Fear Itself - Comments

@ popular mechanics.
No problem! Best of luc to you! :)

@ SoberBunny
Thank you so much for the input! It's so amazing to still get comments on this story... It means so much to me that you enjoyed it. I'm still working on revisions and hoping to submit it for publication eventually!

Here from comment swap. :)

Realizing that this is an incredibly long story, I decided to drop by after the first chapter and subscribe for future reading. ;] Impressive work, by the way. I was thoroughly intrigued by the characters, absolutely loving the description, 'I knew he was thinking. He was always thinking.' Great little quirk to make him seem more real. If I were to give any advice I suppose it would be to kind of shorten some of the action sentences. It helps to get the reader as nervous as the characters are. Other than that I think this is truly a wonderful work of art and I am delighted to have found it here on Mibba.

w o w. i cannot believe this story is still getting comments a year later. thank you so much for reading guys, and thank you so much for the kind words. this story is so very close to me, and it means a lot that you all enjoy it.

Whoa.

First of all I just want to commend on this story. Not only isn't the longest one I've seen on here (still working though it actually!) but it's also so detailed and well thought out. What I love the most is how you take small gestures that we do everyday and re-imagine them in this future and completely change their meanings. Usually, most sci-fi's just skip that step and jump straight to the action. But I like that you've paused to do that because it adds an important element of realism :D

As we press on, the normal smell of faded booze, smoke, sweat, urine, and stale cardboard that has become imbedded within the walls is replaced the staunch odor of gasoline. Do you mean embedded?

Overall I absolutely love your writing style and this is a gorgeous story.

You know I kinda fell off the bandwagon for this and I have no clue why T.T Dystopian novels are my favorite things in the world, and every time I try and think of one this is the first thing in my mind... Hmmh Perhaps it's because the main character is exactly like my best friend? Ugh, I still secretly OTP Alex and Thalia together... Gosh I need to reread and finish reading this story XD

(also when you do get published- because if someone turned this story down they're an idiot- I totally want to know where I can buy a copy!)

@ Beckaay!
Oh my gosh, thank you so much! i'm so glad you enjoyed it, and i'll definitely let you know!

(I love mumbles and chandler too! They're so funny but so dynamic all at once fhiwhf9 i could really go on forever!)

As I told you in my private message to you, I was brought to this story through the redux version, so when you took that down, even with it being so different, I knew I had to read where it came from, and I just want to say you definitely did not disappoint.

The whole thing was absolutely incredible, and each chapter, no matter how major or minor in contribution to the overall plot, brought something knew to the table, and you just constantly build up the whole thing in such an amazing manner.

Please, let me know if/when this does get published because I can promise you I will buy it with no hesitations.

- Becky xo

(p.s. may I just say that Mumbles and Chandler are my absolute favourite characters)

@ popular mechanics.
I look forward to reading it! :)

@ Cherry-Love
Thank you! I'm working on revised drafts right now, actually. The story's changed quite a bit, but for the better (hopefully).

Omg! THIS IS AMAZING! Seriously, you should look into getting it published :)

Dear author, the comment swap thingy brought me here and I have to say I'm amazed.

You have quite a number of chapters so I read a few although I'll come back later on to read more.

Even though stories that have to do with the future aren't my thing, this left me quite enjoyed and almost speechless if I may add. You have a nice plot going on and well developed characters. It's pretty descriptive and filled with action. Only thing I have to say is that there were a couple misspellings of words and nothing else. And even though the story's title wasn't to my liking, the summary captivated me. Plus I subscribed. Xd

I don't think I would have been able to pull a story like this off. *_*

Anyway, well done. That's all from me so bye. :)

~Marian.

@ Cherry Blossom Girl
Hannah and I are in the process of writing our respective drafts (I have a revised version of this story posted and being worked on as we speak), and we've definitely talked about doing some with Dean and Chandler, but the Dean and Sam aspect would be really interesting to get into, and I'll definitely look into it!

I'm so glad you enjoyed it, too. I'm glad so many people have gotten invested in a story I didn't even think was going to take off.

I, along with so many other readers have already told you just how much I love this story but I have to tell you once again. It's been one of my top favourite stories to read for a good number of months now (both published and unpublished!) I've had it bookmarked on my phone for ages so I can read updates on the go, even reading it at 8am on my school bus, that's how much I've enjoyed it.
As with all great fandoms (because that's honestly what this has become in my eyes at this stage,) the feeling when it comes to an end is bittersweet, but you've given us a worthy finale!
From Chandler's death onwards I cried three separate times. Casting my mind back to when Tali was a child it's incredible how much you have developed her as a character. You have nurtured her and I've watched a naive little girl become an incredibly strong woman and role model.
The only thing that I would love to see now would be a short story of Dean and Sam's years apart, it's something I've been curious about for a long while! :)

@ Geekky
Thank you!

I think this story was extremely well written an i enjoyed reading it. :)

@ kariajaderose
oh my god i just look up the lyrics and almost choked LOL THAT'S SO FUNNY

Added a bit of color to the reading XD

And it feels like a very Dean song

@ kariajaderose
LOLOLOL oh my god that's so ironic and funny