The False Vampire - Comments

This was a super interesting story! I really enjoyed your voice in this, it's a writing style I don't often see and thought was well done for the most part. I would just take some time to thoroughly edit so that grammatical or punctuation errors don't take away from the story. Keep writing! Great job!

I've only ready a few chapters and I can already tell you that I enjoy your writing style very much. I ruined the story by reading other comments though haha. Your style of writing is different, in a good way I can reassure you. You don't use a whole lot of dialogue which is definitely refreshing. Even I have an issue with going on and on with dialogue. You do well with describing the setting and the people in it. The only thing I have to say is that I wish you used a different word that wasn't 'false' in your title. Your writing is so delicate and elegant that I feel like a fancier synonym would be better. But it's not my story so don't take it to heart haha. Good job, I'll have to come back and read the rest so I know what everybody is talking about and being able to connect the comments. She just met the guy and she could be pregnant, DANG! haha. Great job :)

Okay, so I've only read the first two chapters, but I am hooked! I love your style of writing! It's so easy-flowing an elegant. I also love Adrienne. She's so quirky and lovable. I like how she's so aware of what makes her different (besides the obvious being allergic to sunlight) and accepts that that's just who she is. I feel so bad for her to not have any friends. My one friend is an insomniac, and there are days where he doesn't get any sleep at all. Whenever he comes over and spends the night, I often push my limits until I just pass out because I don't want him to be awake by himself. I wish Adrienne had someone who was willing to do that with her. Even if her friend couldn't stay up all night with her, I just think it'd be nice for her to have someone that is willing to try. Of course, that's just something selfish that I want and that you really don't have to take to heart or consider criticism. Now, back to devouring this.

Oh man I hope she isn't pregnant. DX

Oh man I hope she isn't pregnant. DX

Oh man I hope she isn't pregnant. DX

No I probably just need to re-read it I was really sleepy when reading it I just couldn't stop though. I'm just a bit mixed up about the relations if you know what I mean.

@ BlueEyedAngel2 I'm so sorry that you're confused. Anything I can do to help?

I'm so very confused. .. though I love it

This is getting SOOOO good <3

Pleasure so intense? Yeah, no. Moar like rape.

Please update soon =}

Well, thank Jeebus she isn't knocked up! Whew!

Glad i could be of help loving your story cannot wait to read it through again after it's fixed up but even with the small errors its still a wonderfully interesting story i love how even though it about mythical creatures it's different than the normal stories on mibba that are about mythical beings. I'm now up to the last chapter and can't wait for the next update! Your very talented I'm so interested in your writing that I'm going to read more of your work hope to see a new update sometime soon!

@ Kira_Hope1691
Thanks Hope (Kira?)! I actually had already noticed that, and am right now in the process of editing all my chapters to clear up the mistakes, unfortunately it is what happens when you resume a story after not writing for a year, you tend to forget the small details, but I am working on them, and currently, I am only up to chapter 5. But thanks for pointing those out specifically, it saves me a lot of time!

Just started reading this tonight not all the way through it yet but came across a few things that you need to fix and just wanted to let you know. First you have the purswell mothers name as trish the first time she goes over to there house when she had bad sun burn and the second time she goes over after learning about the "Folk" you have the mother's name as anita.
Second when she first starts school she says she has two more years there and then later you have her talking about knowing elisa for five months and graduating from school in three months... maybe I'm just misunderstanding something but i think you should re read it and edit it again to clear up those things for your future readers.
But other than those little things i love this story it's very unique and your characters are very interesting this story keeps you wanting more. Love love love it!!

Other than that, I love this story. The creativity is awesome. :]

Other than that, I love this story. The creativity is awesome. :]

Can you just put 'rape trigger' instead of 'disturbing'? I didn't know what 'disturbing' could mean and read ahead and am... uncomfortable, to say the least. :/

Soooo.... I just started reading this today.... and I got all the way to your most recent chapter and seriously I cannot wait for your next update. Through the first couple of chapters I couldn't figure out what type of story it would turn into... I love how you subtly gave allusions towards the supernatural (the folk) and didn't just jump right into it. There is more I wish to say but I don't want to ramble forever... Anyway- I am enthralled.... KEEP UPDATING PLEASE! I want to know more :D