How Willow Died - Comments

I was brought her by comment swap, but it doesn't seem to have any chapters?? Perhaps my computer just isn't loading it right?

This story is amazing, I love how it is written. Definitely miss reading it, update soon please :)

If I wrote down all the thoughts that came to my head when trying to think of a comment for this, it'd just be me asking why and how over and over and over again.

This is an incredible story and I love everything about it. I usually hate it when people use the word you like you've done, but the way you do it is just perfect.

I totally saw a few grammar issues or typos, but I was loving it all too much to take the time to mark them down so... Oh well.

Seriously though, who the hell just came into the room? And how does his daughter not hear her screaming bloody murder?

Also, this almost reminds me of the book The Lovely Bones.

This story has so much emotion and structure. I love it. I don't mind filler chapters at all. Keep doing what you're doing :-)

I've missed this story, and I'm really glad that you came back to it.

Filler chapter maybe, but it was a good refresher. =)

You came to me in search of receiving a constructive comment before bringing this story back, but in all truth, your writing already holds so much perfection. The style in which you chose to create this story in is unique but effective. You decided to shed light on a subject that so many people why away from. However, you made Anna’s situation relatable by giving her a “flaw.” There are many who will read this who cannot claim that they have ever been kidnapped, but there are those who can relate to the medical pain that your heroine went through. I, for example, can relate to her as a survivor because I was diagnosed with type 1 diabetes at the age of 4. It is details like that that can bring in the broadest of readers.

The obscurity that you weave into each chapter leaves us flustered and yet captivated. I like how each of these characters has a distant and strong personality. None of them blur together. The second person perspective is also different. Never have I ever read a piece – a successful one – that utilized this approach. It stirs emotion in the reader as though they are along on this journey, their own bodies tortured and emotions toyed. The fact that your chapters are short and slow mirrors kidnappings in reality, as we are not always given facts right away.

My only critical comment pertains to the clash between the actions and words of your characters. I minored in Sociology; so learning about the thought process of certain groups of people has been very helpful in the creation of fictional characters. My concerns are geared towards this mysterious kidnapper. His behavioral patterns with his family members don’t really reflect the mindset of a killer. Yes, it is possible for a clean cut, well-respected man to get away with murder, but he would still first need to snap, or have the ability to snap, on those he loves the most. Your story is already so beautiful and realistic, that I would hate for one simple misadventure to leave your readers confused. He needs a character flaw; and while some may claim that his killing is the flaw, it only adds to what he is: the killer. He needs a flaw unnatural to the character you have made him to be.

Overall, amazing work. Yes, you should definitely bring it back. Yes, I have recommended and subscribed. Yes…I just feel like there needed to be a third yes to solidify my last statements.

This is amazing.
Beautiful.
Will you marry me?
You're such a fabulous writer and your way to describing things is amazing. I love how to did the layout for this story, the visual layout and the way you set up the chapters. The first and fourth one with the news articles is great and the big letters at the beginning of chapters or important parts (IE the "bedtime" story) is amazing.
The kidnapper is creepy as fuck along with his wack-ass family. I will be impatiently waiting for an update soon.

I'm so glad to see this is under construction recently and you're gonna keep writing because I'm really curious to see where this goes! I think my favorite part about this is how you write Willow's (I'm assuming they're hers) present thoughts in the comments. It's that little quirk that makes me like this story. Well, as well as the story as a whole, too. I'm glad this isn't your typical kidnapping fiction where the kidnapper is devilishly handsome and incredibly smooth but also psychotic and violent and creepy and he's obsessed with the girl he kidnapped and blah blah blah. I just really like where you've taken this so far. Impatiently waiting for more!

The fact that this is in a second person's point of view makes this story even more fantastic and original! I absolutely love how Willow delivers her feelings towards her kidnapper and the way she views her situations. I hate how this man, her kidnapper, is getting away with his deeds. I cannot wait to read more. (:

I love this story. I am hooked! The plot is great, and I really like the way you write your chapters. The plot is just amazing and I love your characters. Please, update as soon as possible. I'm dying to read more! (:

this is getting crazier by the second! i cannot wait to more about Ella! i cannot help but think he probably kidnapped Ella too? :c

Thank you so much for finding the time to update. This is one of my favorite stories ever on this site, and it's a real treat to see it updated. I love how this story is written in 2nd person--it's such a hard style to pull off, and I think you've got it right. It really pulls the reader right into the story.

Thank you so much for finding the time to update. This is one of my favorite stories ever on this site, and it's a real treat to see it updated. I love how this story is written in 2nd person--it's such a hard style to pull off, and I think you've got it right. It really pulls the reader right into the story.

Yay an update after a long time!!

this is the best thing ever, i'm addicted!!!
update soon, this is truly awesome!

Oh my god. U HAVE to keep going!!!!

Love this!! ♥

what a brilliant, insightful story. i think i was subscribed to this before, like the comment below me, but i'm so glad to see it back! hope it's still active, cheers

this is unbelievable. beautifully done!