Polaroids - Comments

The epilogue was awesome! I loved the symbolism with the weather. Your sentence structure was also good. The use of short sentences and long ones really emphasized the atmosphere. Youd did not force anything, and it was not cheesy/ Iy was a good idea to use latin in the story to; it sounded really cool...

Overall, great way to end the story!

Jolly McJollyson:

I just read the last chapter before the epilogue. The writing is stellar! There are a few grammatical slip-ups, but printing it out and reading it aloud will probably catch those. I'll be reading more of this soon, I can guarantee. I'm really very impressed with the quality and lyricism of your phrasing in several passages. Definitely above-average work. It's good to see you writing so well.

Thx.

I just read the last chapter before the epilogue. The writing is stellar! There are a few grammatical slip-ups, but printing it out and reading it aloud will probably catch those. I'll be reading more of this soon, I can guarantee. I'm really very impressed with the quality and lyricism of your phrasing in several passages. Definitely above-average work. It's good to see you writing so well.

I'm on the Story/Review board and you said read the last chapter of 'Polaroids' -- and now that I have I have goosebumps all over..
I think I'm going to read the whole story because the last chapter is absolutely amazing. I love the way you've described things...I really don't know what to say...breathtaking!!
You're an inspiration =)
xx

I'm seriously going to cry from happiness.



Thank you. What you mentioned about Shawn representing society today is EXACTLY what I was going for. Thank you.

I'm aware of the fact that there's still an the epilogue, but after this chapter I felt the need to compliment you. You've made so much progress since Secret.
In this last chapter you captured the emotion and depicted so perfectly that all of those things Shawn and his friends had been doing to Jordan hurt me too. It felt like I was there, watching them, seeing the horror, the suffering, the love in her eyes. I'm impressed.
Throughout the whole story you kept my interest for your story. I t was tense, and there always was something announcing the dreadful ending. The narrow minded society, here represented by Shawn (whose ego couldn't stand the humiliation), had to destroy a love so pure, so beautiful like any other.
This story carries a strong message - I just hope more people will read it.
You've done an amazing job! I congratulate you for writing a story like this one.

Gee...

-Kick dirt-


Thank you so much for being a reader of my story to begin with.

:hug:

Tas, that was amazing. Truly amazing. I felt so bad for Jordan, that my eyes stung the whole time. I was so close to actually crying. The description, the whole situation outline and the detail you put into this chapter were amazing. It was so overwhelming and the ending was immensely touching.

I'm almost sorry this story is going to be done so soon.

You know you're talented, right?

:hug:

The last chapter was so sad. They treat Jordan like a peace of meat...I loved the action though. It was real cool when she fought back and tried to get away. The last word Jordan uttered was "Bianca". True love...

THANKS KARA! :hug:

That was just amazing. It showed a lot of emotion and the whole series has been conflict tumbling after conflict. Absolutely amazing. It was sad too, trying to make me cry. Again, that was great! :hug:

Just so you guys know...

There is only one chapter left. A.k.a. THE GRAND FINALE! Followed by an epilogue. That will be the end. It should be up by Sunday or Monday because it's very long and includes a lot. Be prepared.

Those guys are crazy... :shock: I don't understand what happend in there childhood...And why is "the quiet one" there? Anyway...Good job...You were very descriptive and you have a very deep imagination...

You just keep it up, you're doing an awesome job. ;)

Thx for the comments guys. I really have been waiting for this point in my story and needed some comments to keep my confidence up. XD

That man just BEGS to be tortured, castrated and killed, sloooowly.

Amazing, Tas, freakin' amazing.

I haven't been on for two days and in the meanwhile almost everyone whose stories I read updated! My day's fulfilled :}

I wish Bianca wasn't afraid of him, then maybe she'd slaughter him. Bloody bastard

Oh man, I'm so gonna cry.

Its goood okay!

0mg. Shawn the disgusting ****** rapist!

Bianca, go call the police. Find protection, hire an assasin!

And Jordan, go kick him in the balls!

Sorry abt the language. I was so angry..

Lil Miss. WEMO:

Ohh dear, from the second I read about creepy man in the corner I knew there was going to be trouble. Now I fear that someone is going to get their ass beaten by an angry boyfriend.

Love the update, may I please have more when you get the chance?
Love ya!

Thx Frannie. You don't know how much that means to me right now.