Late Dawns and Early Sunsets - Comments

No! I just found this and I see you haven't updated in years!! I wanna know what happens! Such a good story and such good writing! Love it :)

In the beginning I feel like the chapters sort of drag. Everything happens in a list-like fashion and could really use some detail and fleshing out. I wanted to see more about the characters reasoning for their personal style and why they felt the way they did. Gerard coming out also seemed pretty rushed. I think more detail could have existed in that chapter. So more towards the middle, chapter 5 i think?, frank pulling the knife was a huge 'wtf' moment for me so good job on grabbing the reader's attention and doing it in a really out of the blue way. I also enjoyed Gerard's mom being so supportive! I think that's really important in non-hetero-centric fics so kudos on that, In chapter seven you also mention some older music being new which I guess is to set the date? I would think it would be more effective if this was done earlier in the story.
Overall, the story isn't bad but I think it could really use some fleshing out. The basis of the plot is interesting and good, but I want to know more about all of the characters and about the world that they live in. Great start but remember that your reader always knows less about the story than you do. Thanks for sharing!

AMAZING!!!!! I love the ways this is layed out and eveything amazing!!! I'm glad comment swap bought this up!!!!!
I love the bulid up as well, the way franks concerend about both their lives being at risk. Its adorable and everything! I love it!

You are a talented writer!
I love how extremely well written this is and how it all flows together, I can't believe this is on hiatus!
Like a few people I don't usually read fan fictions about MCR but this is one I would read.
I really like the lay out as well, I'm not sure why but I do!

i loved the story then again i love My Chemical Romance, but rarely read fan fictions about them. the story was extremely well written, making it easy to read. however i wasn't sure about your layout i found it difficult to read but i'll ignore that because the story was just so amazing. the plot to the story was engaging - you should be proud- i'm so glad comment swap brought up your story.

I like to point out that I hardly ever read
fanfics about My Chemical Romance. I like them, yes. But
I'm just very picky about stories I read. :)

However, this was an exception. It's extremely
well written, you should feel proud of that. I hope you
decide to come back and dazzle us with more brilliant
ideas! :D

@ MrBlackwaterPark
Thank you! I had a little help with the theme, but I did most of it myself. I really appreciate your compliments! :-)

@ BitterEndXII
First of all, thank you so much for checking out my story! You're one of my favourite writers on here, it means a lot. Thank you for your compliments, too. My mum is an artist and also an Art teacher in a secondary school, so I've kind of grown up with art everywhere. I felt I had to include something about Caravaggio because I love his work.

First of all, I would like to say the theme is quite outstanding, and I am jealous of your skills :) And second of all, your knack for souping together good descriptions goes well in hand with the plot, and I was intrigued the whole way out.

Amazing job! :)

I thought since you'd been reading my stuff that I would return the favour. I've only had time tonight to get up to chapter five, but this is superb! You are really a very talented writer, not only are the ideas great, but you really seem to have a nack for displaying them - Huzzar! Also, I squealed a tad at your awareness of Caravaggio, a beautiful painter, whom I have several books on!

@ whateverlee
Thank you very much for your lovely comments! :-)

Hey hey comment swap time!

This is cute! I like your writing it's very easy to understand and your grammar seems perfect!
I also like how you describe things as well. The layout is very good at setting the mood too! I really like the picture..well because I like anything with MCR on it. But It is a very good job!

@ Emma _Joe_Ford
It's kind of strange that you say that my story is under-described because the main complaint I get is that I give too much detail. Thanks for your comments!

-comment swap-

Sadly, I am not familiar with "MCR".Therefore, I am probably not the ideal reader. Still, I can comment on grammar and writing style:

I felt this was a little under described. Not very, mind you; but I believe a little more would be useful. Also, I felt some sentences got a little too long. (run-ons) Your spelling and grammar is good, though.

Keep writing;
-Joe

Love it <3 please update

@ narutogirl1994
The first chapter of this fic always seems to have an effect on people and I'm not really sure why. Oh well, thanks for your comment!

@ GemVicious
You've never read MCR fanfic on here before? There is so much of it, WOW. There's actually so much, they made it its own site! But I'm really glad you're enjoying the story and I can't wait to hear what you have to say about all the other chapters and the chapters in the future (when I get off this seemingly never ending hiatus!)

hugs and loves
-katie

I love it :-) I came here from comment swap, boy am I glad I got MCR... I was worried I'd get One Direction or Justin Beiber LOL. I love your writing, it's really fluent and easy to understand. I've never read an MCR fanfic before - I've been strictly Green Day only lol, but you've got me hooked now. I love this <3 subscribed and recommended!! xoxoxo

hmm so far i really like this even though i only read the first chapter. It made me want to understand the characters more and get a full grasp on everything. I really like how your words flow together and make it easy to read. Which i feel ids an important part of writing. Overall I definitely want to read more.

(im from comment swap)

@ Insomniatic Nimrod
Thank you for your lovely comment :)

@ SquiddyTheMouse
@ backinyourhead_
thank you guys, but the story's on hiatus so it could be a while :)

i love this story, and i really need more of it in my life <3 can't wait for the next update.