Homepage › Stories › The False Vampire › Comments

The False Vampire - Comments

  • hellobeautiful

    hellobeautiful (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    ♀
    Age:
    31
    Location:
    United States
    First of all, the layout is adorable. I really liked how you set down the summary. It definitely seized my attention, especially the mini check list. I thought it was really cute, especially the line Adrienne repeats to herself -- "Your such a bloody vampire". I really like your style of writing; it's simple but descriptive at the same time. I also like Adrienne’s sarcasm. It really makes reading the chapters worthwhile. I can definitely feel her longing for being normal and being able to walk out into the sun without burning to crisp. Her character is becoming more endearing as I read further down the chapters.

    From the chapters I read, I noticed one mistake where you wrote: I watched a marvelled at the range of colours – I’m guessing you meant “I watched and marveled at the range of colors.

    Other than that, keep up the great writing and keep updating. You are doing a great job so far. I really like where the story is heading. I only went through a couple of the chapters, but I am definitely going to go back to read the rest. This story is very original and exceptional and I cannot wait to dive into Adrienne’s world!

    ^___^
    June 5th, 2012 at 08:18am
  • Synyster Gates;

    Synyster Gates; (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    ♀
    Age:
    33
    Location:
    United States
    I love this darling :)
    June 4th, 2012 at 05:28am
  • ervinsue

    ervinsue (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    ♀
    Age:
    25
    Location:
    United States
    I just read all the way to chapter 24 and i cant wait to see what happens next. please update soon!!!! Mr. Green
    May 29th, 2012 at 10:31pm
  • SuperNovaEclipse

    SuperNovaEclipse (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    ♀
    Age:
    28
    Location:
    United States
    I totally love this story. Plz keep goin plz!!!!!!!
    February 2nd, 2012 at 12:26am
  • My_Life_Style

    My_Life_Style (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    ♀
    Age:
    28
    Location:
    United States
    plz keep writing i read all the way to chapter 24 and now im super interseted
    you are a amazing writer.....
    and if you can check out my poems!
    January 17th, 2012 at 04:31pm
  • Burgerat20

    Burgerat20 (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    ♀
    Age:
    30
    Location:
    United States
    uh oh what wrong!!!
    January 10th, 2012 at 04:38am
  • Burgerat20

    Burgerat20 (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    ♀
    Age:
    30
    Location:
    United States
    I just found this and fell in love with it. and im excited to see what happens next
    December 30th, 2011 at 04:30pm
  • IceDeath.

    IceDeath. (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    ♀
    Age:
    27
    Location:
    United States
    Love the story. I find it magical in a way. Keep it going, update soon please.
    December 30th, 2011 at 06:19am
  • emilypaget

    emilypaget (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    ♀
    Age:
    28
    Location:
    Australia
    Just letting you guys know - I've decided I'm not going to delete The False Vampire!
    December 19th, 2011 at 11:13am
  • ParadiseIsDead

    ParadiseIsDead (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    ♀
    Age:
    28
    Location:
    United States
    0.0 no delete!
    I like the chapter please keep writing im begging!!!!
    -Gets on knees-
    PLEASE!!!!!!!
    December 19th, 2011 at 12:44am
  • Germansinger1

    Germansinger1 (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    ♀
    Age:
    33
    Location:
    Canada
    i'm with redda please don't delet it i really really like the story :'(
    December 9th, 2011 at 03:58am
  • redda

    redda (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    ♀
    Age:
    27
    Location:
    Australia
    nooooooooooo!!!!!!! please don't delete it! i only just started reading it!!! PLEASE>>> IM BEGGING YOU.... NNOOOOOOOOOOOO
    October 31st, 2011 at 06:59am
  • ParadiseIsDead

    ParadiseIsDead (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    ♀
    Age:
    28
    Location:
    United States
    'FIGHT FIGHT FIGHT' XD ooh awesome.....
    i cant wait to hear what happens on saturday!!
    Keep on trucking...or writing... XD
    September 11th, 2011 at 12:48am
  • ParadiseIsDead

    ParadiseIsDead (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    ♀
    Age:
    28
    Location:
    United States
    I still absolutely love this! I'm addicted! keep writing! :D
    August 15th, 2011 at 10:04pm
  • LifesJustMyCupOfTea

    LifesJustMyCupOfTea (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    ♀
    Age:
    28
    Location:
    Australia
    “Trinnean! You are barking mad! Barking!”
    “Woof”
    Oh god I love this!! :D
    August 12th, 2011 at 01:28pm
  • Call_me_Dot

    Call_me_Dot (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    ♀
    Age:
    30
    Location:
    United States
    i love this story! :) please update soooon!!! <3
    July 28th, 2011 at 08:15pm
  • ParadiseIsDead

    ParadiseIsDead (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    ♀
    Age:
    28
    Location:
    United States
    I really Love this story and I cant wait for you to update more....VERY CURIOUS !!!!!!
    HAHAHAH LOVE"D IT!! :D
    July 24th, 2011 at 05:29am
  • ChinaMina

    ChinaMina (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    ♀
    Age:
    26
    Location:
    United States
    I am really sucked into this story! I'm not sure if you're planning on posting more, but I would love to read more! In my opinion, you are a really talented writer and I'll have to check out more works from you! :D
    July 16th, 2011 at 09:34pm
  • Lyndz14

    Lyndz14 (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    ♀
    Age:
    27
    Location:
    United States
    i love this story! updates!! =D
    July 14th, 2011 at 03:18am
  • xuanny

    xuanny (100)

    :
    Member
    Gender:
    ♀
    Age:
    29
    Location:
    United States
    updates! =]
    July 3rd, 2011 at 07:47am
Homepage › Stories › The False Vampire › Comments