Shaded Beauty - Comments

I love this! Please update again soon! And I totally agree with AshleyxTwilightx I picture him as Ian Harding :)

Wow this is great!
Please update asap!
And for some reason, I picture Colton like Ian Harding - Ezra on Pretty Little Liars.
hahaha <3

I really, really like this! I love Shaya’s character and Lucas’ as well (he’s such the typical guy; in a good way hehehe) I also love the dialogue between the two; it’s simple but straight to the point. I love the relationship between the two; I only read chapter one, but I’ll surely come back for more (: btw, the layout is just so pretty, awesome job and keep up the great work!!

I think that you're a very talented writer, and I can't wait to read the next chapter! Like domi823, I don't usually read these kinds of stories but I think your story has a nice plot so keep going!

This was interesting to read because it reminds me of me and my best friend. He could be Lucas’s twin. I feel like I have to warn you to be super careful with this, because teacher/student romances have become such a cliché, but I think you’re doing okay so far. On another note, I completely agree with Kat: Why is Colton so grumpy? I assume it has something to do with this mysterious past you mention? It’s definitely not making him a sympathetic character, let alone an attractive one, but that could make for an interesting twist. I’m interested to see where this goes.

So... I just read the first two chapter and it's pretty good, I think. :)
I haven't even thought about writing something which the characters said inwardly with italic syle.
Please keep going with this one and update soon! I really can't wait to see what happens next :D

So... I just read the first two chapter and it's pretty good, I think. :)
I haven't even thought about writing something which the characters said inwardly with italic syle.
Please keep going with this one and update soon! I really can't wait to see what happens next :D

So... I just read the first two chapter and it's pretty good, I think. :)
I haven't even thought about writing something which the characters said inwardly with italic syle.
Please keep going with this one and update soon! I really can't wait to see what happens next :D

So... I just read the first two chapter and it's pretty good, I think. :)
I haven't even thought about writing something which the characters said inwardly with italic syle.
Please keep going with this one and update soon! I really can't wait to see what happens next :D

So... I just read the first two chapter and it's pretty good, I think. :)
I haven't even thought about writing something which the characters said inwardly with italic syle.
Please keep going with this one and update soon! I really can't wait to see what happens next :D

i never read student teacher romances mainly because i feel odd doing so. however, this is quite good. the writing is good, the grammar is alright and i like your characters. i think this can go really far although it seemed a tad cliche at parts but thats my opinion and i doubt others agree. keep up the good work, you can get far with this

I like your characters. They're well rounded and of course we've already been exposed to one of Lucas's faults. I like the layout and your writing is a lot like mine :) (Thats a compliment of course. lol JK,) Some people don't like the short bursts of inside thoughts between dialogue, but I enjoy it. Great Job

Okay, first off i absolutely ADORE teacher student romances, so this is definitely being subscribed to, as well as being recommended! I love the names you have given to the characters, especially Shaya. It is such a unique name, which is great because I love reading stories with unique names. It shows there is thought put behind the story and a random name has not just been picked, like ashley or bob. I mean, there's nothing wrong with that, but it's like naming a dog Clifford. Anyway, Shaya is an interesting main character. Your grammer is also good and there aren't many mistakes or awkward sentences and weird syntax, and stuff like that.
good job! can't wait to read about their romantic adventures together!!!!

I like this a lot. I don't usually read teacher/student stories (comment swap brought me here) but this seems really good. I can't wait to see what happens between Shaya and Colton later on. And I can't wait to see what happens between her and Lucas. Keep writing!

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This is a really well written story. Most other teacher/student stories are too quick to rush into the romantic side of things. I also like the element of the Lucas/ Shaya relationship. Other stories with a similar subject tend to leave the main character almost obsessed with the subject of interest. Her relationship with Lucas allows for other possible outcomes. This is one of the few CS stories I've subscribed too and I hope you get a chance to update soon. :)

If she'd had her way, this entire assignment would have been finished hours ago in the confines of her own home. Then she would have the rest of a beautiful Sunday evening to dive into the book that was eagerly waiting on her nightstand.

This part really caught my eye and made me smile, simply because I'd always rather be reading than doing assignments.

I liked how you wrote about Shay being modest with her being a "genuis." I feel like in other stories the characters tended to be kind of arrogant about it, and I liked that Shay wasn't and mentioned it was because she worked hard at school.

Even though there's only two chapters, I like this story a lot. It doesn't read like the typical teacher/student story which is awesome because those tend to start sounding all the same. Your story doesn't seem to have that problem. I find Shaya to be an interesting main character, and I enjoy the way this all written. It reads smoothly and isn't awkward in places.

You're doing great on this :D

So I was brought here by the comment swap and I have to say I'm glad. I don't usually read the whole teacher/student affair stories because it's just not my thing. But I like this because it's not all lust and there is a whole background to the main characters. I like how you described Lucas as so determined. I don't know if you have ever watched it, but there's a show called Jane by Design and Lucas kinda remindes me of one of the chracters. His name is Billy if you ever want to check it out.Keep writing :)

This certainly is interesting, and so I wonder how it'll progress her on out. Okay, so here are my favorites and non-favorites speaking as a reader/fan. Yo, Lucas is such a funny dude. I think his role in Shaya's life is a good so that she'll always has a sense of how life is with guys outside of her comfort zone; I feel like that's what he represents in her life-- so in a way, he gets her ready for actual problems one day. Also, the love triangle is gonna be nuts once Shaya discovers that she's kinda into Lucas, too. I have a story kinda like this, so I couldn't help but be reminded. Give it a read if you can! http://www.mibba.com/Stories/Read/149736/Lick/

It is really good and amazingly well written. I like how the story started. It's really good and believable. I like the why Shaya thinks. I just like the style and the way it is. It does sound like a real story and something that can actually happen in real life.

comment swap Wow! this is really well written. It's easy to get a feel for the characters. The story has long chapters which is really enjoyable love triangle :) I general like it a lot. It's been done but your doing it well. Keep up the good work. xoxo Lisa-Marie.