Adam is truly a right asshole; yes, I said RIGHT! But she and Theo need to seriously sit down and talk about all of their problems. Do they even remember why they disliked each other so much in the first place?? Lol.
The only suggestion I have is proofreading before posting for some errors. :)
This, her.. Theo.. CUTENESS! love! I ... Im... ugh! I have no words for this I just look for the next chapter button and its not there and im all LIKE DAMN IT! I need...more...more!
*calms down*
I have to say that this chapter, this story is down right amazing and I need more. Uh,.. you need to update, like right now. Ugh I want theo.. lol What was he doing in the hall anyways? that scene was AMAZING! ack i cant take it... when will the next update be?
I loved it(: please update soon, Riley has an isuue that I've gone through, I feel her actions reflect that she finds it hard to find trust in People, especially in relationships, she reminds me of myself. Keep writing! Can't wait for the next update
It's kinda my fault that you didn't imagine him how I did, I never really described Theo. Would you mind expanding on the time transitions being rushed, cause I think I know what you mean, but I want to know I'm interpreting it right. That's kind cool you had a dream about him. I'm sorry that there are so many mispellings, I proof read it twice before posting, but I have a really hard time proof reading my own stuff because my mind just put the missing words or letters in.
Anotner thing! I was looking through the character page and for some reason, I pictures theo as Darren's character and Darren as theos, which kind of made me laugh because I guess that's what i found most attractive. Also, I had a weird dream last night about Theo because I read all 15 posted chapters before I went to sleep lol
I just read all of this tonight and I fell in love with it, I felt like the time transitions were a little rushed and there were some distracting mispellings, but other than that, the characters were great, the plot is great, and I loved how Theo and Riley started to open up to each other. I love Theo, I hate ivan, and I have a puppy named Riley, which made me laugh, update soon please, can't wait for more (:
Ahhhhh!!! I love Indian people (I was actually in love with my friend for a while, hehe). But wow, what a great addition to the story. I can't wait to see Kailish's development in the story. I also am falling in love with your metaphors and analogies. Lol.
@ Write.with.Love That date is actually loosely based on one I had. I wasn't dating a stripper but the waitress at the restaurant we were at, kept blatantly hitting on my date right in front of me, it was utter bullshit. My date didn't handle it to well either, he kept laughing at how mad I was and I'm sitting there like, well it's our first date, sorry if I'm not secure in the relationship yet. I can understand why you like that line, it's rather metaphorical even if I didn't intend it that way.