Superman - Comments

I would be soo confused if somebody kissed me the one second, grinning the next and vanishing the other.. like what the-?! He should have settled it.. leaving somebody like that just leaves them thinking. and thinking in THAT situation is to 95% negative, so that you shield yourself from hurt and disappointment.

Something tells me this is not going to be a good idea! Poor Zoe :(

awwwww.. I can't get over how cute that last part was. c:
I'm so happy you updated!

This story makes me feel all so cutesy inside, you know?

And it reminds me of the story a friend of mine told me. Only, it was true and just. Yeah. Anyhow, this story. Must update, soon. OKay?

I CANNOT BE CONSTRUCTIVE MIBBA BECAUSE I LOVE THIS STORY TOO MUCH!

:)

I LOVE YOUR STORY OH MY GOD

Are you fucking kidding me? How pathetic are you? You copied the whole two first chapters from a different story. Who knows if you copied more, I'm not gonna waste my precious time reading your crappy story. This is just plain stupid, you extremely lack originality, you should be ashamed of calling yourself a writer. If you're gonna come up with some story at least have the decence to have an original idea, that's the whole point of writing isn't it? You sicken me. You should be ashamed of all this comments, oh this poor people saying how original you are, you're just a pathetic plagiarist. 

People who don't believe me? http://stories.mibba.com/read/427396/Seashells/1/
That's the link to the original story by Smoothies, it was finished on march 27th, 2 days before you started this pathetic copy of yours.

Still don't believe me? Our little writer friend even recommended the original story.
http://www.mibba.com/journals/read/297846/
(scroll all the way to bottom)

You might argue you added your personal ideas, but you still copied the whole story structure not to mention wording in the beginning. A story is supposed to be completely original, it's okay to take others as inspiration but this is just sad plagiarism.

LOL This is so freaking cute omgg haha. I didn't even realize that I finished reading the whole story haha c: I love the picture that you used with the kid as superman. Awesome story hon c:

This is a cute story. Love it. I know how she feels and I sympathize with her. -.- I've subscribed and I can't wait to read more!!!

Loved the updates! You're doing a great job. :)
This is such a cute story. :)

First, I have to say I love the layout for the story. It reflects the cuteness of the characters. I like how we learn more about the characters as the story goes. I like that you haven't really described them physically so it leaves the reader to make it up in their mind. I could spot a few mistakes here and there but nothing major. I loved that the story is so typical (falling in love with you best friend) yet I can't quite picture what went wrong in their relationship. I also liked the fact that its set in a different context than what I'm used to reading, although I could relate with some of the situations. I'm excited to keep reading and find out what happens so I'm subscribing :D

Instead of reading just 3 chapters, I read the entire thing and all I can say was that this story was lovely. You've got good writing structure, you're not veering off topic and you're not using unrealistic fillers; you're writing these letters in a very straight to the point fashion. The time line is very well done with no awkwrd gaps, and I just think this is great!

I remember how we looked at the sky and how desperately we wanted to fly.: My favourite line by far. I adored this so much and so much imagry came to mind when I read this. You must add another chapter soon, very lovely!

hello,

this is for comment swap. i must state by saying that i frequently comment swap for this story, so i will start where i have left off.

i can not express to you how amazing this story idea is and how well it is written. it is almost like puppy love and i love this with all my heart. you are an amazing writer and i hope you continue writing this.

Update soon, love?

AWWWW<3 and my names zoe too xD i want this kind of relationship!!!

Okay, I have to warn you that I am always rambling in the comments I submit and this isn't an exception. And and I'm using my phone at the moment, so I apologize if something sounds weird.

Are you from the Philippines? It's interesting how you used their dialect on some cases. First point.

Anyway, the layout is cute, especially with the picture as the banner. I like the colour match, it comforts my eyes and to me, making a layout as pretty as this is a good thing to attract readers.

At first, I thought this was going to be a fan fiction of small ville, which I never even watch. I loved some idioms that you used that I rarely see in other stories, I forgot which. Since the story was a letter-type, I understand why it was lack of description, not a bad thing, though. As long as it was enjoyable, I am okay with it, and it was. I'm not really the kind of reader who likes to read 13-year-old love stories, but yeah, I enjoyed this one.

I have to admit that I didn't really feel any emotion engulfing me while reading the story but that was until when Jasmine gave Lance the scrapbook. I was like 'wtf why is she giving the same damn thing?' when she told him about the book. It was more irritating when he replied that he loved it instead of just teeny tiny 'like'. Not that I don't like Jasmine or anything, I actually find her interesting because so far she didn't do anything to Zoe, I hope there needn't be a 'yet'. ==,

Chapter 7 was the best of all the chapters in this story so far which made me smile as widely as I could. It was automatically, too. xD It was tacky, but sweet. I like the part when the girls raised the cards spelling 'sorry' for him, it was adorable, even though if I were at Zoe's place, I would feel utterly pissed and embarrassed, I probably would run away, somewhere deserted. And I got confused at first by the fact that she told him he was in the same school as Jasmine but he suddenly was at her school. I'm glad you mentioned the all-girls school by the almost end to explain it.

The best quote to me is when Lance said Zoe was his Lois Lane. xD

About the characters, I have no comment.

Hmm I wonder what happened between the two that made Zoe write the letter.. So, subscribed. :)

By the way, there are some simple grammatical errors throughout the stories which can be corrected after a thorough check. You used the wrong tense at some points and I think once if not twice, you used 'you're' instead of 'your' the wrong way but I guess those were just careless mistakes.

I really like the layout, it is easy on the eyes and neutral tones are always a crowd pleaser.
In the first chapter I noticed you said “… out of my chest.” – I think it would flow much better as “off of my chest” or “out of my head.” XD

I read all the way to chapter four. Your chapters are so short, but that’s ok. I don’t mind. I’m guessing this is a retelling of how she began to fall in love with him? And then what happened to mess it up. It is really sweet so far. At first I thought this was a fan fiction, but I’m not so sure anymore because I’ve only read to chapter four, I’ll keep reading.

I liked that you explained what a mamasko was because I was like, “Qué?” lol

I liked that that chapter was longer and it seems from there on out that they continue to be. As I said before, this is just so sweet.

:)

[dont=impact]Hello...

Well, to start off, yes, I do likey :)
The layout is lovely, I am terrible at layouts so seeing yours made me smile :)
I love the picture, it's adorable.

The paragraphs are short, but if that's your style of writing then it's fine, I do that too sometimes so I shouldn't judge >.>
It's not the most descriptive piece, but it does create good imagery, and is just so cute!

''You're my Lois Lane, Zoe''.

I squeed when I read this.
Overrall, good job! However I think the best friends = LOVE is sweet, but overrated...

I think my heart just broke like twelve times over <3

So I'm going l to admit right now that I'm a massive need and have a massive thing for super heros. I mostly like Batman, but the guy who plays Superman on the movie is way hotter than the guy that playes Bruce Wayne in the Dark Night. So I can work with this lid Lance/Clark Kent. ;)

I basically had a heart attack when I saw the letter was from Lois Lane.

I really enjoy this story! I love the characters and the plot and the set up and... Well everything! It's fantastic! I'm mostly excited to see how we get from this outbreak in the gym to her
writing a letter wondering if he'll even pat attention to her (Which he will because it's Clark Kent and Lois Lane)

My heart just about broke at the birthday party scene with the scrap book thing. I was like "No you're Superman's shitty fan girl. SHE'S LOIS LANE. GET THE HELL IN LINE HOE!"

Ahahaha. Yeah. So. I love your story! This comment was all over the place but I'm on my phone so it hard to edit...and I'm lazy! <3

le Comment Swap!:
THIS WAS SO ADORABLE LIKE PUPPY ADORABLE BUT CUTER, IF THAT'S POSSIBLE. *breathes* Okay, no more yelling. I can use words. At the beginning I was a little iffy, mostly because it was really abstract and I wasn't quite sure what was going on, but that's just my brain. I like stories that jump into action, explain the scene, and then do the back story. I need the face before I can put them to a name.

I love how you've committed to one style of writing and have stuck with the letter-form the whole way. I love the consistency. Also, I like your title and how you put this in a place where everyone can relate. Middle school crushes... Let's not go there. I love how you fleshed out your description of the narrator's relationship with the her bffl, and how they have such good times. I love reading this, but I'm super curious if you'll make a sequel, with, like, his letter back or something. But I think this will do just fine as a stand-alone story.

So, overall, awesome-possum.

It's too good. Too. Good.
No spelling mistakes, really good layout.
Addictive chapters.

Seriously.
It's cruel.

Subscribed :)