PHIIIIIIIIILLLLL!!!! Ok sorry. I did that in the movie theater and my boyfriend was very embarassed.
June 12th, 2012 at 01:59pm
A Taste of Vengeance - Comments
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I like this, although I've only really read the first chapter or two. The one thing I will say is that you should try to remember to put spacing between each paragraph so it's easier to read, flows better, etc. You had a few grammar mistakes that I noticed, as well as spelling errors, but nothing too major that made it unbearable to read or anything. Good job so far!June 12th, 2012 at 07:54am
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However, I do think you should give your story a one-over before you submit. There are some mixed up words and minor grammar errors :] The way your write Steve makes my heart melt.June 12th, 2012 at 12:40am
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Writing* not right lolJune 11th, 2012 at 05:50pm
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Hey! I just wanted to say that even though I've ever seen the movie or any of the supplemental movies of the heroes I love your story. You do a great job explaining the characters and who they are, especially to a girl that's clueless about them. Your right is good too, but the only thing I'm confused about is the tesseract thing they're looking for. Could you please explain it to me? Or if you're saving those details for a later chapter (I'm only on 6) then dont tell me! Keep up the good work!June 11th, 2012 at 05:49pm
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Why are you so amazing? I loved this update so damn much.June 11th, 2012 at 09:17am
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Can't wait to find out what happens next!June 11th, 2012 at 06:34am
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Your better at nicknames then Stark himself. :p
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Lol! Assassins Creed... Amazing.
Ash is probably going to kill Fury now. I wouldn't surprised.
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Loki is a bitch.June 10th, 2012 at 07:53am
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This is just so sweet and romantic! I'm really glad that comment swap led me here. I like Ash's chemistry with the rest of the Avengers, it makes it really funny - and I don't say that often. The only thing I think you should fix is that there needs to be a space between your paragraphs...
Like this. Sometimes it would get hard to read because there wasn't that space. But I'm sure if you fixed that, which as an easy but still agonizingly painfully long to do, it should be fine. I didn't spot too many grammar or spelling mistakes. I really enjoyed this! You have no idea how happy I am that Ash and Steve finally kissed! There are just so many times when they should've done it, but like Steve said, they, “... are the dumbest, most romantically inept people I have ever met.” I can't wait to see what happens next! :)June 10th, 2012 at 06:42am -
THEY KISSED!!!!!!! FINALLY!!!! <3 love this chapter!June 10th, 2012 at 06:01am
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Aww! They finally kissed! I wonder what Tony and Bruce think about it. Update soon!June 10th, 2012 at 05:02am
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Meep! It's about damn time!!June 10th, 2012 at 04:19am
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Correction: he'll be pissed.
Anyways! Lol I can only imagine what Tony and Bruce are doing watching them.
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Damn. I love the confrontations between Ash and Loki.
I just updated my own Cap story :DJune 10th, 2012 at 01:37am -
Well, he will be awkward 5 times worse then before.
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<3June 10th, 2012 at 01:19am -
Ah! Congrats and I hope you have a good time.
Poor Steve.
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Cant wait to find out what happens next!June 9th, 2012 at 01:55am
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congrats on graduating! and I guess good luck on your operation Graduation?? xD
spilled her guts, almost romance, and then anger management issues.. yup, can't wait to read more of this now
June 9th, 2012 at 12:37am
