The Familiar Taste of Poison - Comments

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Possible Spoiler warning's from beyond this point. Comments past here are before the edit on the story. I guess Pride is a deadly sin for a reason.

Here from comment swap.
So layout. I'm not really a fan of it, in all honesty. I would have liked to seen a banner or a picture used, just to jazz things up a little. But it's readable so I can't complain!

The first chapter got me interested. You posed a lot of questions, so it was only natural that I wanted to read on to find the answers. Nice trick there. I liked Loki the best, although all of your characters are described very well and I feel as if I can relate to them at times. Your writing is crisp and enjoyable to read. I'm not a member of this fandom nor have I seen the movies etc, but never the less I enjoyed it!

I'm here from comment swap. I've never watched the movie or read the comics so was a little confused but I liked your writing style, it flows nicely and is easy to read. I loved the description you use a lot of visuals. I really enjoyed reading the first 3 chapters.

*Comment Swap*
So despite the fact I've never watched a marvel movie, I still felt like I could follow the plot and understand what you were talking about so good job with that! I like how you portrayed Loki. You have a lovely writing style that really is a pleasure to read. Great job!

I think you do a great job with getting the reader immediately interested. Your first chapter leaves a lot of questions for the reader and it forces them to continue reading. I didn't really see any grammatical errors, so nice job on that. The concept is really interesting to me and like I said before, even if it wasn't interesting, the first chapter is so vague you really need to continue reading in order to feel satisfied. The only thing I would consider is being a little less liberal with your descriptions. I am in agreement with other commenters that you have a gift for imagery, but there was some points where I was getting a little lost in the metaphors. I would just switch it up from time to time in order to keep the reader from feeling bombarded by metaphors and similes. Overall, you have a really great start here! Good luck with your story! You've got wonderful descriptions throughout the story. I love your paragraph and chapter lengths. They're just about perfect. But, I would suggest proofreading a little. There are a few mistakes throughout the piece. Though the story is a little hard for me to follow (probably cause it's just not the genre I'm into), it's still sounds like it has great potential! Keep on writing! :)

I read this all in one sitting! I'm such a marvel fangirl, and I have a major crush on Tom Hiddleston, so I was probably more excited about reading this than I should be. That being said I LOVED IT!! I loved how you took elements of the movie and bended it to your will. It made me smile. You totally captured Loki's character with word choice. I want more! I do have to agree with some of the other comments on the wordy descriptions. But mostly I think because we've all seen the movie so it's like "Been there done that." Other than that it was uber awesome! Write more! :)

From comment swap.
I'm a huge Marvel fan, and I've seen Avengers probably over twenty times. That being said, I thought that I would end up being really picky about reading this fic. But, I really, really liked it. The characterization was amazing, and your use of description and imagery really gave the story life. In some parts, it got a little wordy and just a smidge boring, but that was really nothing all in all.
Great job.

I would have to agree with the comments below me on a couple of things, this is also my first time reading an Avenger fan fic and I do love the series and comic books. So liking this won't be hard.

I liked how the summary was written, I've seen the movie about ten times, so nothing was confusing to get or understand. It set the tone quickly and easily for me to get right into the first chapter and start reading.

And after the first couple of paragraphs, I'm in love with your wording and characterization. I like the narrator's voice here, I like the distraction between Agent Garett and Loki.

It should have startled me, even scared me, that he could move that fast without me noticing because that’s what I was good for, noticing things. -

I liked that line the most, it said a lot about Agent Garett's purpose. It was hard figuring out Agent Garett's gender, but I felt this character seemed emotionless and on;y worried about doing what the mission is and I like that.

Overall, this was good, I thought your descriptions were dead on and not over doing, so that was nice. I would love to read the other chapters when I have time for sure.

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Soooo. This is my first time reading an Avengers fic. I'm a big fan of the movies just haven't really gotten into the fic. Moving on. THIS WAS ABSOLUTELY AMAZING. I had a hard time stopping when I had to. I'm so glad I found this story through comment swap and I'm definitely looking forward to the sequel. The only thing I could critique is that sometimes it got a little wordy/boring when you were describing action scenes and I ended up skipping a few paragraphs here and there.

I'm a massive comic book fan so I loved this. At first I thought it might be in Barton's point of view, but I like how you came up with someone else instead. I'll definitely be checking out your Batman stories too. Recommended and subscribed.

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Okay so basically I'm pretty much in love with Loki so I loved this so much! The description caught my eye and even though the layout is bright, it doesn't make the story harder to read. I'm repeating myself but seriously, Loki is great and I'm really happy I found a story like yours with him in it!

From comment swap!

I haven't watched Avengers, Iron Man, Thor or any of those but I have to say that this story was really interesting! I think the most enjoyable thing about all of this was how great your description was and how much imagery really bought it alive! I could really imagine a lot of the things happening just the way you described it especially since I've seen casting and gifs of Loki and the other characters on tumblr and such. The only thing I'd maybe fix a little is the layout? It's better than the plain jane layout that most other stories have but to me the neon green against black was a little bit much for my eyes but I can see why you'd want the dark undertones for the story.

This was beautiful I can't wait for the sequel

I love it, I feel Lacy's pain. Can't wait for the sequel! Amazing work!

Nooooo Loki!!! THis can't be the end! I'm ready for more!

I can't wait to read it!!! PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!! <3

I was so happy when you updated! And happier when I read your Fantabulous chapters!!!!

Hi! Finally a chapter!! LOVE IT! can't wait for more!

Oh hello there, I've been sent for the good old Comment Swap feature. Right, this defiantly isn't my type of story, but I have to say you have a way of holding a reader to the story and as an writer that is a good quality to have. You definitively have a way with words and for that I applaud you. I think the way you put so much detail in your characters and their emotions is really good and I felt like I could connect with them, and that is another thing I will applaud you for, Well done, its not a easy task to do. I also want to mention the use of the narrator, that was very cleaver and original, I also believe that you made the readers connect with that character by making him feel so real and relatable, like someone was telling you a story right in front of you and taking to the action. Something I must say I am quite jealous of, you are a really good writer. And last but not least, You kept me interested the whole way through the chapters and I hope to see more, anyway good luck with this story and I hope to read more in the future.

This story is just...amazing. I love how gripping it is, and the language you use is just spectacular! I constantly just had to read on. Your adjectives were simply amazing, I'm jealous of your level of vocabulary! At first I was kind of unsure because I'm not a giant fan on these types of stories but immediately you changed my mind. Hopefully I'll manage to finish it and beg you for updates just like the rest of your (seemingly thousands of) fans! Best of luck with it!