The Bucket List - Comments

This is a sad story, but your words and emotions with the characters are captivating. Cancer is a hard subject to read for me, especially since I can relate to this story all too well. It is so beautifully told though. You are an amazing writer. Keep up the great writing!

Your grammar has a few mistakes, but nothing you can't fix. The words flow, and I can easily see the scene playing out in my head, which is what I like. It's not to often I see a story that I like (I'm very particular), but this one is very nice, to say the least.
The story is amusing, yet dark. You play the part about cancer nicely into the story. It's not to dramatic, where it seems unbelievable. It's subtle, and the love connection plays nice with the part about the bucket list. Write more and check over before you submit. Extra proof reading never hurt anyone. :)

I don't want my comment to be the same as all of the other ones, but they basically touched all the bases. You're an amazing writer, the words flow together pretty well, and it has good emotion behind it. But as the others have said, cancer is a rough subject to read (and also write).

I found this on my own and not through the whole comment swap and I just had to comment this because I really liked it. It was really tough reading it when it came to talking about the cancer and everything but I pulled through it. I really enjoyed and I can't wait to read more. <3

At the starting, you made a tiny mistake and accidentally wrote It hurt, not the cancer, but the way she knew it hurt my family when it should have probably been her family.
Also, your grammar does have a few more mistakes. I'd consider using Microsoft Word or even Wordpad because they can edit not only the spelling, but also the grammar, too.

I see below me all the comment swap people and I agree. I tried so hard to read this I really did, but I can't bring myself to read through even the first chapter. Cancer is a touchy subject for me but I love that you made a story like this. I hope you get positive feedback. I'm sorry though. I wish I could say something more.

I am so, so sorry but I really couldn't read this! When I realised that it was about cancer I just broke down. I tried to read through the first chapter as I wanted to leave you positive feedback on your story but it just made me feel a little too sad for me to be able to enjoy it as well as I could a year or two ago. From what I can establish from the short part of this I have read, I think you are a fantastic writer and you definitely have a way with words. Your writing is very powerful and most definitely triggers the emotions, which is what a good fiction should do. Once again, am really sorry that I couldn't go into much detail! :( xx

I'm really sorry, but I found this through comment swap and I really couldn't get past the first chapter as it made me feel so emotional. You are a really great writer, you made me really feel something within the first chapter. I think you need to check some grammar here and there, but over all this was really powerful. Well done.

AGRH. Okay one more time before I scream. And sorry I'm using up characters this way. ANYWAYS. The layout does need some work. The picture in the background kind of moves along as you go and it makes it hard to read. If you want I could make you a layout :)

Okay so I was TWO words off. But we've talked about it. And like I said while I was commenting you, don't give up. This story has a lot of potential.

Awwwwwwwwww I'm sorry but I couldn't finish reading your story. It's making me feel so sad! Just from the first chapter though I can tell that you are a very good writer. Like some other commenters, I was brought to your story through comment swap. Cancer is a hard thing to write about. I haven't had anyone really close to me be affected by it, but it's still a very sensitive subject. I applaud you for taking on such a subject and wish you the best in the rest of your writings! :)

Comment swap gave me this story, and when I saw it was about cancer I was really iffy. I've had a lot of personal experiences in the last few years that make it hard for me to read it, so I apologize for only reading the first chapter :(

But overall, the chapter was good; you put great emotion in it, and I like how you made Grace be strong for her family so they wouldn't worry. I feel like a lot of cancer patients feel the way she does; "maybe I should die so my family doesn't have to see me like this." even though they know their family will be devastated to lose them. You have a few grammatical and spelling errors; such as using "their" instead of "there" or "hear" instead of "here," but those are easily fixed by giving your stories an extra look through before you post them :)

This is extremely sad, but very well written. It's a brave topic to write about, and one that I try to stray away from for personal reasons. You have a very amazing idea for it, and you know how to mix sad with a little bit of light and happiness. The only thing I would say, is to change the layout up a bit because when you scroll, the image covers up the text.

that was sadddd D: the picture was a little confusing though because when you scroll it does to so it blocked some of the words :/ sooo...i liked it but it was just the picture sorrrryyyyy!! (COMMENT SWAP)

This is amazing and deserves way more than just seven comments. It's heart breaking. And real. It makes you really feel for Grace and angry at the world. You've done wonderful. Keep it up.

I was brought here by the comment swap feature. :]

I'm really liking this idea you have. It's quite heartbreaking, but at the same time, I really want to see where you take this. I've read two chapters so far, but I figured I'd just shoot you a comment anyway. :)

The first chapter was so bittersweet! At first, I was like, yaaaayyyy she beat the cancer! Then it came back and I was like, D;. Haha. But, of course, it had to or this story wouldn't be happening, right? It sort of reminds me of My Sister's Keeper. They're two totally different stories, but in the sense that the leukemia had gone away (in the book/movie), and then came back and she finally decided she didn't want to fight it anymore. Grace's character somewhat mirrors Kate Fitzgerald's, so that in itself really has me intrigued.

I just have a few critique's I want to mention. Throughout the story, you sort of switch in between third person and first person point of view. For example, in the first chapter:

It hurt, not the cancer, but the way she knew it hurt my family. Her mum, her dad, Russ. They weren’t ready. She wasn’t ready. But she didn’t think that was ever going to happen.

And also here:

Which, is why the idea for me to stay at Aunt Mimi’s was put forward. It was a new start, a place where she could enjoy the summer being a normal person in a town where no one knew her as cancer girl, waiting for Grace to pop my clogs.

There's a few other sentences where you do this but I didn't want to put them all. Lol. I was just wondering if you were doing that intentionally, or maybe you just made a mistake? I figured I'd mention it anyway. But I will keep reading and I will subscribe because this is truly a great story. ^_^.

I really enjoyed the concept behind this and how you took something as devastating as cancer and managed to portray it in a more realistic light instead of only focusing on the negative, depressing aspects of the illness.

As far as concrit goes, I did notice quite a few grammatical errors, but that's nothing that a beta can't help you fix. The sentence structure was also incredibly choppy in a lot of places, and that kind of disrupted the flow, so I was suggest trying to incorporate more variation in sentence structure.

Overall, I enjoyed reading this :)

Update! Also get some things crossed off that list! I wanna see things going :3

So good can't wait to get the list started :D

Ooooooooooh! I like this story!(:
update soon, yea?