The Familiar Taste of Poison - Comments

Okay, comment swapper here. I don't really know a lot about the Avengers, as I have never really gotten into it, but what I found funny is that I knew who S.H.E.I.L.D. was, because of a video game I'd played when I was younger involving the Avengers. :P Anyways, your story is awesome, and although I don't know a lot about the Avengers, I agree with everyone who has said that you have successfully crafted your own plot. Keep it up!

This is cute :) Can't wait for your next update! <3

But before I could stop myself I couldn’t help but think that Loki was more emotional than any woman on her period.
Hahaha, ahh, that sounds like Loki alright :P

“Were you ready to leave darling?” He asked instead of continuing the subject.
'He asked instead of continuing the subject' isn't a complete sentence by itself, so this should be written:
'“Were you ready to leave darling?” he asked instead of continuing the subject.'
Like, it's one sentence.

"Hey Sally," he said.
"Hey Sally?" he asked.
"Hey Sally!" he yelled before sitting down.
"Hey Sally." She sat down at the table.
"Hey Sally!" She sat down at the table.

I love this story. How dare she leave him after he told her he loved her >_> This is exactly how villains are created.

LOVE IT! More soon, please!

It took me forever to get around to writing this, but here I go:

First of all, I adore the layout. I have never watched The Avengers (I know...whaat?) but I like how the layout goes with the story very well. The green contrasts to the black well and the green is just the right shade to still make it easy on my eyes. Your grammar and descriptions are also well played out.

I like how this doesn't seem like your average fanfiction. I like how you crafted your own plot, and I like how original things seem.

Keep up the good work. :)

Coming from comment swap or whatever, this is one story I actually enjoy and actually subscribe too. Haha. But I love the way your words flow and I've yet to see the Avengers, but I can't wait to read your updates :)

I am in love with this!!! Can't wait for the next chapter!

This is amazing! Loki is adorable when he's being a gentleman haha. Can't wait for your next update :)

amazing!

I've never really seen the Avengers so I wasn't quite caught up with the storyline, never the less you're a great writer and I was quickly drawn in to the different characters and the way you had written them. Keep up the good work though, and keep writing because you're great at it!

Fuuuuuckkkk I read Loki and I was like iehutwoicmsuitdgheoru lol. I subscribed to this story, I MUST read it. I'm sure it's amazing, cos it's gonna talk about Avengers, Tesseract and Loki. I dunno if it's gonna talk abou Avengers but it's cool anyway. I loved the first chapter to be honest: My subconscious kept telling me something was very wrong but I felt very, very right.
It sounds to poetry. I adore it.

From the comment swap :)

I freakin' adored Loki in The Avengers! :D But, I didn't 100% understand parts of that movie... which was Tom Hiddleston's fault for having that distracting smirk.
Ahem. But anyway.

And I absolutely had to make sure I could identify them, specially people like Nick Fury.
especially

I really think that you got inside her infected mind very well. I like how she's describing how she feels, but that it doesn't really seem to matter. I like that she is still herself underneath the spell.

Hm,” he smiled devilishly... haha

I adore the first paragraph of chapter 2. That whole part was just written so beautifully.

“You’re a army woman then?”
an army woman

I adore the way you write dialogue, especially Loki's because I feel that it represents him really well. I love how calm and taunting he is. He knows he's the shit. :P

Chapter 3, when she has that dream about him, all I could think was whoa, I hope he can't still read her mind :P

“But you’re hardly trying he added to my thoughts.
Missing the end of the speech here.

Towards the end of chapter 3 where you meant to put 'perfect' in italics, you've forgotten the [/ i] at the end.

I really like this, overall. You have a few mistakes but nothing big. One thing you could work on is your sentence structure because sometimes, they can be a bit awkward to read. Sometimes I feel you write as you think, which doesn't always translate very well to text.

Something else I thought about was that, surely, Loki would not find a love in a human being. Surely, he's above us. I kinda wanted to know what it was about Lacy that made Loki see her as worthy, whilst he wants to kill everyone else/rule over them. Why does he see her as his equal?

Sorry for the crappy comment. My stupid iPod changed it. :(

Sorry for the crappy comment. My stupid iPod changed it. :(

I don't even know what I really read because I have never seen The Avengers but I did enjoy really it though it was anbit confusing to me bit no worries. I thought you wrote it real well and I saw no mistakes. The story is pretty awesome though so I'll recommend it. :) <3

This is really good!

I don't really know who any of the characters are, considering I don't really know much about the Avengers. But other than that, you're a pretty good writer. You should work on elaborating, which is something that I also need to do. But hey, perfect practice makes perfect. You'll get there. :)

I know who Loki is, I've seen Thor, have seen Avengers. But my problem is that I don't know enough to be completely correct in understanding his information and such.

As for the story as a whole. There is little background at all about Loki, the main character which can sometimes work to an advantage but in this case you would only be appealing to major Avengers fans because many outsiders would have no idea who or what you were talking about. I was lost at the start of the summary, tried to make it through the first chapter and found it hard.
The descriptions are amazing and makes your writing very good. I like it a lot but the other problem is don't assume anything about your readers. It's like Kurt Vonnegut says: "Give your readers as much information as possible as soon as possible. To heck with suspense. Readers should have such complete understanding of what is going on, where and why, that they could finish the story themselves, should cockroaches eat the last few pages." Sometimes i get lost in what's going on in this. Had information been in the story more and not on a character page i wouldn't have been lost.

Otherwise excellent writing and keep working hard.
-S

Your story is very well written, but sadly this isn't really my story subject so I didn't get far in to the story, sorry. But I will check out your other stories as they are more to my liking. But anyway about this story like I said I thought is was very well written, and you spend some time on the lay out. well done. The only thing that I could mention about the summary that it maybe isn't very accessible for non Loki/Avengers fans. If I would have just randomly clicked on your story I wouldn't have made it through the summary which is to bad cause your a great writer. Keep up the good work while i'm going to read your other stories :)

Hello! So Even though I am not familiar with Loki I really did enjoy this gem of a story. You use great descriptors to explain everything that you are talking about and your writing style is simple yet very deep and your words flow very easily. I know by just even looking at the title that you have great imagination because it takes a creative brain to come up with that awesome title. (Something that I don’t have, and probably never will! XD) Please continue writing and this story was an absolute pleasure to read! (: