The Business of Being - Comments

Ahhh, so good. Ryan is empty. I can't get over that, All the emotion you've built up all this emotion makes this line is so powerful.

“Your friend from the bar? Jon? He was here.”

“He asked about you. How you’re doing. What you’re doing.”

Jon Walker you chivalrous bitch. YOU CLASSY BASTARD.

He feels dirty.

This just makes me hurt. Like ache. Tracy explain.

Ryan is empty.

You make me feel like I could ring him like a bell. Tracy. Of course he's empty. Because there is a Brendon sized hole in his consciousness.

Ryan wishes Brendon was here.

SEE?

I'd promise I wouldn't leave you if I could.

Totally ignoring blatant stealing of my story title.
BUT THIS JUST MAKES ME CRAZY. WHY DID BRENDON LEAVE? WHAT WAS SO AWFUL THAT HE JUST couldn't?

Ryan wishes he could stop thinking about Brendon all the time.

Ryan.

“I’m positive.”

And Brendon is negative. Opposites attract yes? Just kidding. I get it. I love you Ryan. Shh... Don't speak.

He smells like security, Spencer with his pretty blue eyes.

Spencer... YOU'RE SO GOLDEN BUT I HAVEN'T FORGOTTEN WHAT YOU'VE DONE ALRIGHT?

“You are really fucking brave, Ryan.” His face is fierce, daring Ryan to doubt him. It’s a really stupid statement and Ryan’s stomach drops.

Spencer doesn't even understand

So fucking fond.
Jon Walker is fond of everyone. I need to hug him before I die.

They just look at each other. They just smile.

This is where it starts. Oh lord I'm dying too. Ryan bb. We can have a double funeral.

Spencer pulls Ryan’s fingers from his arm with surprising gentleness. “What are you even thinking, Ryan?”

I DON'T EVEN KNOW RYAN. PICK A SIDE. Of yourself... This is so conflicting. RYAN JUST PICK BRENDON.

Stop. Just fucking stop. I can't handle this.

So obviously what I really mean is I can't wait for the next chapter. This is killing me in the best way possible.

Brendon has always been everything Ryan never wanted.

BUT YOU DO WANT BRENDON. YOU DO.
HE DOES. HE HAS TO. MY LORD.

And Jon. Jon Walker. Bearded dork of my life. Just wants to fix the world even though my bb's in pain

"You really do need a support system, Ryan, because this disease. This disease is really fucking lonely."

This makes me understand Ryan better, because he's so lonely even with Spencer and Brendon around him. It makes me think that he's not really a jerk he's just a victim of his disease and it makes my heart hurt.

He walks away before that can mean something.
Ryan. Let people care about you Ryan.

“Brendon’s gone,”
Spencer, you bitch.

“Really fucking nothing.”
SPENCER. FUCK YOU SPENCER. RYAN NEEDS BRENDON TO NOT BE LONELY AND BRENDON LOVES RYAN. SPENCER, WHAT ARE YOU DOING?

That was an amazing fanfiction! I'm impressed, it was very sad though... If you were aiming for sadness it made me almost cry lol Is that the end? You should write more! :)

My comment is just on the first two chapters but I have to keep reading because you've drawn me in.

First though, you don't need all of those things in the summary. If a person clicks the info button of your story, they'll find out the rating, and the warnings and pairings thing just take away from the beauty of the summary itself.

Of course, you don't have to change it. It's just my opinion.

The first chapter really packed a punch. I'm not sure what's going on between Ryan and Pete (I'm telling you now I skipped over the pairings and warnings they don't interest me) but Brendon Urie in the second chapter made me squeal a bit and Ryan has aids!? It's all a lot to understand but I like it! And I will be reading to the end. Give me a while and I'll catch up eventually.

Definitely a great story. :)

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Unsure about what to say about this exept its quite unique and I really like it. A few grammar mistakes here and there but the description is very good too and there are so many pheels :D

God, this is so gorgeous. Christ. (Apparently I've become religious after reading this, lol.)

The feels are exploding in my chest. The way you portray the emotion is actually brilliant.

Your Spance is just perfect. PERFECT.

The bromance is beautiful

Spencer sighs, eyes searching. Ryan relies on those eyes. “No reason.”

SPENCER. YOU BITCHY DORK. WHY.

Spencer probably expects Ryan to instill some symbolism into this. But sometimes there aren’t any metaphors to be made.

That didn't escape my notice. But it's alright because sometimes things just ARE. They're just uncomfortable and blunt and cold and Oh Lordy. Let me love Ryan. Just let me hug him.

“Sleep, Ry,” he says again, and Ryan melts back against him, thinks Best friend, thinks, Brother.

Cause even though Spencer is a bitchy dork you have to make me love him don't you? Fuck you Tracy. I don't know how to feel. FUCK YOU.

(I mean that in the most affectionate way possible.)

“That’s worse.”

That is worse you bitchy dork.

DO I LOVE? DO I CRY? WHERE AM I? IT'S COLD.

I'm so conflicted Tracy. FIX. IT.

Ahhhhhh I can't I can't I can't. These chapters are little bursts of so many feels, you're so talented.

asdfghjkl; WHAT?!

Err..wow. Okay. Just wow

I don't actually have words that accurately capture my awe for this chapter.

Err..wow. Okay. Just wow

I don't actually have words that accurately capture my awe for this chapter.

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I totally missed that, sorry.

Spencer, who’s pressing Brendon against the sinks. Spencer, who’s about an inch away from pushing Brendon right onto the counter. Spencer whose fingers are tangled and lips are joined with Brendon’s.

SO GOOD. AHHHH. So, so happy this is going places. I love the way you write; some lines are just perfect little gems that make me just yesssss.

Jon

I really, really like this line. It was just so damn accurate Some things about group never change. It's almost normal until everyone starts talking. Just ungh.

So worth the wait bb

JON... JON... WHAT DID YOU DO TO JON.

Jon was with Tom... AND TOM... AHK.