Late Dawns and Early Sunsets - Comments

Skyrim xDD The person you play is a dragonborn and they have powers, the voice of dragons, which they can use to use shouts in the dragon language. And the most famous of the shouts, the first you get in the game is Fus Ro Dah or Unrelenting Force and it throws the enemies away :D

Skyrim xDD The person you play is a dragonborn and they have powers, the voice of dragons, which they can use to use shouts in the dragon language. And the most famous of the shouts, the first you get in the game is Fus Ro Dah or Unrelenting Force and it throws the enemies away :D

Skyrim xDD The person you play is a dragonborn and they have powers, the voice of dragons, which they can use to use shouts in the dragon language. And the most famous of the shouts, the first you get in the game is Fus Ro Dah or Unrelenting Force and it throws the enemies away :D

Skyrim xDD The person you play is a dragonborn and they have powers, the voice of dragons, which they can use to use shouts in the dragon language. And the most famous of the shouts, the first you get in the game is Fus Ro Dah or Unrelenting Force and it throws the enemies away :D

Skyrim xDD The person you play is a dragonborn and they have powers, the voice of dragons, which they can use to use shouts in the dragon language. And the most famous of the shouts, the first you get in the game is Fus Ro Dah or Unrelenting Force and it throws the enemies away :D

Skyrim xDD The person you play is a dragonborn and they have powers, the voice of dragons, which they can use to use shouts in the dragon language. And the most famous of the shouts, the first you get in the game is Fus Ro Dah or Unrelenting Force and it throws the enemies away :D

Skyrim xDD The person you play is a dragonborn and they have powers, the voice of dragons, which they can use to use shouts in the dragon language. And the most famous of the shouts, the first you get in the game is Fus Ro Dah or Unrelenting Force and it throws the enemies away :D

Skyrim xDD The person you play is a dragonborn and they have powers, the voice of dragons, which they can use to use shouts in the dragon language. And the most famous of the shouts, the first you get in the game is Fus Ro Dah or Unrelenting Force and it throws the enemies away :D

@ Chelsea_Smile_6
dragonborn? haha I wrote this story and I have no idea what you're on about..

OMFG Frank Is A Dragonborn!!! o.O Fus Ro Dah-ing the jocks, yaaayn :DD

Love it <3 please update soon :)

*Fandango

F'rizzles?? You learn something new everyday! Wow! :3 Well, in that case! Good job double time!

@ Enchantment
Sorry for butting in there, but 'realise' vs 'realize' is based on country specifications. 'Realize' is the American spelling. "Realise" is UK, Australia, Africa, etc.

:)

If there's one thing I enjoy; it's an original fanfiction. I don't know much about..MCR...or Gerard and them. Comment Swap sent me. So.
Anyway, my point is I can't really comment on Gerard/Frerard/Whatever related things. I'm sorry. No basis for comparison. But as a stand alone sort of fanfiction, just in the genre of fanfiction- completely disregarding fandom- this starts out originally. I like that.

Um. My main concern is a few spelling errors here and there. For example..."realised"/"realized". The good thing is they don't break the flow of the story.

I'm usually the type to write like 329048 paragraphs of critique and everything that's wrong and how to correct it and all...but....yeah. I really have nothing more to say.

You're doing a good job here.

Keep up the good work.

@ I.Am.Stallion.Duck.
Thank you for your honest opinion! Alicia is the last character to be introduced, thankfully. It was getting hard to find proper ways of introducing characters. Thank you again for subscribing!

I normally don’t read these kinds of stories, but I really like this one! It has a nice original plot and I like reading things that don’t seem very common. I do have some minor critiques though. I love all of your characters, but it gets a bet confusing to remember who is who sometimes. Try developing some of the characters you have now instead of adding more. Maybe try even not mentioning some for a bit so we can distinguish the really important ones. Otherwise, your characters might just turn into names, and the readers won’t be able to connect with them as much. I do love the story though so keep writing, and I am definitely subscribed!

@ rachelnn
Thank you! I love it when people who aren't fans of MCR read this story, because that way I know the opinion is totally unbiased. I'm so glad you liked it.

comment swap:
I can't say I listen to MCR, or even know anything about them but just reading this I feel like I understand them, is that weird? Very nicely written, you capture thoughts well. I'm pretty open minded when it comes to these kinds of things, but I think you imagery is steller! You know how to describe things well and keep the reader interested at the same time with out boring them. Keep up the good work, really you're doing an amazing job! :)

@ airplanes__
I tried to make my fic as non-disturbing as possible, although the whole idea of the Legion will probably become a little freaky. Thank you for your compliments, they mean a lot :)

comment swap sent me :)

First off, I was immediately apprehensive to dive in to this story because I don't usually read slash fanfics, but I still went into it with an open mind. It wasn't as disturbing as others I had happened upon so that's a plus. :)

Your writing style is very clear and it's easy to follow the story line. You're a good writer, keep up the good work!