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chapter four; Okay. Firstly. Alex and me were separated at birth. It's true. Or our minds were separated at birth because I just keep thinking in my mind, 'oh my God, that's so true.' Haha.
Like basically how he disses everyone in Providence about how they're way too materialistic. I do that all the time too. But mostly it's out of my girlish bitterness for people that have the luxury of spending that much money.
laughter-written plastic bitches and their asshole boy toys
Genius.
All throughout this I also have to keep telling myself that you're a girl writing this because you just portray Alex's voice so consistently that it's amazing. I really feel like I'm in an angry teenage boy's head.
And the whole angry Spaniards thing is TOTALLY relate-able. you do not go into my grandmother's house and NOT eat her food. Unless you want to get spanked or something. Or worse...but that part of the story with Rosa is really realistic in my opinion.
Jeez, fucking huggy people. Lmfao. I can just picture the turned up look on his face when that happened.
Okay. Yes. I totally squealed when Sean smiled at Alex. *has a moment* Just when he's casually like, 'oh haiii again.' I laughed a bit. It was as if they were just passing in the hall and Alex hadn't totally hit him with his goddamn truck.

I NEED MORE, please(: This is definitely my new favorite story. No joke.

Oh God. What
to say about this
chapter. I nearly
died of laughter
when Alex hit
Sean...oh. my.
jesus. christ.
BRILLIANT...
really. i want an
update in my inbox
YESTERDAY.
okay... please (:

I think this is my favourite chapter so far.
Alex is so hilarious! I think you write him perfectly.
The ending of this chapter was great, and
I can't wait to see what happens next! :3

Sean is just adorable, and I want to see how him and Alex are going to interact.
'Cause you know, Alex is such a jackass.
Ha, but I love him anyways.

Update soon!
Oh, and now I'm craving pancakes. xD

chapter one; Okay, so I'm pretty sure I always love a sort of badass main character. They're always misunderstood and I just love that. Alex, it seems, is really misunderstood and seeking attention. I think. In a way it seems like that. (His ride to Rhode Island sort of reminded me of my trip to Mexico. The bus ride was terrible!)
Seriously, learn to control your fucking children already. That was exactly how I felt! that's how I always feel on crowded buses.
Alex definitely didn't seem very happy to be leaving though. Poor guy :L

chapter two; Meeting old relatives is completely awkward for me. Just thought I'd say...
But Alex's aunt seems pretty cool. It's funny 'cos my dad's brother actually didn't show up to his wedding for sort of a backwards reason...but similar. Anyway. Poor Alex is sort of moping like an emo, but in a very comical way. Especially when he bangs his head against the window. I'm pretty sure we all do that. But it sucks that his parents had to ship him off like that.

chapter three; Can I just say that you had a really nice way of intro-ing this chapter. The description seemed really, flow-y and whatnot. But when you mentioned 'blustery' the thing my mind immediately pictured was Whinnie the Pooh. I just remember him always saying 'It was a blustery day...' stuff. Lol. Hope that's not too weird... sorry.
I'm excited! This chapter we meet Sean...he seems so friggin' adorable. And poor guy, Alex is kind of a jackass. But even in his mind I think he's kicking himself for being kind of mean. But it's just so damn cute that Sean seems like he drops stuff a lot. I wouldn't go as far as saying he's clumsy, but maybe more of a "butterfingers" type. And he blushes. Aw. I really hope we see more of Sean. He's only been in this one chapter but his personality is so cute and well-established already. And during the time where he brushes fingers with Alex, blushes and Alex rolls his eyes, I just got this completely clear vision of the scene and couldn't help but laugh.

Anyway. I subscribed, obviously. I really like it so far. It's so refreshing to see a sort of slash that doesn't immediately start of with emo kids (even if Alex did have his little gazing-out-at-the-window-full-of-sadness moment) just literally screwing every other gay kid... seriously. It's disturbing and really difficile to find original fiction like this. Sorry if there are retarded typos and stuff. I stayed up late reading this and even though it's really only like twelve it just seems late..

Oh God. So Alex is like,
my new favorite asshole.
Seriously. And I'm enjoying
the fact that his personality
makes him such an ugly,
unattractive person, and yet
through that, you just know
for sure that he's hurting.
And I LOVE Sean. The way
you describe him just
makes me want to jump out
of my chair and squeeze him
and smother him with hugs.
Seriously. Lol.
Ah. God, I love this, really I
do. And I finally sat in one place
to finish it.
Also, the first chapter was a little
depressing. But you have a really
cool way of describing things, with
descriptive settings that makes
me really draw myself into the mood.

I demand more Sean time. M'kay.
<3 (<--this is how much I like this)

IF U DONT UPDATE SOON MY RAINBOW BUNNIES WILL COME AND EAT UR FEET!!!!!!!. i suggest u update soon if u want to avoid this sad situation........ thanks have a great day!!!!!!! :)

Aww this is a really cute story <3
Alex entertains me. And Sean is just too cute XD
Keep it up!

I never do get tired of reading slashes. :D You need some confidence~ Keep writing! I would love to see how this story unfolds!

You don't really like this chapter?
You silly.
Because this update was great, I think I laughed about fifteen times.
Alex is so funny, I love him.
You make it seem so realistic, and it was like I could see everything that was happening.

Can't wait for the next chapter. :3

so, i'm pretty excited to see where you are going with this...
I like it :D

very nice love(:

I love this so far.
The idea sounds really creative, and I'm excited to see where you go with it.
The main character has an amazing personality already, he's so funny. :3

Can't wait for the next update!

"eventual butsecs"
hmm. wonder where
you got that from (;

I loved it dear, so don't worry about it (:
It was a great start. I loved the beginning. <3
I saw some run-on sentences but they did have semicolons, colons, or , <-- those (forgot the name) but I don't know. They felt run-ons. It was near the beginning though. I any notice those.

But anyways.
Wonderful start. Again, I loved it ^^ <3
-hugs- <3

hot damn.

i need more.
and this was just...so fucking amazing.