. Including the name of your heroine! Priss is lovely.

    I like your grammar and pacing, and I might end up reading the whole thing of my own free will!
    November 13th, 2018 at 08:41am
  • aqwszsedxcdfrfcvg

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    This is really well done in terms of character development. Team Felix. A few grammatical issues that are more preference than actual errors. Nothing an editor won't fix! I don't mind the Twilight vibes either.
    November 7th, 2018 at 05:12am
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    Team Felix he sounds pretty cute Cool
    October 27th, 2013 at 02:44pm
  • Damian Black-Bow

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    I really like the idea of this. I was brought here by comment swap. I'm not usually into these types of stories, but this one was a lot better. I like the way you describe everything that's happening. I hate having to imagine everything that's going on in the story with very little detail given to me, and this is the exact opposite. I'm given all the words and it paints a vivid picture.
    August 17th, 2012 at 02:05am
  • peggy carter.

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    I finished reading. I'm almost in tears because I love this so much! Laughing
    I like the way the plot flowed. It was all very original, but with just the tiniest bit of cliche romance that I love, so I'm SO proud of you for that, I'm serious. I'm a huge fan of you right now, Jojo!
    Anyway, there's so much I'd like to say, but I'm going to cut this off here because I've already subscribed to Let Sleeping Dogs Lie and I want to go read that now. :D <3
    July 18th, 2012 at 06:13pm
  • peggy carter.

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    Chapter 18 now, and Felix and Priss irritate me because it's such an Edward-and-Bella situation with (much more) likeable characters. -le sigh-
    July 18th, 2012 at 05:16pm
  • peggy carter.

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    I'm on Chapter 17 right now so when I finish I'll give you a better comment, but TEAM FELIX TEAM FELIX SCREW YOU LEWIS

    (Felix is cute. Haha.) Shifty
    July 18th, 2012 at 05:06pm
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    My name is Connor, so I instantly felt special!

    I noticed something strange, "three months, but yet you feel." - I think this should either be 'but' or 'yet' (leaning more towards 'yet') but not both.There was also a line that made me dislike the character of Priss a little bit, "so much beauty ruined by the angry expression upon my face."It makes her seem a bit vain.

    Hope I've helped, love the story.
    June 25th, 2012 at 05:20am
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    Thanks for suggesting this to me. I'm on chapter 3 and I love it so far. It's really good. :)
    May 13th, 2012 at 10:26pm
  • Silent Lamb

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    I like this so much! I haven't read a whole lot of stories like this, because they usually aren't my thing but your's just so good!
    April 25th, 2012 at 11:06pm
  • Shameful Happiness

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    Hehe, you need to invest in an editor. Just little mistakes like letters being left off words. Or things like "Let me take me home."
    April 22nd, 2012 at 05:43am
  • Shameful Happiness

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    Ha, magic spit? That's a new one on me, very creative. I had figured this would be a lame cliche type story, but you impress.
    Hehe, coincidentally, I'm also writing a werewolf story, though it's probably not as good as yours.
    April 22nd, 2012 at 03:54am
  • horserideraja

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    I read this in my study hall and started crying. The person next to me got up and walked away. I can't decide I I'm crying cause I'm sad angry or excited....
    March 30th, 2012 at 05:05pm
  • xXLostXSoulXLoverXx

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    Wonder the problem is. Can't wait for more :)
    March 29th, 2012 at 06:10am
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    Here's what I just love it's creepy and just when I think I know whats going to happen something unexpected happens and keeps me at the edge of my seat! I love it!
    March 27th, 2012 at 11:46pm
  • xXLostXSoulXLoverXx

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    I was so team Lewis but not if he's a creepy killer. I'm so sad that Conner died :'( Can't wait for more :)
    March 22nd, 2012 at 04:27am
  • Wynter95

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    So amazing! Cant wait for the next chapter
    March 14th, 2012 at 03:13am
  • SweetCyanide93

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    Glad everything went well with Lewis
    March 14th, 2012 at 01:10am
  • vmusicforlove

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    That chapter was heartbreaking and beautifully written. The poem was beautiful.
    March 9th, 2012 at 09:16am
  • SweetCyanide93

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    NO! he loved her and she was too late. Waah! God I'm tearing up, this is sad. I need a moment to calm down
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    Okay I think I'm good. Update soon
    P.S. Excited for the sequel! (but still a little sad)
    March 9th, 2012 at 02:58am