The Rules of Life - Comments

Reading this because I saw a journal about it. When I clicked on it, I figured it wasn't my kind of story but decided to give it a try anyway and was pleasantly surprised. Even though I never really read high school based stories anymore.

I really like your characters (well, the girl and her teacher. The rest suck :p)

Oh and please keep the kitty safe, lol. I get so bummed out when animals are hurt/killed in movies/stories. I'm a softy. But alas, its your story, not mine. So its not my call. XD

I'll be looking forward to updates. (:

i'm loving the depth of this story. i saw a post suggesting it and decided to read it. i'm so glad i did! can't wait for an update :)

It freakin sucks that I have so little time to read this all through.

It's absolutely amazing!

Chapter One

He was a grade-A asshole. It would be the only A he’s ever gotten.
Favorite line right there =D

Travis couldn’t get through the crowd this fast, not with his barn-sized body.
Another favorite :D

MMMM I want a math teacher like Mr. Hardacker ;D Although there sorta is one at my school. Awkward. Anyway...

“Whoa, there, hoe,” I said. “Close your legs before you pick up an STD. Or a baby."
Can I just... OMG if this girl went to my school she'd be my best friend :D

Chapter Two

Dash Sheppard is the sexiest guy's name I think I've ever heard in my entire life.

In the third-to-last chapter, you said: My fist connected with his face with enough force to send up stumbling back.
I think it should say "to send him stumbling back" instead of up.

Chapter Three

A few paragraphs in, when she went to solve the problems on the board in Mr. H's room, you said: There were easy enough.
It should say they were easy enough, not there.

Chapter Four

In the sixth paragraph, you said: His eyes darkened, like the always did when he was rearing for a fight.
It should say "like they always did", not the.

In the sixth paragraph, you said: Paul wasn’t usually like this. When I was little, he doted on my completely.
It should say, "on me completely".

In the same paragraph, you said: “If you’re gonna punch someone you, you need to learn how to make it count.”
I don't there should be two "you" in that sentence.

When she sits down across from her dad, you said: “I was thinking,” I began, “that Travis Elton is fuckwad and he deserved to be punched in the face.
I think it should say "a fuckwad".

Chapter Five

The berries had long since been picked by bored housewives hoping to cheer up their cheating husbands and make them love them again.
I love this line :3

In the sixth paragraph, you said: The noise stopped suddenly and then returned more as whining noise.
I think there should be an "a" before whining.

Awww, poor little kitty! :O

Oh snap. I still feel bad for the kitty though DX I hope he finds a nice home :3

Chapter Six

Meth Addict Barbie. LOL.

Chapter Seven

In the part where you were describing her joyous peeing moment XD you said: None of my cellmates looked too into hygiene so maybe none of the ones before me did either .
There's a space between the last word and the period. Just so you know.

After she goes out and sees her dad with Mr. H, you said: We weren’t on good terms, this was true, but I was daughter.
There should be the word "his" before daughter.

When I reached them, and my dad spoke, I was weighing the pros and cons of becoming a lesbian in my head.
I love her, I really do XD

OMG THE KITTY IS BACK. I LOVE THE KITTY. YAY. ^0^

Frat boy model math teacher. LOL.

Chapter Eight

In the second-to-last paragraph, you said: God, I hoped I didn’t look like when I successfully made a bitch move.
I think it should say "look like that".

Chapter Nine

AWWW. KITTY KITTY KITTY. I love Soe so much ^0^

I don't remember if you'd ever mentioned her hair before this chapter, but I imagined her more as a brunette (I haven't looked at the Characters page).

In the fifth paragraph you said: This place was familiar though but I couldn’t place it.
I feel like the word "there" doesn't belong, or else there should be a comma before and after it.

In the second-to-last paragraph you said: But now that I was out, now that I was clean, and had professed my hatred for humanity, well. I was interesting again
I feel like that should be one sentence, not two.

I just want to know how he'd get the drugs into her locker O.O;

Honestly, I kinda wish it would be Dash crushing on her. Even though he's only been written in a little bit, I dunno, I like him... better. XD And his name.

What I really love about this story in that the chapters are such a good length. It's an amazing story, and I'm subscribing :) I give you props for the layout as well, because it's easy on my eyes, not too dark and not too light.

Please update soon! :)

That awkward moment when you send a story comment before you finish it alkshjdf.
And then it goes to the top of the next page.

I JUST LOVE THIS SO UPDATE SOON OKAY.

haha omfg this is
just
wonderful.
I fucking love Kinley, I HOPE SHE NEVER CHANGES. The bitch tells it like it is. And the part when she was in jail and she finally got to pee?

One of my most important rules of life is that everyone automaticall sucks until they prove to me that they don't.

The things we aren't yet aware about Travis and McKinley's relationship! I am loving this story. I can relate to McKinley in a lot of ways... minus the getting into trouble piece. Anyways, update soon! Ugh, still can't get over how much of a jerk-wad Travis is. If I could I would jump into this story and give him a good punching. :)

TRAVIS TOOK MCKINLEY'S VIRGINITY? WHAT THE BARNACLES/CRAB CAKES/HARRY STYLES/LAMPS?

Hohoho, AND he Wants to go on a date With her? IDK I think I'm starting to like him. :P

I don't know when you changed the character photo for the teacher, but I like the change! And I loved the update - I don't know what to make of Travis! Is he really into her or is he up to something?! I guess we shall see in future updates!

Ohh, & I'm intrigued with the new story you're showcasing! :)

wait im alittle confused in chapter 8 did that all really happen to her before or is she just imagining it all

So, McKinley had a little bit of interaction with Travis, eh? Huh. Wonder what that means....
Overall, another beautiful update.

I'm so glad I found this story! The details you put into your sentences and the way that you show very realistic situations (okay, somewhat. But we can all dream about the sexy teacher bullshit). Sorry if this comment doesn't make sense but I'm writing it on my phone. I'm hooked :)

I KNEW IT! I don't know how, but I just knew that it was going to be Mr. Hardacker!
My awesome senses led me to the conclusion, it was just something I was born with. ;)
Beautiful update again. I look forward to reading more of McKinley's adventures.

i'm in love with this story <3

Bloody good update. So, who picked her up from jail? I wonder wonder! Update soon! I am totally devoted to this story.

this is really good so ready for more:)

I feel bad for the cat :( please update soon :D

Something good's gonna happen right?

She saved a kitty!

Life rules? Well...
My #21: Never pass up reading a good story.....

I'm sorry, it was just what I could come up with off the top of my head.

Overall, lovin' the update.

A new update. Yay!
Best life rules ever....
"If you are going to look back on something and laugh about it, you may as well laugh about it now."
and
"Never pass up an opportunity to pee." haha