Wow, opening a can of worms with this chapter. D= I love how deep this is, and how beautifully it's written, and as always I can't wait for more. This is one of the most original things I've ever read.
This story is very, very good. It was in her point of view but the message of the story is directed to another person. You're story is exactly like a diary and I love it!
The originality of this story is breathtaking, as is your writing style. I haven't read all the chapters yet, just that nice little newspaper clipping you have as a prelude (which is amazing, by the way). But you can bet, when I have time, I'll read them all properly and make sure to further tell you how great they are. :)
I really liked how the newspaper type thingy on chapter 1 was made! I was completely bewildered once it was about Michael, instead of Willow, it stumped me. In the 2nd chapter I think that it should be. 'I've had a glimpse of you before' it sounds more proper. BUT I could be wrong. Just a suggestion. I like how all your writing answers my questions. (e.g. how the chapter was short, and your Side Note: explained how they wont all be like that. etc etc.)
this is strange. very emotinally terse and suspensful, however the lack of exposition leaves the reader with a lot of strange questions. I would recommend creating some form of conventional narrative structure to flesh out the story. here is a nickpicky comment but it might save you a headache... people have successfully sued authors and directors for using their phone numbers in movies or books, this is why most fictional charecters mysteriously have 555 numbers
I loved that last sentence. I stared cancer in the eye and I stared you in the eye and told you both the same thing, 'do your worst'. It's just so.... Ah! I can't explain it with words. It was to great
Chapter Four Hmm, this chapter was... interesting. It seems more like a summary than an actual chapter to me, but don't take that in a bad way, because I know it's gonna lead up to something interesting. :D
Chapter Five Second paragraph, third sentence you said closes thing to home instead of closest.
I honestly was not expecting that whatsoever O.o I think the cancer adds a very interesting twist to the story, to see how that'll be played out with her kidnapping.
I stared cancer in the eye and I stared you in the eye and told you both the same thing, 'do your worst'. I absolutely loved that sentence right there ^0^
It's an amazing story. I'm looking forward to the next update :D
okay sorry for keep on annoying you with these comments, but I need to say a comment over 200+ but Its still something nice to say so I guess thats not going to be bad, but I was also wondering, can someone edit the picture on their layout?