Life is Beautiful - Comments

Again, I absolutely love your writing style, especially in the Prologue. That prologue just.. blew me away. The amount of details that you put into describing how she looked and how much the Tuberculosis affected her really made me understand the story a lot more. It also showed that you really do put an effort into specifying medications, so that gives me a hint that you really know your facts and research your stuff. (:

So, I'm really waiting for you to update soon! Because I almost had a heart attack when I saw that the latest update for this amazing story was February 24th. Not so happy about that, but I'll just be patiently waiting on the sidelines for the next wonderful chapter. (:

The layout is really pretty, and I love the banner; it fits really well.
I love the way you started it off, with the short sentences of description, and led it up to a personal connection with the main character at the end. Your writing style in general seems to work really well for this type of story; my only con/crit would be to watch how you break up sentences, because sometimes you do it in ways that are technically grammatically correct, but not so good for the flow.
Overall though, awesome job!

This layout is so cute. I just had to say that.

This was written in fantastic detail. I'm really impressed! The detail you put in just blew my mind. The first chapter, with the time lapse, confused me a little, but other than that, I really enjoyed it!

Keep up the great work, kiddo!

Before I begin commenting on the story itself, I want to tell you that the layout is really pretty. I also like the picture above the title.

Onto the story. I really liked, how in the first five short paragraphs, they described the girl and you described her in such detail, which I loved. The only thing I wondered was why were there children, her peers as you called them, playing outside the hospital? That was my only question in the prologue.

I really love how the first chapter was told in two different times in her life – when she was in fourth grade, and seven years later. Although I am not too fond of large time lapses, I like how you skipped seven years of her life. I think it kept the chapter exciting, well to me anyway. Overall, this is a very interesting story and I can see that you have really done your research on TB. Keep up the good work!

So, I was definitely drawn in. The prologue set the mood. And I really liked that. Reading from her point of view, omg you can definitely feel what she is feeling and you just wanted to feel so bad for her and help out this little kid. She lost all her friends and she was basically alone. I felt bad for her :(

The layout works well with the story :) You also know how to describe everything and it is like I can see everything just happening! :) There were just a few grammar mistakes but nothing too major. I really do like this story so far and can't wait to see where you take it!

Amazing job :)

Perfect =] an excellent start and the lay out is just too perfect for words.

I'm going to sub idk why but it gives me a good vibe and I want to see if it's going the direction I see it going in my head. If it where a movie it feels like a chick flick lol.

I really like the title of this- it gives off a positive attitude :)
I like this layout too, it's really cute!
an interesting idea too- I'm not sure how this is all going to work out
but it seems very promising and good. great job so far <3