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Bravo!
This story had mature vocab and writing structure and it was still easy to follow along with. I love how you got it set up so far. *read introductions* Everything is very realistic, and that's very important to me as a reader. I'm going to dig in a little more and see how this turns out.

Great chapter
Can't wait to see what happens

comment swapper. This is very different to what I usually read however it is extremely well written and the overall storyline. I like your layout too it is great. Great story hope you continue it and it does well.

I just read this entire thing and I have to say his is quite amazing. It's very well written. I love the characters, they are all so different. And the budding relationship between Jason and Mackenzie has definitely perked my interest! :)

Great chapter
Update soon
Can't wait to see what happens
I love it so far :)
What will they do face to face again? Haha

First of all, the summary is very alluring! So good job on that part and it definitely pulled me in! Oh yeah and nice choice for the characters! Chris Hemsworth is a God—no pun intended. And seeing your other characters, I’m guessing you’re a TVD fan. SO. AM. I. (: Anyway, I really like the detail and diction you wrote in your story, it’s not just pure dialogue and it’s like as if I can see the story happening right in front of me. Also, everything flows nicely. All in all, you’re a great writer! Keep up the good work!

Alrighty, hahaa I'm finally caught up with your last update! I'm actually pretty excited for Nate's party, I really want something big to happen. Anyways I like your characters a lot too, like Jason, Taylor, and Mackenzie, and the twins. And I can already tell Alyson and Scott are hiding something... Yea, and I really like how you write too. It kind of all flows together so it's really easy to read. There's not too much dialogue but then again there's not too much narration which is a perfect balance! dkjsbvliajwfbdjfnbwoeiwebdc and yea, super ecstatic about this!! Really hope you update soon and I am so terribly sorry about blowing up your comments ahhah

~Cafuné

And yup I'm just super stoked for more to come!

Wow, I actually really like this! Granted I've only read the first chapter but I like the way you write! I like the whole "turn and walk back into the hellhole she was forced to call home," bit. It kinda reminds me of how I feel when I come home hahaha But I like how bitter she is so far and ugh oh my gosh I love finding new stories that are quality. It's like finding Christmas presents on Monday in March.

Also, you're layout is fab! I'm a huge fan of wallpaper designs so I really like it:) Not a huge fan of the characters chosen but no big, I can get past that!

I really love this story :3 The update was amazing! I cannot wait to see where you go with it. fjaskdfjsdakl So awesome.

I really love this story :3 The update was amazing! I cannot wait to see where you go with it. fjaskdfjsdakl So awesome.

Love this story! :D Can't wait for you to update! ^_^

I can't wait for more. :D #so exciteddddd. haha

Dear author, I already subscribed. You are quite an author. Your writing skills showed perfectly, from the use of vocabulary, building up the mystery, the characters developement, the detailed flowy descriptions. I just loved this completely. The summary pulled me in right away and I liked how this story is so realistic. She hates her father and he hates his mom, even though its for different reasons. I wanna see how these two characters will connect. ~Marian.

Dear author, I already subscribed. You are quite an author. Your writing skills showed perfectly, from the use of vocabulary, building up the mystery, the characters developement, the detailed flowy descriptions. I just loved this completely. The summary pulled me in right away and I liked how this story is so realistic. She hates her father and he hates his mom, even though its for different reasons. I wanna see how these two characters will connect. ~Marian.

Aww. I like the banter between Jason and Benji. The fact that he can't get her out his head is adorable. Just the way he feels when she looks his way makes me want to squeal! Definitely can't wait to see how their relationship develops. :) I'm a little curious as to what has happened to make her family so hard on her. Is there something that I missed? I really want to punch her mother in the tit, and her father gives me the creeps. Scott is a scumbag as well, at least he comes off that way in the beginning. I think Jason and Mac have a lot of drama heading there way in the future and I am SO ready to read about it.

Eeeeeeeeep. I can't wait for more. :3 It sucks me in a little more and more each time I read, haha. :3

Another amazing story!
This is pure perfection to me and it deserves a rec! :)
Your writing flows, I love your vocabulary, and the characters seem to be well-rounded from what I've read so far. This original fiction is definitely addictive and I only wish it had more subscribers and readers. It really deserves them in my own opinion.
When I read the ending to Chapter One, I just knew this was going to be an interesting read.
Great, great job on this story!!
Happy Valentine's day, and I'm so sorry it took me forever to do! My blog got a ton of requests and with college work, it definitely took some time!

:O HERBOYFRIENDISCHEATINGONHERWITHHERBESTFRIEND Stupid hoe...
Okay, I don't know that for a fact. BUT IT SEEMS LIKE IT. If that is the case, well then to both of them >.> Anywayyyys. Can't wait to see where this goes! :D

i'm from the comment swap! first of all, i like the layout a lot; reading a story should be the most important but a good layout definitely makes it easier to get the story started. overall, i like this. you have nice description with well written dialogue which is important, a chapter should flow well and yours do that. good luck with your story!