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So first, The title did capture my attention. Then when I read the summery I was more interested to keep reading, The way you describe everything in the room is amazing, you give the read *me* a good view of how the room looked.
"It was stained with tears and blood. Not yet though, I realised. Not yet. This room was still innocent. It hadn’t happened yet."
This line right here,really made me think. What could have happened to cause them to say it hadn't happened yet. What hasn't happened?
Yup, I got the chills while reading this and I got a bit tear eyed. I have to say the way you wrote this chapter was absolutely amazing, It drew me in so much. keep up the great work because I am so going to see what else you have written, This was just. Gosh I dont know what else to say. =)
Though it would be interesting to know why he thought of himself as a freak, how old he was now and how he got back to see his younger self. You should make this into a story. Like make a story of his younger life or even a one shot. because again this was amazing. =)
Beware the planet death.
So first, The title did capture my attention. Then when I read the summery I was more interested to keep reading, The way you describe everything in the room is amazing, you give the read *me* a good view of how the room looked.
"It was stained with tears and blood. Not yet though, I realised. Not yet. This room was still innocent. It hadn’t happened yet."
This line right here,really made me think. What could have happened to cause them to say it hadn't happened yet. What hasn't happened?
Yup, I got the chills while reading this and I got a bit tear eyed. I have to say the way you wrote this chapter was absolutely amazing, It drew me in so much. keep up the great work because I am so going to see what else you have written, This was just. Gosh I dont know what else to say. =)
Though it would be interesting to know why he thought of himself as a freak, how old he was now and how he got back to see his younger self. You should make this into a story. Like make a story of his younger life or even a one shot. because again this was amazing. =)
Beware the planet death.
April 22nd, 2013 at 11:08pm