Since this is for comment swap, this comment only focuses on the first chapter. I have to say that I feel like this is, by far, the most realistic story I’ve read on the site that deals with both abuse and the aftermath of a breakup. I feel like the range of emotions that Mia was experiencing was how most girls tend to deal with the end of a relationship. Instead of throwing herself into a depression, she was levelheaded about it, and I liked the touch that she was actually annoyed by the cliché lines that her sister was feeding her because I feel like most girls feel the same way I thought you did an absolutely amazing job setting up this opening chapter, and I thought the chapter served as a great introduction to the story. There was never a moment where I thought that anything was too much or that the chapter was lacking something. Great job!
I don't care much for the band, but I absolutely loved this story. You have a really beautiful writing style, and I adore how complicated the relationship is between your lead characters. Mia seems realistic and relatable which is fantastic. I didn't notice a lot of grammar or spelling mistakes which is also fantastic! So, all in all, you've created a really wonderful piece. Good luck with your contest! A contest which I think I have also entered, and should work on. xD
This story is actually adorable, I'm really glad I found it. I love the back ground you have, it is so beautiful! I've actually never seen a story like this before, so it is amazingly done and it is also so well written. I usually don't go for Pete fan fictions, but I'm definitely subscribing to this one.