Tallulah - Comments

I will write a comment for every chapter I read.
I've read only the 1st one so far and I think it's quite interesting. I thought that for the most part, it was well-written. The word/letter "I" is abundant. Well, it is in first-person.
It's enjoyable and it reminds me of the novel, Their Eyes Were Watching God.

WAIT
YOU CHANGED ADDIE TO MATT GOODE
OH MY GOD NO I'M DYIHNG YOU STOP THIS RIGNT NOW BEE I WON'T BE ABLE TO HANDLE IT BC I LOVE MATT GOOD OH MY GOD IN THAT MOVIE WITH MANDY MOORE I JUST OH GODFESTIVALS MUSIC EUROPE SECRET SERVICE GOODBYE
and omg the least i could do is give you my never ending support
it's like investing in One Direction u know i'm guaranteed to have my heart broken?????

WAIT
YOU CHANGED ADDIE TO MATT GOODE
OH MY GOD NO I'M DYIHNG YOU STOP THIS RIGNT NOW BEE I WON'T BE ABLE TO HANDLE IT BC I LOVE MATT GOOD OH MY GOD IN THAT MOVIE WITH MANDY MOORE I JUST OH GODFESTIVALS MUSIC EUROPE SECRET SERVICE GOODBYE
and omg the least i could do is give you my never ending support
it's like investing in One Direction u know i'm guaranteed to have my heart broken?????

OOOOOOOH PERCYYYYY ;)))))
oh my, he's a sweetie pie, isn't he? /swoon
omg when i read the first sentence about Rachel playing matchmaker i misread the context and i thought Rachel was using my girl Tally and i was like biTCH U BEST BE GOING AWAY
but then i read that it was matchmaking and i squealed and then i was like bITCH U BEST BE STAYING U KNOW U AN YO BROTHA
PETEBERT TEACHING HER SELF DEFENSE
YOU STOP THIS RIGHT NOW OH MY GOODNESS
I CAN'T DO THIS
PERCY
NO STOP OMG
NO BOY
YOU UGH
IHYSM
I LIKED YOU
I LIKED YOU, YOU SLOPPY KISSER OF A MAN NAMED AFTER THE HOTTEST DEMIGOD ON THE PLANET
omg Albert
bert half of Petebert
u just get Tallulah ugh ilysm
#PETEBERT

OH MY GOD
BAD BEFORE
REALLY BAD NOW
i totally thought it was like, bad bad and i was so worried
MAXINE EMILY
KENNEDY GEORGE
i'm in love w/ dat name tho omg kennedy like love me pls
u a franz now let's be franz
w/ benefits
when ur of age obvi
i can wait bc i can tell i will lysm
SASSIEST KIDS THO SRSLY THEY REALLY WILL BE
AND THEY'LL BE FLUENT IN FRENCH, ENGLISH, AND SASS

AWH I JUST WANNA HUG YOU TOO
I'm eating cereal rn, but I would've screamed and had an aneurism when I saw that you updated if not for the spoon in my mouth. Ugh. This story is my baby, too ~~ it's my favorite thing on this site right now.
Seriously. 4 srs
I EVEN PAUSED EATING TO READ THE UPDTE OK
I mean I'm glad it's not soggy or anything (cause I hate that) but omfg, I just couldn't multitask when Sassvannah and Albert's babies were involved?!?!?!!!!!
Anyways, cereal aside, i loved the update (that's not new) and ugh I'm just dying here because Tate is in the descrip?? And oddly enough I'm listening to Lana del Rey rn and I thought that to be fitting to Tallulah's soft lil narrative and man, how is it that you always update on teen wolf nights? Lol, thank you for tiding me over until TW comes on (and distracting me from pesky summer hw, but shh, its ok)

Also uhm, mixed babies are so cute ugh (most babies of any ethnicity/race are) but omg, they're babies are probably so cuyuuuute. I also cannot wait for the next chapter

This is honestly one of the most stunning stories I've ever read on this website. I'm seriously blown away. The first chapter in itself was just incredible and the last line left me all . I was hooked straight away. And then I love that you jumped back in time and explain Tallulah's childhood and the difficulties she struggles with.

My favourite thing about this is the ease in which you describe her innocent nature in the face of some ugly topics. The way you deal with racism and her just not getting why people are different really hit me hard, because it's so true. Tallulah is such a sweetheart. I really like that you hint at things in such a subtle way without changing your character's persona.

I'm really interested in finding out how her life ended up the way it did.

I LOVE THIS SO MUCH YOU HAVE NO IDEA.

Gah! I was hoping they'd have a baby!!
OH they're so cute, I just want to punch it off them - but in a loving way, of course.
And Tallulah, aw yeah girl, you're learning the art of sassiness and I am loving it.
Growing up to be like your mama - get it gurlll
But oh man, I just love how this is all laying down.
Setting things up for Tallulah like you are - mm, I love it!
Oooh and I just can't wait for the Addie chapters to start coming!
I love all this and these chapters are so amazing, but I can tell I'm really gonna love the Addie chapters.
So excited!!

SASSVANNAH
IM DONE BEE
DONE
AND OMG PETER IT WAS ONLY A MATTER OF TIME BB
I mean I really adore Peter as a character and brother ok, he was protective adorable and he loves Isobel omg
THAT LAST SENTENCE - HER UNDOING ?? Oh gosh, Tallulah bb. I love Tallulah as a narrator like girl narrators on here can be so damn annoying during first person but Tallulah is so damn adorable uh and her eye for detail and her naiivety(sp?), it's just so much better than the way other authors choose to write from their character's view (if that even makes sense??)
It's okay bbygurl some people are afraid of change and happen to be ignorant af they gone learn smh
AND ALBERT WAS LIKE ATTICUS FINCH ALL UP IN THERE GO AHEAD BBY. No one can deny themselves some dark chocolate
Ugh.
Albert and Sassvanah forever pls.
But uhm, have I told you how much I love all the detail in this story????
It's like blowing my mind everytime you update and it's jut so wonderful and planned and I feel like you could so self publish and sell and tallulah
Most stories that don't have an instant love plot or romance appearance or whatever, can be a bit boring but this story is just so amazing that I don't even care what you write about if it's savannah and Albert or Peter and Isobel or Tallulah growing up or winnona being insufferable, I would read it! And I'm a sap who mostly reads romance and can't stand things dragging out but man, this is perf. It makes me want to write a recc blog just so I can recc it (but I am ultimately very freaking lazy)
So yeah, that's my rant about this amazing lil thing you got goin' on here.

YAY OMG I'M SO HAPPT ALBERT AND PETER ARE GOOD FRIENDS AWWWWWWW
THEY FRANZ NOW ;))))
oh my gosh
they bought a pretty house in the suburbs together i'm freaking out
RACIST LIL SHITS NEEDA GO UGH THEY PISS ME OFF SO MUCH
NO WAY
IS MOMMA SASSVANNAH PREGGERS
I KNEW IT OMFG YAYYYYY
oh my god
I'm so ready for what's coming up in Tallulah's future ooooh shit

*screams into the sunset*
I'm so in love with this story, you have no idea.
I love that Savannah found Albert.
But gurrl, Winona need to SHUT IT! Hypocritical little whiney - oooh, I'm not happy with you.
BE HAPPY FOR YOUR MOTHER!
Ugh, all of my feelings were basically summed up by vices down there, so basically second what she said.
I just really freaking love this story and I flip out when I see an update, so there's that.

omg
"OOH LA LA, SAVANNAH ET ALBERT!" i'm dying
Winona ugh bitch it's survival of the fittest okay
you better put up or shut up
ok ya Savannah threatening is not bueno parenting you don't want your kids (cough Winona) to hate you more than they already do (basically only Winona)
YEAH WINONA
YOU CRY
YOU LIL CRY BABY SOURPUSS
omg Grandma ilysm ok u perfect just the way u are
Grandma is the only one with her head screwed on right lulz \m/
WHOA WINONA GIRL
DON'T BE A DRAMA QUEENY BITCH OMG
YOU DO NOT SPEND YOUR THANKSGIVING WITH A COUPLE WHO YOU HAVE NOTHING TO THANK FOR (was that phrased correctly? i'm not all too sure LOL i'm too angry at Winona rn)
ok idk if it's just me but when Mama Savannah says, "Don't cuss at me. I told you the next time you cussed at me I was gonna do somethin' crazy, didn't I?" I kinda lost that old 60's vibe???? just a lil bit though!
I THINK I LOVE KATIE OMG
IT SEEMS HER HEAD IS ON RIGHT TOO
omg Simone no don't cry ilysm pls don't cry
omg they all call him Monsieur crying
if u were not aware i say omg a lot ily Bee :*
LOL RONNIE U SUCK
OMFG
"WHITE OR DARK MEAT"
"I'D LIKE DARK, PLEASE"
YOU STOP THIS RIGHT NOW WITH YOUR PUNS OH MY GOD
I'M DYING HERE RIGHT NOW
STOP THIS
WHO GAVE YOU THE RIGHT TO BE SO HILARIOUS OMG I'M ROLLING I'M SCREAMING GOODBYE DONE WITH THIS STORy
omg Mista Monsieur Franz i am so soz for ur wife but guess wAT U GOT SAVANNAH NOW i still shed a tear for u though sry for being so insensitive
PETER WHY ARE YOU BEING SO SNARKY TONIGHT I DON'T THINK I LIKE YOU RN
DON'T BE A LIL BUTT
ok so if i didn't hate Winona before i really hate her now like she's such a bitch
EXCUSE YOU
MISTA FRANZ IS NOT A CREEPY FRENCH GUY OKAY HE'S TRYING HIS BEST HERE
YES
YES
YES I AM SO HAPPY THAT SAVANNAH GAVE HER THE FUCKIN' SASS BC SHE DESERVED THAT SHIT
omg
teen wolf's #1 is right ya

WARNING: this is a long ass comment be prepared

YOYOYO you know the drill bebs —
They didn't go out on Sundays, because that when we went to church and had dinner as a family. — I think you're missing a "was" between "that" and "when".
He moved her — "here"?
But I meant someone — idk is it "meet" or did I just not process this right I'm not sure on this.

What's up with Winona like jeez qrl be happy for your mum why don't you? And ugh Peter is such a brother like I wish I had a brother I love the relationship between Savannah and Peter like you can tell they love each other even if they don't approve of each other and ugh Grandpa and omfg Grandma I love her like what even I can't coherent but "what the—get down here!" omg and also the sentence after that about Winona should be a separate paragraph I think.

Also I just realised this but I absolutely love how Savannah is back to normal now and just so full of sass like mhmhmmm qrlfrann. And actually OH MY GOD THIS FAMILY ABBIE WATCHU DOING QRL WINONA 'DID I STUTTER' LIKE WHAT and seriously what's wrong with this girl.

And ooh Katie!! I like her name. I like the name Katie. And I like Katie. And Tallulaaaahhh such a cutie pie and why hasn't shit gone down yet I can feel it in the air. And ugh poor Simone bby let me hug you <3

Omg "momma cackled" what and Albertttttt such a cutie doing his homework god he's so nice what is gOING TO HAPPEN ugh ugh Albert just stahp <3 and GO RONNIE (dancing for him too ok). Okay now you're just confusing me with all these people sitting everywhere and that joke I think I understand it LOL I'm just like a Tallulah.

oh. oh my god. oh my god that is just so sad. Poor lil Albert. You go Grandma. YOU GO SAVANNAH "APOLOGISE" and oh my god poor Albert :c and ugh Winona just go away okay I don't need u here jUST GO AND BE WITH GODDAMN JULIANNE (rhyme, what) and yes thank you I teach courses in sassology luv me

qrl
you didn't close one of your italics bbcode properly
but other than that just let me get to the good part: I love this family and tbh I don't know what to feel about Albert yet. Half of me thinks shit is gonna go down and he's going to be a coward and ditch the lovely Savannah Mae (not sure why he'd do that but there you have it) and the other half thinks that he's gonna take Savannah and Tallulah away from their family and start a new life~
and ugh I bet Peter's like some kind of prophet
bet he can predict the future whooo ~ o . o ~
and I just absolutely love the relationships and interactions between the family and I want to know more about Albert Franz AHEM AHEM

do you even know what happened tonight
I missed Teen Wolf
I missed Teen Wolf
and now I'm dying a little but inside bc I'm trying to ignore all of dem spoilers on tumblr ugh
BUT WINONA GIRL
WHY YOU CRYIN
YO DADDY SUCKS AS AN INDIVIDUAL IN SOCIETY
HE IS A CHEATIN SCUMBAG AND MR. FRANZ IS FINE AS HELL
why can't we be franz why can't we be franz why can't we be franz why can't we be fra-anz????
AW GURL IT'S OKAY IFYOU DIDN'T REPLY ((((:

OKAY I'M SUPPOSED TO BE WATCHING TEEN WOLF
BUT MY MOM UGH
SO IM JUST SITING HERE CATCHING UP AND LAWD
I LOVE SAVANNAH MAE SO MUCH
LIKE OMFG ILYSM
SHES SO SASSY AND PETER'S LIKE THE BEST LIL BRO EVA LIKE WOO
"Hold my stuff—hold my stuff, Peter!" Momma exclaimed, shoving her purse and earrings at her brother. "This little girl's fixin' for a beatdown."
I CAN"T I CAN'T EVEN
THIS IS SO GOOD
SO
GOOD.
like jfc, this is something I expect to pick up from Barnes & Nobles or the library and read in the car when I don't want to listen to my siblings - it's that good. I don't even care that this isn't really a tallulah based romance right now or you're doing a lot of history it's just so freaking perfect like why. I love your writing style so much and just the narrative you write in is just so crisp and clear and descriptive *fangirls*
Ugh. I love all of them (except for Tallulah's daddy and his special friend) and Mr. Franz is adorable, dear lawd ooh, go 'head and get it Savannah Mae
I just love her whole family and Savannah is just so perf like I can't even - I can't.

Update soon, 'kay? 'Cause your writing is amazing and I love it and I also really love everything you write so, yeah. I can't wait to see what happens with Tallulah's future and Savannah and Albert

damn Savannah Sassy Mom 2k13 kinda
oH STOP THIS TYLER POSEY ON TOP NO YES I'LL HAVE HIM UPS-ed TO MY HOUSE BUT NO YOU REALLY SHOULDN'T HAVE OH BOY
aw Peter u adorable lil shit ily
MISTA FRANZ U BETTA HOP ON THAT
AND BITCHES AT MACY'S SAVANNAH IS A STRONG, INDEPENDENT WOMAN WHO DON'T NEED NONE OF YOUR SHIT
oh and so what if she's black DON'T HATE HER CAUSE U AIN'T HER

Ugh I absolutely love how Peter and Savannah still act like brother and sister even though they're adults because you usually don't see that in stories and yup love their dynamic it's so fabulous. And I love that Tallulah likes math because loads of Mibba stories are like "I'm artsy fartsy poetic!" which isn't bad yanno but this is nice because she's good at art and maths and she's smart I hope she becomes speshul like a doctor (ahem) or something. ;)

p.s. should I just change my username to lungsass or something wait omfg that actually sounds awful hahahaha

Ooh, I just love sass. It's my favorite thing ever.
And oh man Peter, Oh, la, la. Just stop being so hilarious.
Then Savannah, yeah, go get 'em tiger >.<

QRL WHAT IS WITH HER DADDY'S SPECIAL FRIEND LIKE NO
she is such a bitch I hate her already so that's when you know your writing is good because I hate that character yup
and I adore Peter jussayin'
and um yes I am currently adoring Mr Franz right now he is like the epitome of perfection and I hope he's good to Tallulah's mum. -watching you-