Ohhh, Fall Out Boy. (: I really like it so far. The before and after thing. And then her going back to him. You put detail in the story and I think that's what makes it. Keep updating. I'm subscribing. :)
Well this is awesome already, considering it's only got 2 chapters so far! I love your unique idea behind the storyline. I still feel a sense of mystery behind the characters, but maybe that'll disappear in the next few chapters? Your writing style is amazing and your layout is perfect. I'm really impressed by this - not to mention I love the album!
This is a pretty cool story so far, and I'm curious to see where it goes. I dislike Pete Wentz for personal reasons, but in this story he seems okay. You are really good at writing, I must say, and your style isn't like others I've seen. I also really like the contest, it's so creative, but I'm sure you'll win because this story is just... well, it's GOING TO BE fantastic!
You have me...so intrigued with this. I'm a little sad that it wasn't longer, but I will cope with that when ever you decide to update this story. I will be back here. I will be checking. In fact, I'm subscribing as soon as I post this comment. You are very very VERY good writer and I can't wait to read more. :)
comment swap; This is going to be interesting. :) It's well written, I like how the lyrics break up the story and it's grammatically excellent. :) The descriptions, the connection you put between not only the characters, but you and the reader are excellent as well. Keep up the good work!
Okay, I am going to be stalking this story obsessively now. I really enjoyed the beginning. I'm really looking forward to seeing in Mia and Pete work things out or not. The idea of being intoxicated by sounds really appealing in your story. The part about Pete being a catch is awesome and really true. I also like the layout. Update soon :)
An interesting story for sure. Your dialogue is good between the characters, and your detail was a plus. Your interactions and descriptions are good. You have a talent at writing though and I like the writing style and story. Well done!