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WOOT; this was EXTREEEEEEEEEEEEEEMELY long. :)
and i liked it. <33

I love long updates :)
Oh geeze, trouble always comes with the used, lol.
So, Mikey and Gerard are still together? I thought they were broken up until Gerard said that Mikey was his bf. Even if he was drunk haha. It kinda seems that Frank likes Gerard, or vice versa, but i'm not sure.
Great update! It was nice and long :D
More soon?
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Sorry i haven't commented for a while, i've been away as you know and i'm going away again tomorrow for two weeks- so i will comment when i get back :D

Firstly, i loved the description at the beginning of chapter 15 about Elena, it was really well-written. I love the way the plot's spanning out- in the sense that it's unpredictable and keeps me on the edge of my seat.
Somehow you've turned me into a waycest lover and i'm feeling very empathetic for mikey and got too upset with the last chapter and how gerard's converting into his old ways.
I can't believe he told bert about them! I have such a vendetta against bert, the way you've written him so far (really well) i can tell he's going to be such a nuisance to poor mikey!
I can't wait to read the new chapters when i get back :D

I absolutly loved this chapter.
It was amazing.
Gerard the dick.
Nearly fucking breaking his brothers arm
Later in the story you should so have Mikey kick his head in 8)
xD
But I really love this story.
I lve the fact that its waycest but its not all like
"OMG I love you Gee! "I love you too Mikey you've changed me for the better" And then they just randomly start making out
Because You'd be suprised how many of them are like that.
Yours isn't and I love it

Xoxoxoxox
Chansey

Loved the update! <3
I feel so sorry for you! You have writers block!? I didn't notice at all! =) I hope you find something to write about...and your writers block goes away!

twas a very good update
i loved gerard's little speech
everything he said is probably exactly what happens with funerals

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Awesome update!
More soon?
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writer's block or not, i still think this was amazing. (:
and poor mikey, having to deal with his crazy brother..

I really liked it, if you hadn't told us about Writer's Block I wouldn't have realised.
Keep this coming, when you can, it's fucking awesome :D:D

Wow! Nice updates! =) Poor guys, expecially Gerard...he has Mikey to help him though! :)

Ohhh that last one was particularly sad *tear*
Good job - it's really well written and somewhat refreshing and new; not like a lot of the other MCR fics i've read on here
Very well done *applause*

^^ Why, thank you!

ooh wow that was...impressive.

You guys are awesome.

I'm a new reader!
And I really like this.
You are very good at describing emotions.
I'm not really into waycest, but the way you describe it, makes it okay :]
For me anyway.
Update soon?
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awh no! why did helena have to die already :(
tis sad
what a lovely little move you made with frank's POV
i knew he liked him
but no acting on the crush for frank, he can't ruin the little waycest we have going here

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I'm glad you liked my reviews, but I'm sorry I may not leave anything too in-depth today. I'm sorta blank.

Anyway, I loved the little twist in Frank's POV you put there. Kind of not expecting that, therefore, brilliant move. ;)

And I didn't think Grandma Helena would die already!:(

I would love another update, but you can take your time. :D

Btw, if you have time, check out my fics? TY, so much.

"laughing themselves at Gerard’s obvious happiness, which had not been too apparent lately, and the shining twinkle in Mikey’s eyes, indicating that Gerard was not the only happy person there"
^ i loved that, showing how happy the boys were together, the way you wrote them together actually makes me a slight fan of the pairring as in this story they need eachother, they're so sweet and they've bonded through love and affection. That's a huge compliment for me y'know, you've made me semi-enjoy the waycest :D

"The reason for Frank’s silence would be that he still had the memory of Gerard’s eyes, so captivatingly beautiful, all the sinister cruelty behind the twinkle making them all the more attractive. Frank just couldn’t get those hazel orbs of magnificence out of his mind"
^ FRERARD! I know you said that's not on the cards but i loved the way you described Frank's reluctance to admit that he likes Gerard, i liked the ongoing commentry of his thoughts and the denial. It was well-written, and plus i love frankie so it's nice that he's establishing a role.

"Gerard sat down on the damp earth, gazing unseeingly into the dense trees, too pain-ridden to notice anything. The pain clogged his mind, hazed his vision."
^ the way you described Gerard's hurt was brilliant, the realisation, the denial and then the unrelenting grief, that line above was just a good example. You displayed his emotions so well but then adding his reluctance to cry made it more realistic- linking it with his character in this story.

"He felt that by hiding in the trees, he was hurting Mikey; keeping himself from the only person who understood him."
^ Again another great line, showing how much Gerard cares for his brother, i'm starting to like them to be honest, they need eachother, they love eachother...gah brilliant

oh Gee *hugs*
keep this coming, it's awesome :D:D

Just finished 13...

(Btw, 'Ever The Same' by Rob Thomas began playing on my speaker when I started it. It fits)

Best chapter ever, I think. The rain part, the description, the metaphors, the lovely, broken emotion almost became too much... the confession, it seemed so real too, like what people would actually say and not just what a writer thinks might sounds nice... it's brilliant.

The brotherly relationship. Can't get enough of it. I like how you turned it around, like how Mikey gets to be the older brother in the end. I wrote a couple of fics about that, which makes me like a story even more if it's pulled off well.

Made me smile: rain gods and coffee lords. Frank cheating on Pencey. :lmfao

Would love an update superbly. Thought the last part was executed perfectly, not too happy, not too sad, but okay, and full of possibilites.

Love it. So much. Gonna recc it on my journal now.