The Familiar Taste of Poison - Comments

Mmmmm, the Avengers. Was it just me, or was everyone (in the movie) hot as hell? Well, Bruce Banner is a little on the older side, but that's okay. Even Loki caught my interest, and I thought he made a VERY good villain.

I'm glad you went into the background of the actual agent, and how you told the story of the mind controlled character and how he treated them. We didn't really get to see that in the movie :]

I have not seen the Avengers, but I am aware of them and the characters, and of course, Loki. Before I get to the chapter, I just want to mention that maybe you could clean up the summary area a bit, and have your notes in the author notes area. Anywho, the chapter was well-written, and explained everything, because I'm not very aware of the avengers, I'm glad to say that I did not feel lost at all. Interesting move on Loki for sedating Lacy. I'm actually curious about what will happen next.

Keep it up!
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I forgot to mention, I subscribed and recommended because i liked it so much :)

I enjoyed this a lot :) The layout is amazing, and it didn't take away from the story so good job there! I love the avengers, but this is the first Avengers fan fic that i have read, and i really liked it. My only sugestion was a little backround so people who are not huge fans of avengers will understand what is going on and who Loki is, and what he can do. Other than that, amazing story!!!

Right off the bat I didn’t enjoy that you explained yourself in the summary. I think you should leave that for the author notes and make the summary into something that leaves your readers wanting more of your story. As for the actual chapter, the writing is wonderful and had a really nice flow; it brought me into the story with the way you described everything. Also I felt strangely connected to the main character and the fact that they were in the situation made it that much more intense to read.

However, you did lose yourself at one point in the story: “’Drink that before you’re sick,’ he handed the glass to me, before turning around and placing a metal chair in front of his bed.” The flow was slightly disrupted when you added a comma when it wasn’t needed. But that was the only flaw I found throughout the chapter.

Lastly (it was previously mentioned) it would have been nice to have a little bit more background as to why Loki had to be defended from new soldiers or law enforcement . I haven’t seen the movie and when writing fanfictions you should always assume your readers have never seen, read, or heard of the canon you’re using. Which, going back to the summary, giving a quick setting of what is going on in the story is great use of the summary! That’s all I have to say though, so good job! It’s really coming along nicely so far. I agree wholeheartedly with what shockbubble had to say. :)

I haven't seen the Avengers but tried my hardest to understand what was going on. Maybe a little insight can be added to give us some info instead of jumping right into the story. You have a very good language and the way you describe most things is very interesting.

As someone who hasn't seen the Avengers, I was a little confused about what was going on -- but good God, did I love reading this. The way you describe the pain and physical feelings is absolutely amazing. Not only do you write it so you could clearly imagine how it felt, but you used such poetic terms. Agrhugh. I love it.

I actually really enjoyed this considering I have no idea about The Avengers having never seen it! But it's really good, and the layout is cool! It's detailed and yeaaah pretty awesome! It wouldn't be something I normally read because like I said I don't know anything about the Avengers! But carry on writing it! :)

Really interesting and very different from any other stories I've read! I can't wait for the next chapter, I'm hooked!

Really interesting!! I like the layout colors, but I feel as though they are a bit hard to read sometimes because of the brightness of the green. But other than that I really liked this and am going to subscribe! I'm interested to see where this is going :D

I remembered you commented on my story and now I suppose comment swap wanted me to return the favor. I've never seen The Avengers nor have I ever read a fanfic about it, but the writing is good. The paragraphs were a bit long for me, but that definitely didn't take away from the story. It was good. :)

I only noticed a few spelling errors,

any body - anybody
myself - me
very very right - very, very right

I've only seen the Avengers once and I am not familiar with Thor or most of the super hero people in the movie. I also don’t understand why your character isn’t ‘super special.’ I would think that she would have some ‘special’ ability if she were being employed by S.H.I.E.L.D, whether she is advanced in technology or super accurate with a gun or weapon. I don’t know, your character info just kind’a threw me off. I also didn’t understand Loki taking the enchantment from a mortal. Did I miss something?

I haven't seen the Avengers yet but I like this. I like the whole concept and storyline so far. Sounds like it will turn out to be a great story. I can no wait for an update. I am actually going to subscribe to this one. Oh and I love the background. It's creative yet doesn't take away from the story area.

I like the concept of this story, especially since I am a HUGE Avengers fan. I love the layout. It's colorful and and the design is great, plus it doesn't take away from the story.
Your descriptions are very clear and it can easily go along with the original story outline.

I've actually not seen The Avengers yet, but I like this, it's interesting. Makes me wanna go stream it!(:

Hmm, this seems very interesting! Please continue updating!