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  • abdvction

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    I like the idea, but (please do not take offense to this) but it was a bit too predictable. But maybe that's just me, because I've read a lot of stories similar to this. I love your diction, but sometimes the words get jumbled together and you didn't put commas or periods where they were supposed to say. I like the relationship forming between Mason and Rayder.
    October 6th, 2013 at 01:42am
  • Hana_Hitachiin :3

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    April 9th, 2013 at 10:26pm
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    @ Hana_Hitachiin :3

    you'll see my love, and thanks again for commenting.
    :3
    April 9th, 2013 at 10:10pm
  • Hana_Hitachiin :3

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    I say marry Patrick. Mason will fade from her thoughts one day, running away is dangerous and I am pretty sure Patrick and Grace would find her. No suicide at least for the sake of her dead father.
    April 9th, 2013 at 06:22pm
  • Hana_Hitachiin :3

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    Don't worry, I feel the same way and like no one ever comments on my stuff
    April 9th, 2013 at 03:48am
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    @ Hana_Hitachiin :3
    lol, I definetly considered that storyline, but had to go for the cliche.
    I appreciate your comment X)
    I get really conflicted when no one comments, because I imagine they all grew to hate it.
    April 9th, 2013 at 01:25am
  • Hana_Hitachiin :3

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    I sort of wanted her to marry Patrick lol I see M is back so things are about to get interesting
    April 8th, 2013 at 10:55pm
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    April 1st, 2013 at 03:24pm
  • Rockett

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    @ Star Angel
    I Will try darling <3
    March 31st, 2013 at 12:11am
  • Star Angel

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    update soon please
    March 31st, 2013 at 12:09am
  • Star Angel

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    update soon please
    March 26th, 2013 at 08:17am
  • Hana_Hitachiin :3

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    Nice story
    March 25th, 2013 at 10:07pm
  • Rockett

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    @ Star Angel
    There will (with all hope) be a QUALITY update tomorrow. I hope you all will like it. Really glad you like it though!!!
    February 12th, 2013 at 12:45am
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    love this so much i want her to be with her boy update soon please
    February 10th, 2013 at 08:00am
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    @ WhoAreYouJudy
    I'm glad you're into the story! I'll try my best :) Don't mean to make you sad.
    December 9th, 2012 at 10:26pm
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    @ WhoAreYouJudy
    I'm glad you're into the story! I'll try my best :) Don't mean to make you sad.
    December 9th, 2012 at 10:26pm
  • WhoAreYouJudy

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    I'm pretty into this story! BUT STOP MAKING HER RUN AWAY :( It makes me sad:(
    December 9th, 2012 at 06:40am
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    @ MadamnnnMisfortune
    Thanks, i know the chapters seem rushed, because its a first draft. And when i write first drafts top prioirty is to write a novel. In the second draft i add the description and stuff :)
    September 15th, 2012 at 04:13am
  • MadamnnnMisfortune

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    I really enjoy your use of vocabulary in your descriptions. It paints a realistic picture but it really emphasizes the world she lives in and her spin on it. The plot is interesting for young audience. So keep on(: all I could say is take your time don't rush to finish a chapter. Describe Describe Describe. Unless you don't like to use adjectives some authors don't. (:
    September 15th, 2012 at 03:25am
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    @ fearless-forever
    ;) only one way to find out. :3
    September 8th, 2012 at 07:06pm
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