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i'm from the comment swap thing, aha. this is really good. :) i seriously thought this going to be you me at six, but hey, it's still good.;)

Hey, I'm from comment swap :) when I read the title, I thought it was going to be a YMAS fic! No big deal though, I like the Wanted too.
This story is uber adorable. Nathan is exactly the way I imagine him being and you got the other guys right too! I like Gemma's character and you've made William the perfect baddie.
Keep up the good work!

William is dumb and should just kick rocks. The sooner he leaves the picture, the sooner she can start to fall for Nathan!

But seriously is he some sort of middle schooler? He jumped to conclusions so quickly, I mean, okay yeah she was holding hands with Nath but like, it's not like it was a picture of them swapping spit or anything. I don't know, I just think he unnecessarily jumped to conclusions. He just needs to get over himself and hear her out.

I mean I guess it'd be good for Gemma and William to make amends as to not end things on a sour note but I still don't like him.

William is pretty good looking, I can honestly see why Gemma swoons over him, but still not swinging for team William and probably will ever swing for team William. Team Nathan for forever!

Oh Gemma how blind are you my dear, you could clearly see Nathan does not like William, because the minute she starts talking about him Nathan goes in to I hate my life mode, or more like I hate my iPhone right now.

Again that tingly sensation was another sign! Damn you Hennessy for canceling, but I bet you it was so planed, that Max got her to cancel because Nathan was right there, Max knew that Nathan would step in to play night and shining armor.

I'm so glad Gemma is able to be so care free around Nathan and because she is like this I think is should give her even more of a reason to give it a try, though I know she doesn't know that Nathan really likes her yet.

This place should be there place, well the place that Nathan has taken her, it probably means a lot to her later on, and will become a place they will meet when times get hard.

That was a lot to let off her shoulders and honestly I'm glad she did that with Nathan because you can tell he will keep this secret and take it to his grave. You know he has her heart at his best interest.

Amazing chapter BFSF!

First things first. I absolutely adore your layout. It's cute. I noticed right off the bat that you should change your writing format. It's all bunched up when it should be double entered with the dialogue separate. Sorry, I just wanted to tell you since the editors will be reigning power and could threaten your story.

The style itself is great. You don't overly use dialogue and you have a knack for giving details which is sadly hard to come by now and days. I'm a stranger to this band, but you make it easy to read about them. I'll definitely be keeping an eye out for updates.

I like The Wanted. I think their music is happy and just has a good vibe. I love your writing style, I like the plot. I love how there are very few spelling and grammar errors. That makes the story more enjoyable to read. I like how you describe your characters, it makes it easier to visualize them. I think your making the story better by not rushing it, I think that's a plus to it because a rushed story just starts to not make sense. Well, I hope you continue on and keep writing, I'll keep reading. :)

Comment swap. I have never, once, herd of this band. But I really admire your word choice and writing style. I like how it isn't sudden romance, I like how it takes its time. Each of the characters is well designed and they all fit their descriptions as they should. I only read to chapter five, but I find that I enjoy this story so I may continue reading :)

A comment swapper. I really like this story. I love the detail in it and all the charecters. Not to sure as to who The Wanted are but I liked it and it makes me want to look the group up. I cant wait to continue reading on!

It's nice to see a fan fic of such a drastic move and she isn't insane or something. I admit, I've only listened to one song of The Wanted, but I've read a couple of fan fictions and most of them have the whole 'love at first sight' thing. The story isn't too rushed you know? It's great to see people grow. The characters are introduced very well. I can see this plot going somewhere good. Keep going with this!

I love this. It's very well written! I love how detailed you get. It's better than a lot of the stories I've read. And I adore The Wanted. They are fantastic! Keep up the good work! (:

This is from the comment swap - so I'm not sure who this is about or the fandom.

What a big leap, America to England? That's one big culture shock. Though it would be nice to see an explanation as to how she went from a model to an assistant manager to a boy band as it's a rather big leap.

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I’m happy to see a fan fiction that doesn’t involve someone immediately proclaiming their love for the OC at first sight! But I will be honest: I am having trouble reading this story. Something isn’t quite grabbing my interest, but I cannot place what it is. I’m sorry! Chapter one was short, but it gives a good deal of background information on the band and Gemma, which is very important to the story. I am glad their backgrounds don’t seem “copy and pasted.” I’ve noticed a lot of people mentioning their distaste for their music, but I don’t think that is what should matter in a story. Your characters and their believability are what matters. Great detail throughout the story, and the conversations do not seem forced: they are very believable. I would also like to comment on you chapter titles: I love them! I am always disappointed to see when people only have “Chapter 1, Chapter 2, etc.” …it’s so bla! I was happy to see that you put some thought into your titles! I am also a fan of your layout: It is simple to read and very elegant looking. Best of luck!

After realizing that The Wanted were actually a band, I looked them up and listened to their music as I read the first couple chapters of this story. They aren't my kind of music, I'll admit, but they aren't all that bad either.
Now, to your story. I was expecting something quite different than what I read. It's an interesting concept, her being a former model and how she's ashamed of that. I also liked how the guys in the band immediately wanted to party. It was a good way to introduce their personalities by how they all acted differently in the party situation.

Great job so far!

Another comment swap reader! This was an interesting read. I don't know much about The Wanted, but you're spinning a good tale, I think. Your grammar and punctuation is mostly correct -- just a few things here and there that may not even be noticeable to everyone. I have to subscribe now just so I can see if Nathan ever gets Gemma!

Hola! Like many of the other comments you have received recently, I am also from comment swap!
I, myself, am not a huge fan of The Wanted. I have heard maybe two songs by them, which were pretty good, but I just never came to really love their music as much as I know a lot of people who do. Other than that though, I was pleasantly surprised at this story. It was a lot different than most band fan-fics that I have read. Most of them involve a fan meeting the band and becoming friends or going to high school with the band members or thing such as that. I liked that it was different in that she actually works with them. Where that creates a whole new set of boundaries that she should have with them, considering that it would be a "work relationship" that probably wouldn't be tolerated all that well. Her attitude is very interesting and I really would love to know more about her. Her taste in men is extremely interesting in that she goes for much older men. And that just created a whole other problem, since Nathan has taken an extreme liking to her, and he's what? Two years younger than her? Age can be a key problem in relationships, and I really like that you used that in this story. Your details in your writing are wonderful and the substance of everything that you write seems very important, and not just a filler like most people use. It seems like you plan everything out very well, and this story is just amazingly written. I hope that you continue writing this, because it is just extremely wonderful. You have peaked my interest, and I have now gladly become a subscriber. Thank you for writing this! :)

I really enjoy the storyline and I don't have a clue as to who the band members are, but this story makes me wanna look them up. But I'm really excited to see where this goes and I'll continue to await the next chapter. Haha, update soon (:

Comment-swapper here!

Honestly speaking, this is my first 'The Wanted' fanfic I've read. I'm kinda lucky (I'd guess?) since I know who these guys are and coincidentally, I find Nathan the cutest as well. Unfortunately, I'm too old for him (and the lads from 1D as well, whom I fancied so much )

*What's up with these British lads suddenly taking over the world with their charming accents and horrendous dance moves?*

Okay, back to the real commentary. Despite having a few typo errors and grammar mistakes, I actually enjoyed this. Believe it or not, I'm not the type to read all the chapters in a fic through comment-swap. However, this story kinda pull my heart-strings a bit seeing that Gemma's the older woman (I can relate to that) who would no way date a younger guy, no matter how hot he was. I feel bad for Nathan. I can picture his disappointment in that youthful, cute face of his

Update soon!

I'm from comment swap, and as soon as I saw The Wanted, I wanted to bash my head into a wall because I really (and I mean REALLY) don't like them. But I pushed that out of my head because I think you deserve an unbiased comment.

And with that said, very good job! Well written and descriptive, nice layout, and good plot.

Good job! <3

hey i have come due to comment swap an i do like the wanted i dont really know anything about them really just a few of their songs but this is very enjoyable i love how she trusts nathan with her secret so much an that he actually listens

Helllo, I've come here via comment swap.
I'm not really familiar with the Wanted, but this story makes me want to cyber stalk them through Youtube c;
I really like your story, and even though I'm only on the first chapter I feel like I'm already getting hooked on this one. You do a really great job with your writing, and I can't wait to read more.

-Jess xx