Horizon Lines - Comments

Update please. I misssss readinggggggggggggggggg ittttt.

^ lmfao.

anyway. i really liked
this chapter. Alex just
cracks me up. and also
i think of my Alex from
CB because he's also
latino and comes from
like the ghetto area. but
he's nothing like Alex as
far as personality goes.
still. i just find that sort of
funny. ah...anyway. poor
Sean. Alex, at this point,
does not deserve someone
like Sean being so nice to
him.

Oh, and Miyral... From myself and everyone else who thinks you're the only whiny bitch who is complaining about such minute details... shut up.
This is a fiction story meaning that whatever the author wants to happen,
will happen, and it will be okay because it is their story.
You can't honestly say that the name Providence symbolizing a small town
throws you off that badly. Get over it.

I really loved this last chapter (and all of the other chapters, ;D) so don't worry about it.
I don't think the ending was rushed at all. you did beautifully.

Update again, please?
I love this story <3

me likes,
me likes.

chapter five; Alex's first day of school is basically like what every new kid has nightmares about before the first day. Poor guy. He's trying pretty hard just to blend in and he can't even make it to the parking lot without hitting poor Sean.
Okay, now, you added in this part about Alex noticing a very small feature of Sean that just...I loved. Normally when people write they try and make their favorite characters have all these gorgeous features like bright, bright, bright blue eyes or 'the most breath taking smile' or stuff like that. But for some reason, the simple way that you described how Sean's fingers and kind of longer than normal made this really big impression. It makes it seem so real. Sean and Alex weren't staring into each other's eyes for like an hour or anything...it was just a real, defining feature that any normal person would pick up on and I got a very vivid picture of it. Whether you meant to do that or not...it doesn't really matter. But I liked that little detail.
But I do love that Alex still thinks Sean is kind of a weirdo.
Jeez, Alex. Next time you feel like running some punk over with your truck, try to pick someone a little less spastic, okay? LMFAO....
I do sort of like this sort of feeling that Alex gets when Sean is around. It's not hugely strong, it's definitely not attraction, or instant love, it's just...guilt. I have a feeling he normally wouldn't feel that way about people, so it's differently with Sean. Maybe because Sean reminds me of a small wounded animal...
Awwww. I got a sharp pain in my gut near the end. ): I want to be in the middle seat of Alex's truck so I can slap him and make him be nice to Sean because I feel like his protective mother or something...
Damn you Alex! Lol.

Aw, I liked this chapter. :]
And I think Sean's adorable.
With his bloody head and spazzy nature. :D
I really like how Alex is still an asshole.
But he feels really bad about it.
I like how you're keeping his original personality,
not just giving him a new one the moment he meets Sean.
Kudos to you. :)

I really, really like this.
And I can't wait till there's more. :)

Alex is amazing. I know people just like him:) And i love gay people considering people really close to me are gay so i really respect you for putting this on the internet. I am addicted and I am in love with this story.

PLEASE update, like, now. :)
thanks for writing this!!! it made my day:)

awww he makes him feel like an ass hole.....
thats love! hahaha xD

Woops, All*

Yusss, new update.
I laughed really hard when Alex was like "Can you try not to get blood al over my truck" when he had just hit him with a truck.
Hes such an asshole.
I love it.

Great update, yo.
Have I mentioned that this is my favourite story on this site?
Because it is.
I loved how Sean was actually snapping back at Alex, and
not just sitting there. Sean is so adorable, and I love his character.
Urg, this story is so amazing.

Oh, and also just to go on and on about things, I love the layout for this story too.
Can't wait for the next chapter!

I love it.
The way you describe things and interpret the personalities of your characters is just.. Wow.
I really love Alex, hes just such a dick, and its not often you really see that dick like attitude portrayed as well as you do it.
And with Sean, well he seems just downright adorable, so cute and innocent.
I wish I had even just a sliver of your writing talent, you lucky thing.
Subbed and anxiously waiting for your next update (:

This story is super spectacular so far(: I love Alex's asshole-ness because it's not just out of spite, it's kind of his survival instincts, which makes everything more realistic(: And Sean just seems abso-freaking-lutely adorable so far(: Can't wait to read more(:

I'm sorry I have to do this but it's really going to bug me if I don't. Providence Rhode Island is a city not a small town. I'm actually going to Providence this weekend for the water fire festival. Anyway, if you could just change the town name that would be great. It would keep us New Englanders from complaining. On a lighter note I must say that I love Alex's character so far. Can't wait for more! <3

:3
*subscribes*
i love this!!

awesome story so far!
sean sounds so cute! :)
i can't wait to see where you take this story, please update soon.

Wow. I really like this a whole whole whole lot.
I really like how Alex is like, proud of where he's from, in a way?
I don't think that's how I want to describe it, but it'll do.
Baha, he makes me feel good about my "Latino Spice" (as one of my friends likes to call it.)
But it's good. Because I'm used to those kind of characters being over the top assholes.
Alex is a good balance of dick and good. :)

Sean sounds completely adorable. Seriously. He's all shy and awkward and stuff. :3
Cuteness all bundled up in one!
And Alex hit him.
LOL.

More soon? (:

I love the idea of this,
and how you've done it.
an Alex being a bad ass just makes it that much better.

Ahahahahah Its not really funny that he hit Sean...but it is at the same time.
XD
This is awesome <3