I'm so glad I found this! :) The summary is very enticing. Although I wish the font was a little bigger, but the story is amazing. I love the addition of the newspaper articles. That's just brilliant.
Comment swap lead me here, and I must say, this is the most interestingly laid out story I've ever read! I think it's really cool-looking. Plus, the plot is good. There were just a few minor errors in your grammar, but nothing that distracts from the story :) Well done!
(Comment Swap) very short summary. wish it was just a bit longer. (Chapter 1) looks like what I see. "dissapearence, they should", the comma makes it work better. the layout is making it hard to comment. (Chapter 2) "your breath was leaving thick clouds behind your frantic steps" needs reworking? "Please you" is "Please, you" lending emphasis, and getting it natural? (Chapter 3) "Patrions"?? "Fsarter information" is "Further information"? Althoughit may look good with the extra image in the chapters, it doesn't come out, as good in reading.
I feel there are more chapters coming. furstly, due to the fact that the cases are not closed, and the indidvidual behind it had not been caught.
The vocabulary works well with the text of the story. It's an easy read, despite the topic. Gives a feel, as if reading this in the paper.
Maybe completing that feel would enlarge the scope of this story?
I love the use of the newspaper articles. The girl in the second one is very pretty. Though you haven't written much, it is very good. I'm definitely subscribing to this story. You've done a great job with this so far. Keep up with the wonderful work!
I don't think there has ever been a story that uses so few words, and still captivates me! This was very beautifully written! I thought the use of the newspaper article was very clever! You've definitely got something special here! Good luck!
This is so beautiful. I love it that with very few words you've managed to captivate me so much! Your writing style is individual and the newspaper articles make it very engaging. You've definitely found a way to separate you from everybody else and I think it's genius. I've subscribed because I can't wait to see where this is going.
Okay, I love everything about this. The layout is beautiful, the simple quotes in the summary drew me in, and how did you do the prelude?! That is so cool. Ahh I'm just, seriously, in love with this. Definitely recommending and subbing!
Oh goodness! I really do love how you make the little newspaper article type deals. They're so neat! I almost want to rewrite an old story of mine and steal that idea for the first chapter because it's just so COOL. You really have me hooked on this story and I get sad that they're so short, but omg. I have to know more. It's all so mysterious! Please do update soon, lovely. This is creeping to the top of my favorites list.
wow! this was a really good story i love how you incorporated the newspaper stories into the story itself, it makes it even more interesting and intriguing to read!
one thing i dont really like is how short the chapters are =(
overall though i thought the story was fantastic and your writing style is excellent too =D keep writing! you're really good at it!
The short summary gave me goosebumps. I swear, this is one of the best stories I've read so far. This isn't one of those sappy stories or whatever. I agree with everyone else on this when they say its great. I love it, and I can't wait for another one.
i love it. the news paper articles as chapters are a brilliant idea, its refreshing to see different things being done. I love the way you write, how you created an element of mystery and it all flowed together perfectly. I love it and cant wait for more :-)
I finally got tome to read! And I absolutely adored every single word of it. I'm curious as to how everything's going to play together, and I loved how the prelude was an actual newspaper article type deal, that's the smartest thing I've ever seen on this website. And the first chapter was highly interesting. I'm in love with this as I'm in love with your writing. I can't wait for you to update - I can tell that this is going to be one of my new favorites. :)