Baby Doll - Comments

Boom. That is all. The new title threw me for a second, but it fits :)

I am way too hooked! Please update soon!

Woah.
Well...Now I am scared LOL
Damn, Matt...er "CHARLES" is bat shit crazy.
LIKE WHAT THE FUCK!
Getting angry in front of the little girl?
What a fucking asshole. Ugh >:C

Man...I feel really bad for Nicole. Not only is she stuck in this shit but she is getting tossed around and brutally abused. Like shit...

Things are going to get fucking crazy.
Makes me really excited for more.
But the biggest question of all that I must find out later: How is "Charles" the way he is now?

Wow..this is one of the most crazy and unique stories I have ever had the privilege of stumbling across! You are such a talented yet brave writer for being able to publish a story like this one.i know some people have a hard time describing scenarios like these but I give you an A+++++ job hun!
I love the way Matt is played out in this, being all demented and twisted like that, it really sets the mood for it! Especially the whole line "Are you my new mommy?" OH MY GOD THAT WAS SO EPIC! Plus the dressing her up and stuff like a doll, it reminded me kind of like the movie "Dead Silence."
Very good job, you gained a new follower! :D

@ addictedsevenfold.
Hey ! Thanks for that quotation mark thing. I hadn't even noticed. At the end of that sentence I had originally put "or else....." But it looked weird so when I removed that I guess I forgot to put it. Yeah I had wanted to make her stubborn, ya know? A lot of times in kidnap stories the girls are pushovers and don't have any fight. Nothing wrong with that I just wanted to change things up. Thanks for the nice comment! I appreciate it.

Ohh, goodie! Man, that one little line in the summary already has me interested! This is obviously going to be great! (Although, should there be an ending quotation mark?)

The intro scene being on a full night is also a great opener; it's already warning us that something's obviously going to happen. The word isn't 'Lunatic' for no reason, after all. /nods.

Hahaha, I was dying that she was basically sent to go get munchie snacks. xD That's a cute touch! And that's also a nice touch for a car. Yay, Chevy! And that was a very sudden switch in events! I love that you didn't let her see any warning signs or anything, but that she was taken by surprise, as anyone obviously would be.

And, way to make an entrance, Matt! Dressed in black and no introductions but just getting right down to business? Great entrance!

And, oh, that's tough, her having to sit there while he cleans her lower lady parts. Awkward. But I like how she lets her mind wander, and while she doesn't exactly assume the worst, she doesn't assume the best, either. She's realistic. I like that. Although, she's not completely intelligent, either, is she? Snapping at him for not answering her? And about her hair, no less? Yeah, she had to know that was going to piss him off. I'm amazed he didn't kill her right then. And of course he actually goes through on the threat to wash out her mouth with soap. xD

But holy crap, that whole thing with the girl and her asking if she was her new mommy? That shocked me! I wasn't expecting that at all!

Good story, love! It's interesting and unique!

@ Total Nightmare
!!!!! Thank you ever so much for the amazing comment. It made me smile like a fool. I myself enjoy the little girl aspect. Like in a lot of stories it's usually Matt finding out he has a kid or something but I wanted to add in the survival aspect, ya know? Circumstances have come about where he needs some female help to care for his young daughter. Girl , just wait til you find out why and what happened to Valary. >:)

@ RavenArtist93
Omg thanks SO much for this comment! It's totally made my night. I just love the name Charles lol. I just love M.Shads! The soap thing came about when I tried to think outside the box. He could have did the old make her give him a blow job and like.... Make it cruel but I wanted to do something unexpected. Honestly I 'd take a bar of soap over some kidnapper's weiner any day lol! I've got some great ideas for this story so stay tuned. Thanks so much woman !

I must admit that I think "Charles" looks way crazier and psycho cutting her hair, dressing her up and even giving her a bath than in other stories where he's a rapist or a murderer o_o It was really weird envisioning him like that, and it was really awesome as well.
I have to agree with the comment below on the soap part. That was... awful. Just the thought of that torture is awful.
And oh my god, when she was put in that room with the little girl I was just imagining her dressed up like a doll, and then you give that same description of her attire! That last comment from the girl was also creepy as hell. How many mothers has she had before?
I really enjoyed these chapters, and I'm really curious to know what's going to happen next!
You gained a new subscriber :D please update soon!!

I remember reading this a long time ago.
And I remembered how amazing it was because when I read it again today,
I was still thinking the same thing :)

I love how you made the First Person POV for the character because it brought the suspense on to what was going on in her head and I love that.
I knew something was coming when she was bending over for the ice cream because I was like "LADY! HE GONNA GET YA! HURRY YOUR ASS UP! BEND UP." lol
At first I thought ya know, "Charles" was going to do very terrible things to her but it wasn't as bad as I thought...but still damn psycho O_o
And I forgot for a brief second of why he is named Charles... _{because Matt's middle name is Charles, ugh me a dummy}
But damn,
I actually feared him throughout the whole thing!
The part where the soap was forced in the mouth made me cringe by how you greatly detailed it.
I never had that experience of soap in the mouth but I bet its fucking gross haha.

When she was placed in that room with the girl,
I was like... "WHATTTT!" then "OHHHH he wants to find a guardian for the girl (aka mother)"
But then I was like "WELL that is still fucking creepy...and scary."

Maybe he will die down his temper when the girl likes her and she gets along with everyone.
But damn.
I'm eager to know how the whole thing will turn out ;)
I can't wait to read more!
Like shit! Matt is a creeper!
I feel bad for the girl that probably has to put up with that shit D:

@ xMandiblesx
No rush hun <3. You're totatlly welcome. This story is very awesome!!!

@ Matthew Sanders;
Aw, thank you! I need to work on it for sure.

I just read this whole story! I truly love this!! I hope you continue this soon! I'd love to see more of it hun! <4

Hey, thanks! I 'm happy to see people still reading this lol.

Subscribed! So gritty so bad too many feels !

@ psycho_cinderella
Aw, thank you! I shall try to update it soon then. :)

Just come across this story! Have to say I love it so far! So different and unique, really stands out from the rest! Please keep updating, don't just leave it!!

@ saint james.
Aw! Your comment made me smile A LOT! Thanks so much. I do try to make my stories different. Normally it's girl gets kidnapped, guy tortures her or even rapes her and then she automatically falls in love with him lol.

I mean those stories are fine but I wanted to shock people with something different. I have an update in the works so be on the look out!

I am in love with the plot of this story. It is so different and unique from other stories which makes it even more interesting. I did not expect that at all. He has a kid? And I am guessing he is trying to find her a mother. I really hope that you update very soon because I can not wait to read more.

WHAT THE ACTUAL.
That little girl is so cute but terrifying at the same time. I mean, how many new mommies does she get every now and then?! Update this soon, babe. <3333