Great chapter. The emotions :'( sobs...I can't wait to see what happens next though. This secret??? Ahhhhh....cliffhanger. I need to know. So happy you have updated though
@ ebony_goddess Thank you! I'm really sad they weren't as close in Jr. High/High School because they would have made the perfect couple! But good things are in store...
I really loved this chapter so much, the cuteness was just wow...MINDBLOWING! I always enjoy it when you talk about their past. They were really close. They just had to grow up didn't they :'(
@ January Rose Yeah, I haven't been on this for a while. Was having a few laptop problems but they have been resolved. Will be updating my own story soon as well. Missed you too lol :) and I know. The mean characters are always the hardest to write. Gotta think of all the bad schemes they are going to come up with and stuff. I totally understand.
@ ebony_goddess Hey!!! Thanks for commenting! I haven't heard from you in a while... is everything okay? Missed you!Thank-you! Ben was a little bit hard to write, so I'm glad my efforts paid off. I know, I feel so bad for Emily.
I loved the way Ben was written. He is like the antagonist everyone wants dead. That is a good thing. Not everyone can do that ;) This was just brilliant, but really sad :( poor Emily.
The story is going well so far. I can imagine Ben raping her because he's that evil, did I say that I hate his attitude? Yup, I do and now you know.
For your writing style, I suggest you write your numbers in words and not digits. It's more pleasing to the eye and is much formal.
On your last update, I was partly confused with PLAN A and PLAN B. You recently wrote that there was a plan b but everything was going accordingly. I think you were referring to part b of plan a, you know?
The whole plan was pretty rushed, it either could have been longer or should have been explained better.
As for the personality of Ben, I think he was a bit exaggerated with Emily for possibly "killing" him when she just bumped into him. If I were to comment on his attitude, I say he was childish. It was pretty unrealistic to me.
I wasn't also sure why from the first part of your story the format was left and the second part's format was in the center. Was there something you wanted to imply?
Other than that, I look forward to what Emily was say to Jake after she thought he raped her. :)