How Willow Died - Comments

This is absolutely beautiful, yet so intense too. I love it! Can't wait for more

This is just beautiful.

so intense oh my gosh! How did you add pictures into it?

Just read this. Amazing story. Very sad. However, you used "worse" twice in the last chapter when you should have used "worst". Just a heads up.

I love this chapter, it was amazing added so much depth to the character development, i can't wait to see where you take this.

This chapter was definitely an eye-opener, and it gave a whole new dimension to the story that I hadn't expected. Absolutely brilliant.

xoxo
HJ.

This chapter was definitely an eye-opener, and it gave a whole new dimension to the story that I hadn't expected. Absolutely brilliant.

xoxo
HJ.

Dear Lord!
I love, love, love this chapter!

Wow this is good, i just happened by this and lets just say, you had me hooked right after i read the title! :D cant wait for more!

Wow.
I'm excited for the update!

I'd like to say I found your story through the review that was done for the Mibba Magazine.

I like the layout. It's very clean and simple. Not too bright but not too dull, and it doesn't hurt my eyes.

Prelude
I like that the chapter looks like a newspaper, instead of just words. I think it opens to the story very well. I found a few grammatical errors within it, but nothing to worry too much about.

Chapter One
I think the first chapter is very well written and is a great piece for the story.

In the second paragraph, first sentence, you wrote "dinner" instead of "diner".

That's the only mistake I found in that chapter. I like this story very much so far ^-^

Chapter Two
Again, I like that you do newspaper article images instead of typing the actual story out. It makes it seem so much more realistic and relatable. I found about one spelling mistake, but it was nothing major.

Chapter Three
In the second paragraph, a couple sentences in, you said: As I looked at you’re fuzzy figure, ...
I think you meant "your fuzzy figure".

Other than that, I didn't really find any mistakes in this chapter.

I think the story is very believable and realistic. I'm just hoping he's not a vampire or something that's kidnapped her, which is seen in a lot of stories online nowadays.

I'm subscribing to, and recommending, this ^0^

Amaizing! I'm glad the person did the review on Mibba's home page. Can't wait for more! :)

Found this story through the review on Mibba's home page, and I'm really glad I did. Because honestly, the summary alone would never have drawn me in.

This is a very interesting take on things. I love that you've got the newspaper articles, and I love that you have Willow speaking to her abductor as opposed to the reader. It makes for a nice change.

Not much to go on just yet, and sorry this comment isn't much (I'm actually supposed to be doing an assignment right now), but know that I'm loving this and I can't wait to see where you take it!

xoxo
HJ.

OH SNAP.
Summary caught my attention.
"This is gonna be good. I can tell." -Dory
I love your layout, by the way, and I adore the newspaper inserts. This is amazing. I'm so intrigued and I desperately want to know more, and it's not often that a Mibba story makes me feel like that. ._.I am subscribing and I cannot wait to read more! Keep up the good work! xox

So far, I absolutely love this.
I love the way you've written this, it leaves it so mysterious.
I am hoping for the best for Willow in situation she's in, but I am nervous she's not going to make it out alive.
I can't wait for more(:

I love this story. I think that this is very well written and I'm glad that I came across this story. I think that it is amazing and I can't to read more of it. Please update this story soon. I would love to read more.

Very interesting way of presenting the story, I'm pret sure I like the newes article idea, however there is a small part of me that doesn't. I like the story so far, your characters definitely spark emotional ties and it is well written. Seems very different from most Mibba stories, and I like it a lot. It reminds me just a bit of Lovely Bones too, which of course is a compliment. Keep updating!

This is utterly beautiful. Short but it explains a lot.

Oh bless Willow's heart.
I just want to keep her safe and gah!

I really enjoy this. (: