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The comment swap brought me here, and I have no clue who The Wanted is. So I read it like an original fiction. I like the story. Its cute. I like how there are several layers to Gemma. I can't help but wonder if Gemme's eating disorder will have any impact later in the story? Keep writing I think you have a really great story here.

You should definitely update this like now. I wanna know what happens next!

I am a fan of The Wanted's music. So I am glad that comment swap brang me here.:)
 I really like the layout, it suits the story. Also I really like Gemma's personality!! The way Nathan and her can talk to each other, spilling secrets when they've known each other in a short time, is amazing! Finally, there were not a lot of grammar mistakes, good job!

Comment swap. I read the first chapter to just get a feel for your writing. As it is, your grammar and everything is good, not many mistakes there. I have no honest clue who The Wanted are but thats fine, I still highly enjoyed this.

I don't think this is unrealistic, some more details about her past may be nice, but hey, its your story. Granted I didn't read the rest so I can't talk. Anyways, nice work and remember to write for you, not for anyone else

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Hey comment swap brought me here and I am so glad it did. I don't know much about the band but it is a really amazing story. I didn't see many spelling errors and the font was easy to read and layout didn't hinder anything at all it actually enhanced the story. Keep up the good work:)

Hey, I really enjoyed reading this. The layout is pretty cool and the font is easy to read. But the most important thing is what you’ve written and I think this a very good piece. I really like how you can easily describe things, that’s something I have difficulty with. =)

I'm not really familiar with The Wanted but I still liked it very much. I like how you write the boys, they made me laugh a lot, they all sound so cute. I think Jay is my favorite though, waking up on the floor covered in glitter? Guy knows how to party! On a serious note though this is a pretty good story, I didn't find many grammar issues and I liked it. Good job and keep writing!(:

I agree with Irbisfreak. This is well written, but you've seemed to skip over Gemma getting to know the band. Your spelling and grammar are great, but it just seems a tad unrealistic. However, don't let that stop you from writing--just keep that in mind the next time you type up a chapter. Keep writing!

Uhm, you skipped the part when they're getting to know each other altogether O.o in first chapter Gemma is telling us about her life and next thing she's having a good time with the guys as if they were best friends already O.o but maybe it's just how they roll C: except for that I find it really well-written and cute C: maybe you should work on the realistic aspect of that, because I didn't hear about a contest where the winner becomes an assistant manager of the band, but still it's good C:

not a fan of The Wanted, but I'll pretend it's not references to them while I'm reviewing.

Your layout is nice, clear, easy to read. Nice summary - short and doesn't give away a lot. I'm glad someone on Mibba has the hang of it.

new job. And rather than starting a new sentence here, I'd suggest using a semi colon instead; it'll help the flow of the story to become smoother. This part; managed it, Gemma also requires a semi colon rather than a comma.

I know this to be very typical in fandoms such as You Me At Six, All Time Low, One Direction and apparently now The Wanted; but it stills hits me how utterly unrealistic it is for band members to take an interest in people. Especially such apparent interest straight off; it's not how it would happen. As a human precaution, it's naturally to be slightly wary of new people, and it's hard to get my head around things like this. Meeting someone and then deciding to take them out. All very plastic to me, but I believe my opinion is slightly less popular than my reviews, and I doubt you're going to take much heed, are you?

Wine? Band boys? How very unlikely, but I guess if they want to be gentlemen.

There isn't a lot I can say about spelling and punctuation but there's something about this story that doesn't settle well with me. I don't do typical romance, and it's just... not realistic to me. You've got the rest of Mibba going though, so don't let me get you down. It's got potential, and as stated before punctuation and spelling is an all round good; I wish I could say it was completely original, though. Keep writing <3

P.S. Cynical mood, my apologies in advance for any offense caused by my attempt at feeling better.

Hello, i am from comment swap!! :O I like this story! I only read the first chapter, but i enjoyed it. i like your writing style! To be honest, i have NO idea who the Wanted is, but i liked the story. good job :]

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This story is awesome because 1, I love reading about bands I've never heard of and 2, the storyline seems quite interesting, which is made better because 3, I like everyones personalities and 4, the way you write is awesome. I want more!

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I have never heard The Wanted but I am definitely digging this story. You are a really talented writer. And I really like where this is going. I have nothing negative to say! I am subscribing and totally interested for more!

Okay, seriously, comment swap? Really? The same story three times?

I'm sorry, but I have nothing else to say. I wish I did, but I don't.

With that said, I must fill some space. So. I like their shirts. You know, the clown noses? Those are... cute? Maybe mildly less terrifying than actual clowns. They make funny faces that might be considered cute, but I don't think so. Sorry.

And now I won't touch comment swap for the next couple of hours.

Sorry.
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I'm back and all I have to say is it's still getting better. I'm still not a big fan of the Wanted. I prolly never will be, but this isn't that bad. I hope you continue to write this for those people who do like the Wanted, because you're a good writer, and it'd be a shame to waste that. I wish you good luck. <3

I'm so sorry I got sent here through comment swap and I really do not like the Wanted. I really can't being myself to read this. I'M SORRY. I'm sure it's a good story and judging by other comments it is but I can't read it. I'm an All Time Low reader myself..

I only the band from their latest single "Glad You Came" so right off the bat, I really wasn't interested. That being said I actually like it so far. The beginning was very settle and it really took its time, something else I liked. I also enjoyed your writing style. Good job(:

heeey!!! i'm from the comment swap thing, aha. this is really good. :) i seriously thought this going to be you me at six, and then i saw it was the wanted, and to be honest, i don't really like them, but hey, this was so good. really good actually, keep up the good work!!! ;)

Hey, I'm from the comment swap thing, & I agree with everyone else. I thought this was going to be about YMAS at first, so I was super stoked, but at first I wasn't very excited to read because I don't honestly like The Wanted, but I don't hate them either. After reading, all I could think was "Wow!" Very well written, good introduction to the story & I have to say, I might continue reading :-)