February 1st, 2014 at 08:27pm
Here from le comment swap.
Well to be completely honest, I'm not really into Panic, but that didn't stop me from enjoying your story, I didn't find myself lost and trying to figure out some inside joke or anything, so kudos for that! I like your layout, it's very pretty, the banner you've used is cool and it's definitely readable, which is always a plus. You are so descriptive, I mean the way you write is almost effortless, but it flows so well. The way you tell the story saying 'half empty smiles' of the way you have short sentences out on their own, it's something I wouldn't think of doing, but it adds so much to the story. You have such strong emotions in this, but you write them in the simplest of ways. I feel for Ryan, I really do. I can see that he was trying, but it's almost as if he was getting nowhere... Anywho, very well done!
Yay for Ryan You have ruined me as always
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