Rebirth - Comments

The relationship between Sian and her father, I absolutely love already. I can't wait to see where you're taking this!

OH MY GOODNESS! I CAN'T EVEN. I'M SO INCREDIBLY EXCITED!!! I am totally,truly, utterly, completely in love with this story. There should always be more stories about these gods, though yours would remain the best. Thanks for giving me some more inspiration! (and keep the fun facts coming, because who the hell doesn't love a fun fact?)

It's back! It's really, really back!

I can't even tell you how much I love this. It's the perfect balance of beautiful and creepy. And this layout is so perfect, I think one of my favorites of yours. I LOVE THIS.

So, when this gets updated I do this dance. It's an Apollo dance. Yeah, an Apollo dance.

I do not like this foreboding dream. I do not like it at all.
What I do like, no, what I positively adore, is your wonderfully poetic description. I could go on about it for days really. The scene is terrifying, yet even when you describe the way the fire is consuming everything it touches it's beautifully cruel. Whoa, this whole dream sequence was an oxymoron! Somehow I feel like I haven't read anything quite like that before.

Yet, it was all so beautiful, something that war should not be.
That right there. Perfect. As always.

Well, that isn't a foreboding dream, like at all I love this so much! Your description of things is just....gah. It's flawless. And frustrating. And flawless. Update soon please!

YOU UPDATED! I seriously squealed I was so excited.

Oh my gosh your description. It's absolutely flawless.
The look suited him almost as well as the gold plated armor he usually adorned. Even Aphrodite was not immune to the beauty that Apollo exuded.
Because Apollo is just a beautiful beautiful god who can even work a bin bag.

His dark hair fell messily into his face obstructing equally dark and near menacing eyes. His armor was dull and dented with time and war.
I love how vivid you've made Ares in appearance.

Aphrodite would enjoy bringing him down; hurting his heart.
Because she's a hussy. Yeah, she is.

She tilted her head up and kissed him once before disappearing leaving a single white dove feather in Ares’ grasp.
Beautiful imagery.
I can't get over your writing. Each time you update something it blows my frickin' mind, I swear. I love the fact that on the one hand you've stuck to portraying Ares as this handsome, brooding, powerful soldier, but then you've given him this whole new layer by showing that he actually does care for Aphrodite. And also how you've not just made Aphrodite one dimensional. Yes she wants all the attention and hates that Apollo has his sights set on someone else. Yes she wants him and is jealous. But you also show that she does actually care about Ares.

I could ramble for days about this story. It's perfection.

How cute was this chapter? I mean. SERIOUSLY.
I can't wait to read about the date!! <3

Love love love this!!!!!!

Way to tell me you updated!
It never ceases to amaze me how absolutely enthralling this story is. It's so completely unique, and totally suited to you. I just love it.

Oh this is just so fucking good it's ridiculous. Really it is!
And I'm pretty sure Maria is one of my favorite characters ever, she just cracks me up.
Ooooh. Sian is thinking about past lives, huh? This could get quite interesting!
Love it!

I loveeeeeee it! So perfectly written, as always. You don't know how long I've been waiting on an update for this story!! Thumbs up, Rayray. <3333

Jesus. Just when I thought I couldn't get any more jealous of you and your writing, you up and did this. Damn you! Don't ever stop! This was brilliant, as always. I got so excited when he showed up and now I can't wait to see what happens when he picks her up.

Also.

APOLLO LET'S GET MARRIED.

Sian, who had been occupying her time rereading the Iliad for the thousandth time, sighed and put down her book.
As everyone should do! :) Reminds me of you a bit ;)
It sucks that Sian is kinda hiding out though because of some jealous jackasses.

“Fuck ‘em,” she said. “They’re just jealous that Apollo only has eyes for the best girl in town.”
EXACTLY MARIA. EXACTLY.

“Yeah, right,” Sian snorted in laughter. “I still do not understand what he sees in me. There are dozens of pretty girls around here.”
Because she's clever, and funny, and forms her own opinion on things!

“Lost in thought again, Miss Carter?” the familiar smooth voice sang from above Sian.
I literally just heard Luke Evans saying this. I don't know how Apollo is supposed to sound but I got very happy.

OH MY GOD HE QUOTED PLATO. I CAN'T HANDLE THESE FEELINGS. THERE'S AN INNER BATTLE.
whoa for a second there I loved Apollo more than Hermes. THAT'S HOW GOOD YOU ARE MY FRIEND. Nobody has done that to me before, don't tell Hermes about my moment.

“An educated woman is one of the most attractive things in this world.” His words did not answer Sian’s question but were enough to make her more than content. “And tell me, sweet Sian, do you accept my courtship?”
Yes, yes it is. And how could she resist when he asks so nicely?

He was beautiful and respectful. There was no reason for her to say no. She liked him, even if was just a little bit.
Don't resist!

“I shall thank such a beautiful woman for allowing a mere man to continue on his quest to woo the one he so dearly admires.” Apollo’s smile was almost impossibly wide as he reached down and grabbed Sian’s hand from its place on the table. He ran his thumb over the smooth skin of her wrist before bringing her knuckles to his lips.
Oh dear lord. I actually just swooned. WHY AREN'T MEN LIKE APOLLO? Geez, just because he's a god.

Thank god for 2am writing calls if this is what they produce. Though I'm not happy with you for making me wait so long for an update, I utterly love this story and I would wait a millennium.

Ok I'm going to have to go watch 'Clash of the Titans' or 'Immortals' or something.

Let me just take a moment to ponder the perfection that is Apollo.

Jesus.

And okay seriously. What is Camille's problem? There's something odd about her. Can't quite put my finger on it but it's there. PLEASE. PLEASE UPDATE SOON <3

Well isn't Apollo just a total stud. He is so damn charming. Why do I feel like Camille has some sort of connection to Aphrodite? Just an inkling I have. Along with the inkling that I'll probably want to curb stomp her eventually.

On another note, however, this story is just amazing. I don't know if I've told you that yet. You write it so smoothly. I hope that when you get it finished, you at least consider sending it in to try to be published. It's so original and well written, I'll be sorely disappointed if you don't.

SO HAPPY RIGHT NOW!
I have no words for how happy this story makes me.

“You look beautiful,” Apollo whispered in Sian’s ear as they walked up to the large stone building.
I just swooned.

Dates were a foreign subject for the twenty-one year old.
Because she's been holding our for a sun god! And maybe also because guys don't know how to take girls on decent dates these days.

I could highlight the entire chapter, as always. But I love their date. It's too cute. Apollo is being such a gentleman, so suave. And it's good to see Sian's exterior melting somewhat and having her actually opening up to Apollo.

“Do not apologize for your distraction. Though, they say a wondering mind is an unhappy mind. Are you not happy?” Apollo inquired as he pulled a chair out for her to sit.
I don't know why this question got to me. I think it's a combination of the wording and that Apollo seems genuinely interested in her.

“Are we not supposed to fight for what we want?” He would never tell her that he had been fighting a very long time for her. It was a past he never wished for her to know.
Marry me Apollo. Geez. He's quickly moving into joint place with Hermes in my affection. It's a difficult task but he's getting there.

Dinner had been more than pleasant to Sian’s surprise. Her date was filled with stories; some that seemed almost too magical to believe. She was taken away to the far off lands of Greece and other parts of the world. The beauty Apollo spoke of could only be a dream.
How could Sian ever have doubted him? Man, I bet he does have some epic stories.


Somehow their conversation had found the topic of prophecy and Sian’s dreams.
Sian's told him of her dreams?? That's such a big step, it says a lot that she's prepared to tell him of these things when her mother was the only one to believe her.


The amount of understanding Apollo possessed floored Sian every time. He was so patient and willing to allow things to happen as they did. Sian admired him for that quality. Though, she was uneasy over the encounter with Camille. Something in the back of her mind was telling her something was wrong.
I really shouldn't gush about Apollo anymore, but damn, he is wonderful.
And why is Sian uneasy after her encounter with Camille? What's going to happen? I trust Sian's sense of judgment! so now I'm uneasy too.

“So it seems,” Apollo muttered. His eyes were not on Sian but on the blonde. An odd feeling of power resonated at the table when she had appeared. Apollo could not explain it but it made him suspicious of who this young woman was. Something was very wrong.
Seriously, what's up with Camille? You're going to drive me insane while I jump to different conclusions until you update next.

You've made me so happy. I love you and this story! Your writing never falters, it only gets better with each thing you post. I'm all gushy.
You inspire me with these updates everytime!

Loving your story and I hope you update soon xxx

You didn't tell me you updated you turd!
I loved it though. Artemis' love for her brother is so beautiful. I always pictured them as being very close.

!@?@!@!@? - Yeah that's because mibba finally decided to grace me with a story update email. ABOUT TIME MIBBA.
Also, I'm very proud of you for updating so swiftly, but now I want more. YEAH I WANT MORE BEFORE I'VE EVEN WRITTEN MY COMMENT.

-controls self-

Zeus is so badass. I love that no matter how cocky or fearless any of the Gods seem to be, they're always a little afraid of Zeus.

Apollo was a favorite among the council, among his sons and daughters. He knew their loyalty would be questioned when keeping his son’s secrets. It was the nature of children.
I love this, especially the last line, it's so true.

Zeus scoffed and turned to Hermes. A glare almost set his eyes on fire. “The boy should not be obsessed with the works of mortals.” Hermes cowered in his throne of stone as Zeus’s anger brought dark clouds down among the room.
Don't you dare glare at Hermes you asshat! And Shakespeare is no mere mortal!

Hera stood up, the movement ever so graceful as she made her way to her King. “Zeus, my love,” she spoke quietly. A hand found its way to the God’s armor plated shoulder. “Your son is rebellious. You must not smother him. He will return when he is ready.”
This has to be one of the rare times I've read a version of Hera that I've actually liked!

Artemis pulled from her siblings’ grasp. “Go,” she ordered. “But remember this, Aphrodite, if you toy with my brother’s heart I shall hunt you down and make sure you will forever be lost in the labyrinth of the Underworld.”
I stand by my belief that Artemis is a complete badass. Although I have to whisper this because my Athena statue is facing me.

I could highlight this whole chapter. It really shows that you enjoy writing scenes which feature other Gods. You've given them all strong personality traits and made them so distinguishable, it's fantastic. It was so easy to picture the whole scene playing out in my head what with your infallible dialogue and description.
I could gush over this story for the rest of my days :)

YAAAAAYYYY, FOR MEEEE!!! :)

how about this: i don't trust that aphrodite. husband or no husband, i sense some hoe-ish garbage from her. keep an eye on that one. mmhmm.
i have the feeling that someone in that circle will end up ratting poor apollo out, and then thats goon be bad cause zeus is gonna be like "aaaaarrrgggghhh!!!" *mad lightning bolts and thunder* yknow? definitely can't have that happening.
and what I'm really trying to figure out is this link between sian and cassandra. and i still wanna know what the fuck hades is lurking around for! creepy ass.

you better update again! and SOON! <3333