Fixed in the Shadows - Comments

Liked chapter two, the guys a a little out of character but it always takes awhile to hit a stride :) great work.

comment swap brought me here and I'm glad, I love the Avengers. Only thing I would have suggested in more backstory at the beginning, more of a sense of who she is other then that I like how its going so far! :)

Comment swap brought me here.

But i have glanced at your story before as I'm a Marvel fan and I'm currently writing an Avengers one myself.

Your layout, once you reach the story is quite bland, and personally I prefer the writing in a neater, compact area.
Your actual writing, and this is going from Chapter One is very ' I did this. I did that' and I know that sounds harsh but it does improve slightly during the next couple of chapters so I think having a look back and adding some more description/ insight into the characters thoughts would be beneficial :)
Good luck with your writing <3

I honestly have never seen The Avengers, the individual movies, or even read the comics. The only Marvel franchise I actually like is X-Men. Im More of a DC Comics kinda gal. So really, im going to have to pass judgement on your writing alone.
For me, it moves to fast. like, WAAAY too fast. I can barely follow whats going on, if I ever got a book that moved that fast, id throw it away before the first chapter was over.
However, chapter 5 is really well written. I enjoy how that was written.
:)

I honestly have never seen The Avengers, the individual movies, or even read the comics. The only Marvel franchise I actually like is X-Men. Im More of a DC Comics kinda gal. So really, im going to have to pass judgement on your writing alone.
For me, it moves to fast. like, WAAAY too fast. I can barely follow whats going on, if I ever got a book that moved that fast, id throw it away before the first chapter was over.
However, chapter 5 is really well written. I enjoy how that was written.
:)

I was brought here by Comment Swap, so to be honest I'd never go here myself. So my judging will be out of how you write :)

Summary: It's so confussing! I'm so sorry but it really is. If I ever got to a story and the summary were like this, I would immediately go back again and forget about the story, but that's something that can be changed, so no harm there, though I really don't like it. I like how it's written, though I'd say that what you're writing about the characters, should be in the character-section not in the summary.

Chapter one: I like that you're both detailed yet it's not a boring chapter without any dialogue. As I said I'm not into The Avengers at all, but I do like it so far :)

Chapter two: Too many dialogues, sorry :)

Chapter three: Again a little too much dialogue, though the end is better detailed with dialogue.

Chapter four: I liked this chapter, though I think it got quite boring in the end.

Chapter five: I like your writing in this chapter, so no comment on that :)

I don't hope you got mad, but yeah this is just my opinion.

I've never seen the Avengers or really any of the individual movies some of them have. So I'll just have to judge it on the writing alone. I like the way you've built Skylar as a character and that you give information along in the story so that people like me won't be confused. :) I also like the simplicity of the writing.

Hey, I really love this story. I've always been obsessed with comics and superheroes and what not. So now that you're writing a story about the avengers is absolutely amazing, I'm excited to read more.(:

Another comment swapper here, and like some of the others I don't know much about the Avengers. This didn't really bother me too much while reading though. I especially loved the line " So who broke the world this time? ". I found it very interesting that you chose to write in present tense but it was a nice change. You have a very clear sense of who your characters are and I love the layout. The plot is really solid and I wish you the best of luck continuing with this. =)

One, I love the Avengers and have been reading the fan fictions on here like crazy so kudos to you. I also like how with Skylar you created her as her own badass character. She was not just a master assasian or something like Black Widow, but she was "the worlds best hacker" and she was mutated somehow. I love the originality on that one. Oh and it made me happy that there was the little drama in there between Skylar and Natasha... Keep writing so I can keep reading and being happy :)

The comment swap brought me here. I must admit that I probably wouldn't have read this otherwise since I don't know much about ost of the Avengers! Some more background of the different characters would be helpful for the average reader that don't know much about the Marvel world to help them better understand all the backstories.
Other then that it was a very interesting read and I can't wait to see where you go from here!

i really like this idea, its so unique and since there are so many cliches in writing all over - i love it! And you have tumblr in the story, how can you go wrong?! I'm really, really curious as to what the main character is all about, she seems like a hardass and interesting in general. I'm sorry that cI can't comment too much on the characters, I don't know much about them! Maybe do a bit of background through the talking - a little more - to let people who don't know too well about it? But, you defenitly know how to hook someone from the beginning of a story, and I do like it :) - you have a great idea gonig here. The only thing I would suggest fixing is your choppy sentences, thats all! Congrats on the writing talent :)!

I don't think I would have read this if it wasn't for comment swap, but now I'm interested. All chapters so far are good and you have good word flow. The plot is very interesting and I'm psyked that you took in a new character! I also like that she have all these powers, and I'm curious as to what they are. Keep up the good work! :)

omg yes Loki <3 XD I really like this story, I love the dialogue and the different descriptions. I love Tumblr :D I like where this is going, I have a good feeling about it. It's still in the beginning process so there's alot you can do with it. I look forward to more :D

It's really weird that comment swap brought me here because I was looking for something related to the avengers in hopes that Thor would make an appearance so maybe I'll get lucky with this story?

This is good, update soon please:}

Comment Swap has brought me to many great stories. This one is really good. I probably wouldn't have even considered reading this.

It's fantastic though, really it is. It caught my attention quick. Nice use of dialogue. :)