Life on Mars - Comments

I actually love this story something wicked.
You need to update more often!
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I really liked this chapter. Update wicked soon!

I actually, LOVE, this story :) You need to update... ASAP!

Okay, I just finished reading all this, and it did take me a while, and was actually the source of my procrastination, but god damn, I am so fucking happy I found this story.
It is literally, fucking awesome. I can't get enough of this, and was actually so fucking bummed out when I realised that I had come to the end of the chapters.
You really need to update soon, because I am so fucking in love with this, that it's unreal.

I like how Eli's opinion on marriage and the such hasn't changed. Similar to what the person above said, it's not one of the "Okay I met the love of my life and now I want to get married and have a million kids and live happily ever after" stories. Her personality is constant, her opinions are the generally the same and she's still the Eli from the beginning of the story. It's just now she's taking a chance with the relationship, which is good change (possibly depending on what happens).

Slow is nice. I like it.

I'm also gonna mention how long your chapters are (again) and how although nothing too important happened in that chapter (stuff did happen though), it was still relevant and it still kept my attention. It felt like a regular day in a regular person's life. More than one thing happening at once and the whole focus not only on the storyline but on life in general. If that makes sense. This all sounds better in my head.

Lovely update! I love these kinds of stories, where it's taken sloooooow.
Not the 'Meet, "you're hott, i'm hott, let's get together two chapters in' stories.
Jared seems to have taken a very strong liking to Eli, and I think Eli is beginning to feel the same as well.

BRB, DROOLING.
No, seriously. This story is so well written, and the plot isn't rushed like most romances. That's nothing short of refreshing.
I'd review a little more in-depth, but I need sleeeeeeep. :D
But I can't wait for an update.
Thanks for the wholesome entertainment, bro.

I've stopped at chapter four, because I've gotten the certain urge to work on Coexist, and I wanted to let you know that I have read the first three chappies of your story.

I'd like to say that I'm enjoying it so far; the plot's kind of...I don't know, there's no word to describe it. Cute, I guess? No...

Whatever it is, I really like it. It's nice to see a 30stm story that isn't complete crap.

The only negative thing I have to say is that I cannot stand the main character. She's a rude and cynical bitch; hopefully being with Jared will alter her view on life. Seriously, she was so rude to Shannon....I don't like when people mess with the Shanimal. XD

Speaking of the Shanimal, why did Jared and Eliza get so mad at him for talking about the relationship phobia thing? He was simply telling her that she wasn't the only person in the world that felt that way, and she got pissed for no reason, in my opinion, and so did Jaer.

With that being said, I've subscribed to this story, and I'll resume reading when I'm satisfied with my own writing. You're an awesome writer, and I can't wait to see where this story goes.

-Shelbie

I love this. I'm so happy she's giving him a chance. I love that he sent her roses. Update wicked soon!

I really really really really really love this story ;]
seriously. I don't know. It's just extremely interesting and you're a freaking FANTASTIC writer.
It flows well and is unpredictable which are both very good qualities to have as a writer.
Anywho, I can't wait to see if Eli follows through on her "taking chances" revelation. I have a feeling that she will.

And I want some grapes now, by the way, thanks to that author's note.

You author's note made me really want grapes. As soon as I read the word 'grapes' I was like "those sound really good right now." Now I have to go find some.

I don't really have much to say. Everything that I want to point out I've said before in other comments and I hate repeating myself.

I will say that now I'm very (Even more) interested to see what's going to happen now that Eli wants to take the chance.

The part about Hell freezing over made me laugh by the way.

Wow, I just finised reading this, and I LOVE IT!

such an awesome chapter, and i loved the bit about Eli calling him a musician =D update soon xx

Hey I'm a new reader and I love this, and especially this chapter. Update wicked soon!

I can't give really long reviews but I love it! I like the thinking process and such. :)

The story of how they met was hilarious. That's definitely an interesting way to meet someone/become friends with someone.

I like how Eliza's not just constantly thinking about one thing over and over again. She has an actual thought process, she's human that way. I don't know anyone that can keep their train of thought on only one thing and it makes her a much better character. More realistic. Yeah, most of her thoughts right now are about Jared and how she pictures her life going and trying to decide what she wants, but at the same time she's thinking about her job and the news she's supposed to be getting. It's something I noticed especially in this chapter, she was on edge not only because Jared was there, but because she was awaiting news about something completely different.

Also how even when she's thinking the conversations are still going on around her (even if the reader isn't a part of that conversation because we're in Eliza's thoughts). Just because someone's thinking doesn't mean the world stops because they aren't paying attention. So seeing Presley interrupt Eliza's train of thought because the conversations were still going on (around halfway through the chapter I think it was, right before the story of how they met) was really nice to see.

I'm also pretty sure this is one of the longest comments I've ever left on a story.

I love love love love love love LOVE this!!!!!
argh :D super excited for your next update!!
The way your thinking through your characters and plot is amazing, you are INCREDIBLY talented and don't let anybody tell you otherwise! I also love how you write speech, your very good at conveying nuances and such!

Love'n'stuff
Sarah xx

It's really nice waking up to find an update just waiting to be read. A nice way to start out the day.

I'm noticing even more now that you keep your characters consistent rather than making them into mood rings that change every two seconds. I like the gradual change of characters and you seem to be spacing that out really well. Of course we're only four parts into the story so who knows what can happen.

That being said I'm glad we're four parts in and I can't really predict what happens. Too many stories do that, and that doesn't make it fun to read. That's one reason I really like this story. I can't tell what's going to happen. I can't predict it and it makes me curious. It makes me wonder.

Love the story, hope for another update soon! :)

I have to say again that I love the way you write. It's casual and feels real. It actually feels like this is a situation that can happen to anyone.

The very last line in this chapter made me laugh really hard. Thank you for that. I needed a laugh.