Tallulah - Comments

omg baby Tallulah is so precious can I have her I'll love her forever I promise
and I love Peter
he's wonderful oh goodness
MR. FRANZ LET ME LOVE YOU

*whispers aggressively* I am completely in love with this story already!
The prologue really peaked my interest to start, and I just love how you're going way back into Tallulah's childhood first, and explaining everything in depth, instead of just mentioning those things to make the parallels (if that made any sense how I worded it).
I fell like I could leave a better comment because this story so deserves one, but I really just can't put my thoughts and appreciations of this story into words that make much sense.
Either way, I'm loving where this story is headed and the direction you're taking it in. And I'm so excited to see how everything plays out.

I don't know man. I love this. I love this so much.

omg okay I really love this
you are wonderful

UM EXCUSE U BILLIE
YOU HAVE NO RIGHT TO COME STOMPING IN HERE AND MESSING UP THIS FAMILY
YA BISH
AND YOUR HOMEWRECKING BITCH IS NO BETTER THAN YOU
omg Lullah girl I am so proud of you
o man ily Peter u a ~good soul~

OOOOOH SHIT
YOU BROUGHT EVAN PETERS INTO THIS AW SHIT

Holy, that crazy intense prologue though.

I love the way you've written this so far. You've stayed true to the whole Southern feel you've got going on, and it feels really real and..honest, I guess is a good word to describe it, despite the fact that the story is about cheating assholes.

You've written the characters fantastically, too. 5 year olds wouldn't understand anything about cheating or why they were yelling or any of that, and you wrote that really well. I also really like Peter, he seems like a nice guy and I hope he doesn't turn out to be a jerk like the rest of them seem to be.

The names are all great too, they fit the story really well.

I'm excited to see where you go with this!

I definitely like Peter. He seems like such a genuine guy and I can almost imagine him being kind of like this father figure to Tallulah. Or at least I hope he's a better role model to her than her own father seems to be like.

I loved the way that you ended this too. I'm interested to see if (and how) this affects Tallulah in the future. I'm assuming it's part of what caused her to shoot cheating-fireman-evil-guy but we'll see!

You've got some beautiful imagery in this chapter, especially the little bit about the cheating. You wouldn't expect a five year old to understand cheating in the relationship sense and I think you've captured that fabulously.

This is a very well-written story and I'm really excited to read what happens next!
Keep up the good work, darling! :3 cannot wait for the next update!

AW I THINK I LOVE PETER A LOT ACTUALLY
BUT UGH I COMPLETELY FEEL FOR TALLULAH GIRL I AM SO SORRY
ILY GIRL THO
U DESERVE BETTER THAN YOUR GOOD-FOR-NOTHING-BUT-SAVING-HOUSES-ON-FIRE-CHEATING-BOYFRIEND/FIANCEE

N'aw thank YOU for the shout out I feel loved ♥ ♥ ♥

AND okay words can't really describe how much I loved this chapter but I actually read the chapter title before I read the chapter and I was like oooh, a flashback! And you totally delivered seriously.

(btw Peter is now my favourite uncle, too. ♥ Hahahaha "It's probably because your father is a lazy, cheating bastard. Don't tell them I said that, now. That's between you and me." BEST. And the bit after that, that is just gorgeous writing right there.)

Also I adoooore the names. Seriously. I love how all of the sisters have "Mae" in their names and the aunts as well, and I love the grandparents' names, and I love the dialogue between the parents, and everything is just so REALISTIC even the mild descriptions like I don't even need to know what the kitchen looks like. I wish someone had "roared" something instead of "shouted" but whatever it was like everything was happening in my head.

This really does sound amazing so far! I'm a sucker for anything remotely crime related and even from the summary, I could tell that this was going to be good. Like a few of the other comments have said, I'm really enjoying the fact that you've set this in the '70's, because I think this sort of thing would have more shock value in that time. Not that it wouldn't now, but you get a lot of gun-related crime and domestic abuse is always heavy in the news, I don't think it was as publicised as it was back then. The fact that she shot her husband when he's heavily pregnant is another reason why this is so interesting. I don't think single parents were as common back then either, so that's another part that hopefully the time setting will play in.

The main character herself is really interesting. She does seem overly calm about the murder, so I'm really interested to see why she's not completely freaking out. I hope that's something that you use later on. The way that she bluntly came out with her confession really is pretty awesome and balls-to-the-wall (sorry, I have no other phrases) wicked. I'm really interested to see exactly what caused her to shoot her husband, especially in her pregnant state.

I'm enjoying this so far, and I'll definitely be subscribing. I'm really excited to see where you take this!

Oooh, I love this so far. Firstly, I like that it's in the seventies because the seventies were a rad decade so it should be interesting to read the differences in say, the legal system then as opposed to today's legal system, or the fashion, entertainment, stuff like that. I also like that she SHOT HER HUSBAND and then went to the police about it and was so matter of fact about the whole situation. Like she was so calm and collected as though, oh you know, she does this thing all the time. But I think that her husband just treats her like proper shit (excuse my language), and even though she's thirty eight weeks preggers, she's realising that she needs to do all that she can to protect her child from her husband. Also, I'm interested to see what exactly happened that caused her to shoot her husband.

This is really intriguing so far, and I can't wait to see where you go with this

Man, I can already tell that this is going to be off the fucking chain. I really enjoyed this prologue. The fact that it's set in the 70's is also a nice change. I like it when writers switch it up with settings and time periods instead of the same ol same old. I'm really interested to know what's going on, also. Why did she shoot him? Like, she said he cheated on her, but what lead up to the exact moment in time that she thought that it would be a good idea to shoot her husband when she's 38 weeks pregnant? Shit just divorce him and take all that he's worth and STILL have him paying child support. She obviously doesn't know how to play the game. Anyway, I also want to know what else he's apparently done to her and why the hell she stayed with him if it were that bad. Jeezo. I think that this was a fabulous start and I will be anxiously awaiting an update, gurl.

WAIT OH MY GOD SHE'S PREGNANT WHAT
And I bet all the hot guys have a thing for her because y'know everyone knows that firefighters are hot and if she's gonna end up with lawyer guy who is fiiiiiine yeah. Also I am dying to know what happened and what's going to happen so I really want some more lawyer-Papadopoulos (and I swear I knew someone who had like that same last name omg) moments but I bet she and Addie had some pretty sweet moments too before he turned into a dick (or at least I think he did because why else would she SHOOT HIM HOLY SHIT). Is this one of those awesome redemption stories where people save each other from things (not necessarily burning fires) because that would be so awesome.

OH MY GOD
OH MY GOD SHE SHOT HER HUSBAND
IS THAT LOVED GUY HER LAWYER OMF
OH MY GOD
OH SHIT THIS STORY IS GONNA BLOW MY MIND
gun pun right there btw ooh shit yes I know I'm not funny soz girl
YES I NOTICED MY COMMENT DOES SUM UP THIS STORY LIKE OH MY GOD

OOH SHIT