July 14th, 2012 at 01:43am
The summary felt more like a prologue in my opinion, and I kind of think it would have been better suited as such.
Two chapters in I'm not certain this is my type of story--mind you its extremely well written and I haven't seen any errors I see the need to point out to you. So that was a nice breath of fresh air.
I don't know how I feel about your MC yet. Her interactions in the first two chapters really haven't given me much of a hint to her personality. Except it almost seems like she thinks she's above them at points when she's conversing with her saviors? It's not exactly flattering but then again it more or less is a first glance.
But this is really well written. So kudos!
Like the comment below, I wasn't sure this was my type of story. Then again, I really have no clue what my type of story is.
Your grammar and writing style are amazing, and I'm quite envious of it. After reading the first chapter, which also hook me in, I will definitely subscribe, so I can come back and read even more.