July 29th, 2012 at 11:04pm
Comment Swap(:
Overall, I thought this was a really good story. It was well written and I didn't see many grammar mistakes or anything. I really like Asher..Haha(:
The layout though, was a little to much. I kepy eyeballing the pattern instead of the story and I got distracted many times.
I enjoyed reading this though! Wonderful job(:
I saw very few errors, though. Your characters' relationships were sort of confusing at first and Asher actually scares the shit out of me, but anyway, keep up the great work :)