Late Dawns and Early Sunsets - Comments

Comment swap. First of all, original plot is original. Awesome job thinking about the MCR stuff and the scifi stuff and then rolling everything up into one incredibly epic story. Unlike what seems to be the majority of commenters, I absolutely love the amount of detail you put in. Keep writing! ^_^

Comment swap sent me here. My Chemical Romance is just, amazing first off. You have WAY too much detail, this can be a bad thing. Your writing is really good, but you love that detail. I would tone that down a little. I think that plot is pretty good. I like how you foreshadow on some things. This is really good, I'd just work on the detail. Continue the story for your fans!

So uh. Comment swap sent me here.
Yay it's an MCR fanfiction! Yeah.
Okay, so I like the plot, it's really good and you should keep going on it. But your writing is kind of... too much detail can be a bad thing sometimes. I'm not insulting your writing or anything, but sometimes you have too much detail. Like, instead of "I put my paints up, hung my clothes up. I then walked over and put away my CDs, then I collapsed on the bed." you could just say "I put my CDs, clothes and paints away, then fell into a fretful slumber on my lumpy mattress" Like, do you get what I mean? Sorry if I'm not making sense. You don't have to change anything if you don't want to.
But really, I do like the plot and keep going with it!

It sucks that Frank had to change his life so quickly :/
Great update!

omg i feel so bad for frank..</3 but i love the story so far!

omg i feel so bad for frank..</3 but i love the story so far!

omg i feel so bad for frank..</3 but i love the story so far!

omg i feel so bad for frank..</3 but i love the story so far!

I realli like this idea :D excited to see what happens!!

Wow. Umm I just...Wow. Sooo did not expect this! :O
This story is awesome! OMG! I love your brain!!!!! <3

This is a really great story! I love how it's not just a normal fanfic, it's got a proper fantasy plotline as well xD

Ah, I love this story, it's got a mysterious/suspenseful- nothing like I've read before!
Aww, I sense some foreshadowing in the future, I hope I don't cry eek.
Loved this, more soon please!

xo

I really like this story!! It's so different from the ones I've read, I love the characters and the way you write!
Frank, what are you exactly? lol

I love the new layout! And this story is really awesome. You are doing a great job.

I know you guys liked the last layout, but do you like the new one? xo katie

Okay, so i've been sent here from Comment Swapper and i really really love My Chemical Romance my favourite pairing is FRERARD!!! This story, although not finished is amazing! I mean wow... You have a great start to what could be a really good story. Practically everyone else has mentioned it but yeah, your layout is amazing. Really easy to read, simple but effective. I love your attention to detail. The story title is amazing as well. Early Sunsets Over Monroeville for me is there best song of the first album so :D Recommened and Subscribed!! Update as soon as possible because i honestly cant wait to read more...

I have to say, I really am not a fan of MCR fanfiction, but your descriptions are amazing. The attention to detail actually kept me reading and and got my interest. Awesome introduction, I've got to say. I could actually imagine the scenes you lay out, as if I were actually there. And this may be random, but I admire your chapter titles. They're really subtle about the content of your chapter, and honestly just roll off the tongue nicely. I also like your layout, because it's clean and easy to read, which I have to say is a great relief. Another thing that I enjoyed was the bluntness of your characters. It's really natural. There isn't any feigned depth to them. It did seem a little choppy at first, but then I realized it actually fits. The focused characters are teens and our thoughts are usually really jumbled and don't really flow. I do wish that the progression of the story would've been a bit slower, but I can see where you're going with the short-ish chapters. Good job, really. If I were into mcr I would definitely be reading this :)

From Comment Swap just so you know. So let just me start off by saying that honestly I'm not that big a fan of MCR, not in the sense I don't like them I've just never gotten into them. However, even still this was a very enjoyable and actually look forward to reading more.
First of all, like others have said your layout is so memorizing is a good word for it; the layout alone drew me into the story. On top of that, you're a great writer!
Since I'm not particularly familiar with the pairing/fandom I read this as more of an original fiction, even still it did not disappoint. You write with incredibly detailed imagery and description that puts the reader completely in the story and makes it so, I can't really find the word for it, but fun and almost interactive. Your writing has definitely made me want to read more of this story and your writing.
To be critical, all I really have is that sometimes the story can seem almost....stiff? But I think that's just you're style of writing and rearranging a few lines could make it flow a little bit better, but even still it didn't take away from the plot or description at all. And other than that, that's all I have.
Great job, and keep it up!!

Hey I’m also from comment swap. I was a huge MCR fan back in the day and I still like them. I have to agree with the comment below. The layout definitely caught my eye, I dunno why but I really liked the bright red chapter’s text. It made me drawn to the link and made me think about Gerard’s hair ha-ha. I really liked it and you’re a great writer =)

Hello! Coming here thanks to the comment swap ^^
I'm not a big My Chemical Romance fan, so I don't know much about their background. I only know some stuff about them, so I was afraid that I wouldn't be able to understand the story because of not having that knowledge about the members.
The first thing that caught my attention was the layout. It's really good and it really made me want to read the story. I know that's something stupid to say, but it's true! The layouts are important as well, they catch the readers attention.
I also liked how I didn't need to know much about them to understand the story. I loved how Frank and Gerard met, and how Frank acted so rude towards Gerard, in the beginning. I also found it really cool how you made Gerard realize that he was gay. And I also like how you make Frank act differently and confuse Gerard, like when he's being an ass to him, like in Art class and then sweet, like after the beating.
You made a really great job in these chapters, so far :D
Keep up the good writing :) You've got a new subscriber.