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While I'm not a fan of The Wanted, I quite enjoyed the characters you developed both with the band and the original characters. The way in which you've developed the main character's eating disorder is refreshing. She's still a strong character, while still battling her flaws.

And I have to admit that Nathan trying to be her knight in shining armor is swoon-worthy.

Keep up the good work!

Despite your summary request about not commenting on The Wanted, I am breaking that rule. ^_^ I personally adore The Wanted and this is by far the best fanfiction I've read of them! Your chapter titles are perfectly placed and I feel you portrayed them to a T. I adore Gemma, you've done a perfect job portraying her and you write with just the write amount of imagery. Never, ever stop writing because you are truly blessed at it <3

God Bless

xoxo

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I haven't read a lot of the wanted fics so I liked the way you introduced the characters in a way that was easy to follow. Your writing style is really nice and the plot is cute. Good job!

Woot woot for an update! I loved how Nathan cares so much for her, and just found the ending to be perfect for the chapter.

So I don't really listen to the Wanted, so I kind of read this like original fiction, and it's great. Most fanfics are really rushed and unrealistic and way too dramatic, but not this one. I like your writing style and the layout is great.

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I love your layout and your banner! I know that has nothing to do with your writing but I just wanted to put that out there. Like anyone there are few mistakes. But- your plot was intriguing so keep it up :D

Comment swapper:

There are a few mistakes here and there spelling wise and you forget to use the beginning quotation a lot, but other than that I really enjoy reading this. You are a good writer and I enjoyed tuning into each chapter to see what was coming next. I definitely love that Nathan jumped in too defend her, even though her and William were already over. The fact that he was trying to control her really bugged me and I'm so happy she kicked his rear to the curb. GET OUTTA HERE WILLIAM- NO ONE WANTS YOU HERE! Bahaha.

I really like the banner too, it's cute how it points out who is who. Update soon, yeah?

Comment swapper: i have a couple things to say about the story.
it's an okay story for me it was hard to read i couldn't tell when i convo began.
another thing was the comment swappers was very rude, ik some people might think twice before reading, so i'm with @Hello Cold World.
it is a nice story, lovely story. loving the backdrop. and the picture go well together.

The update was amazing and I realized I was a chapter behind. How that happened I do not know, especially when I was the one who told you to update. I'm sorry please forgive me? William is a grade A douche bag. Hennessy and Jay are a little sickeningly sweet to one another yet you can tell they love one another. Silva ditched the crew so he could go out and drink? I'm very disappointed in him. Tsk Tsk. Nathan is such a sweet heart! I'm glad he defended her honor though it was after the break up. The comment below me, I don't think it was rude at all or stupid, you were speaking from experience. I can't wait to read more!

For the "dear comment swappers" message, I don't think that's really necessary. As for me, I don't even know what you're fucking talking about, and who knows what my opinions on this story would be if I did know what this was about.

You're an alright writer, but that one part was in my eyes, incredibly rude and stupid.

I found the whole 'dear comment swappers' thing kind of rude. Maybe you should stop giving a fuck if people like or dislike the Wanted and concentrate more on your story instead of having a go, that's probably the only problem I have with this whole thing. Your theme is really cool and you writing is brilliant, it flows really well and the plot you've used is amazing! You are certainly a writing prodigy!

I liked the writing the plot and the layout was relaxing, just not into the band, seems like a cool band. keep up the good work

Oh my gosh so happy that William is gone, tons off my chest. I can't wait for the next chapter so chop chop love.

YES! I'm so super happy that she got rid of William. He was really annoying. There was just something about him that I didn't like. I'm glad that she realized that he wasn't good for her. :) Thanks for the update!!!

Oh thank God she got rid of that guy. I never did like him. He was too.. perfect.

When are you updating next?

Comment swap lead me here and I'm glad it did.Love it so very much!!The layout is really pretty,and defiently different but in a good way :) please update as soon as you can.I like Gemma!You're a great writer!I'm looking forward to seeing where this is going! didn't see many spelling errors and the font was easy to read

Updateeeee :D

Hey, comment swap brought me here... I dony usually read these sort of fanfictions as I like to avoid 'real life' characters.
with your writing it's easy to follow and I cant spot any mistake at all, although I think it would be easy to read if you split up the paragraphs more as your font is quite small .
I really like your layout, especially the contrast between the writing and the back ground :)
Good luck with your writing :)

Comment swapper here! Loved this. The first thing that drew me in was the layout. I think it's so important to have an original layout on your stories, because a bland, generic one can sometimes turn readers off.

The story was great as well. I loved your description, and your character development, and how you made me connect with both Nathan and Gemma in only seven chapters. I definitely can't wait to see what comes next.